A Dig in 2 the hole of Destiny note pg 37 - Page 5

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Posted: 12 years ago
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will update 1st chappy soon..and CS will be updated after that😛
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Originally posted by: snowdream

will update 1st chappy soon..and CS will be updated after that😛


jaldi update karo jiji...😭😭
m waiting...😃😃😃
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Originally posted by: princessSonia


jaldi update karo jiji...😭😭
m waiting...😃😃😃

ya sonia...iam about to start writing
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Posted: 12 years ago
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update cs and chappy 1 waiting...
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Character Sketch...

Mrinalini Devi: Rajmata of Devgarh. A strong and poerful women who never changes her decision for what so ever

Maharaj Brijraj singh: Son of Mrinalini devi and Maharaj of Devgarh. A genuine person whose world is round his family.

Menaka Singh: Daughter of Mrinalini Devi ...an arrogant person...

Maya: Daughter of Maharaj Prithvi Singh and Leelavati. wife of Brijraj Singh and mother of Manyata.

Manyata: daughter of Brijraj and maya . She is the crowned princess of Devgrah.

Komal: Princess of Rajatpur...and wife of Brijraj

rest of characters will be introduced in the flow,...so do CS will be updated

Edited by snowdream - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
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awesum character sketch..

waiting for the first one...
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Posted: 12 years ago
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awsum CS jiji...
now plz update first chappy also...!!😛 😃
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Originally posted by: manisha98

awsum CS jiji...

now plz update first chappy also...!!😛 😃

probably 2ni8😃
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Chapter 1



Hum ek doosre se vaada karta hain ki kabhi ek doosre se alag nahi honge. Chahe humari shaadi alag alag parivaaron mein ho, hum hamesha ek doosre se rishta banaye rakhenge...


The 3 friends took vow in front of the lighted fire unknown to the storm about to hit in the future...


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Manyata ye kya battameezi hain..woh aapki hone wali maa hain aur unse aap iss tharah baat nahi kar sakti...


Maa sahib..


Bas kijiye brij...bachpane ka bhi had hoti hain..aaj inki wajah se komal ki parivaar walon ke saamne humme sharminda hona pada..ye hum kabhi bardash nahi karenge..Manyata iss riyasat ki Yuvrani hain ..aur inhe uss seema main rehni hogi..hum inse iss tharah ki battameezi bardash nahi karenge..


Haan manyata aap ek baat acchese samjhiye komal iss mahal mein zaroor aayenge agr aap chahe ya na chahe..iss ghar ka faisla hum karte hain naki aapki samjhi...


Her small eyes filled with tears and she started shivering in fear...


Menaka : maa sahib humari baat maniye toh manyata ko ab boarding school bejna hoga..wahan jaoge toh ye discipline seekenge..


Manyata was more afraid hearing that..hum nahi jayenge she said in a feeble voice..


Rajmata gave a final stare to manyata and left her back with brij..


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Happiness once again came to Devgarh Mahal. It was expecting the new Maharani. All were working in enthusiasm to welcome the new Maharani who was expected to reach anytime soon.There was happiness in each and every member of the house expect that small face which hid herself behind the curtains.


Mahal maids were talking to eachother..


Lady1: Pata nahi ab yuvranisa ka kya hoga..kya nayi maharani inhe apna payenge..


Lady 2: sautheli maa hamesha sautheli hi rehti hain. Mujhe to lagta hain ki woh aate hi beti ko baap se door karenge..


Lady: ab humme kya jo hona hain hone do..hume toh bas apni kaam se matlab rakhni hogi.


Lady: haan bikul...


She ran to her room all dishearted...


looking at her dad's photo her small eyes filled up with tears..


Dad aapne aisa kyun kiya. Aap kyun laa rahe ho unhe..hum nahi chahti ki koi aur humare aur aapke beech aye. Dad unkeliye aaj aap sab ne humme akela chodkar chala gaya. Hume pata hain aaj ke baad har din aap aise hi karenge..neeche sab sahi keh rahe hain...koi humse pyaar nahi karta aap bhi nahi...hum aapse baat nahi karenge katti dad.big kutty...



She slept like that weeping unaware of the time. Suddenly she woke up all feared..again the same night mare she had last ni8..on asking her dad replied that its just the after effect of the story she was told by seemaji, her maid..Infact he even scolded seema for saying such stories to her..Small Manyata could no longer sleep there and moved out of bed to her dad.


Moving out of the room her small footsteps were stopped by her nanny...


Princess aapko iss waqt khamre se bahar nahi nikalna chahiye tha...


Seemaji aap chinda mat kijiye.hum adda ke paas jaa rahe hain..


Seemaji was amazed hearing that...ahh sry princess lekin aap iss waqt unse nahi mil sakti ye rajmata ki hukum hain...aap pls mere saat chaliye..


Seemaji tried to take manyata with her..but in a split of second manyata freed her hands .seemaji aapka koi haq nahi banta iss tharah humse baat karne ki..hum apne faisle khud lete hain..hum apne dad ki paas jaa rahi hoon naki kisi aur ke paas...aur ye mat bhooliye ki hum yuvrani hain...



Seema bowed her head...maaf kijiye princess...


Manyata made a strict face and moved forward to brij's room...


She knocked the door as it was locked..Finally after 2-3 knocks some1 opened the door.She was about to shout at her father that another cold fingers caressed her forehead...


Beta aap ...aayiye andar...b4 manyata could protest she took her in...making her sit at bed.


Beta aap teek toh haina..kya hua aapko..


Within seconds Manyata's face clouded and she drove off those hands from her..The way the elders crushed her small feelings had made her almost uncontrollable..


Khabar daar aapne hume choone ki koshish ki Princess Komal..aap hoti kaun hain humsekuch bhi poochne wali..aap iss khamre main kar kya rahe hain..ye meri aur dad ki khamra hain..nikal jayiye yahan se..Manyata shouted with the maximum voice she could produce.


Komal was shocked by that outburst...


Brij tried to smoothen the situation by changing the topic...


Caressing her cheeks)Oh My doll kya hua? Aapne phirse koi sapna dekha hunh...aap dariye mat hum haina aap humare saat soyiye...


But Manyata was not gonna tolerate a third person between her dad and herself..



Dad ye yahan kya kar raha hain..inse kahiye ki abhi issi waqt iss khamre se nikal jaye.hum nahi chahti ki ye iss mahal mein rahe.aur ye aise kapde kyun pehne hue hain(marriage dress)...inse kahiye nikal jaaye yahan se...Manyata demanded brij hurting komal...Brij and komal passed a helpless face to each other while manyata took komal by hand towards door...



On reaching door she was about to push komal that someone came in between.


Stop it Manyata..came out the roaring sound frightening manyata. she all of a sudden left komal's hand and stood frozen in front of that powerful eyes which were staring at her..


Brij came forward for his daughter .maa...but then a single wave shut his mouth...


Ye nahi aap nikal jayiye ...ye aapki khamra the..ab nahi...ye ab apki mata pita ki khamra hain aur iss tharah yahan aana aapko shobha nahi deti...


Manyata 's eyes filled with tears..but in broken words she spoke..ye meri maa nahi hain.


Bas manyata chaliye yahan se..aap aaj humari saat soyenge..Rajmata tried to take manyata forcibly while she tried to stay back


...nahi nahi hum dad ke saat hi rahenge ...nahi..dadisaaab...dadisaab..but none heared that small voice..


Brij stood helpless seeing manyata like that and komal also felt bad..but then she know she has no voice in front of rajmata and hence remained silent..


On coming out manyata ran freeing herself by biting rajmata's hands...


Ahh rajmata winced in pain while manyata ran back to her room and shut the door..


Menaka who was seeing all these came to rajmata...maa sahib humne kaha na ab inhe boarding school bejna hi teek rahega varna ye dada aur bhabhisa ko chain se jeen nahi denge..


Rajmata gave a blank look to menaka and left the place..

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Nahi hum nahi jayenge small manyata screamed at top of her voice..


Bas manyata aap acchese jaanti hain ki yahan ki faisla hum lete hain naaki aap...rajamat was adamant that day.


Dad hume jaane mat dijiye..pls dad hum aapke saat rahenge..pls dad she cried a lot but brij just kept silence with a painful heart..


Dad...b4 she could talk further rajmata took her by hand forcibly to car followed by seema...


Those small eyes waited for her father to utter a word...She believed to get supported by her father but the only thing she got was disappointment...


Hatred that was all she felt that moment...Giving a disappointed glare with teary eyes...she left.Sitting back at car she had tears in her eyes but then never turned back to look at Mahal or her father..


Komal who was at her maayka for padphere rasam was surprised to hear the news. She never wanted this to happen..While deciding to marry Brijraj she had promised herself and Maya to take care of Manyata in whom Komal has always seen her adamant Friend Maya...


Komal and Maya were best buddies since childhood but then unknowingly both loved the same guy Yuvraj Brijraj Singh. Even after Brij-Maya marriage, Komal has never hated Maya.


Komal considered all those happenings as part of destiny and had moved forward to complete higher studies that the news of Maya's death came as a shocking news to her.. That day she cried a lot. Along with that news she did heard of maya's daughter who was too much like maya..


Even after a lot of tries she couldn't see Manyata as Komal was at London to complete her studies...Returning back also meeting Manyata became impossible due to many riyasat issues.. When the alliance of Brijraj came up for her the first thought that came to her mind was that finally she could have my maya's daughter...


Eventhough Manyata was rough to her since the first day, Komal never took it seriously as she knew its her maya's daughter so one or the other day she will succeed in impressing that small innocent heart..


Today a single decision of Rajmata broke her plans and Manyata was separated from her. This was something Komal cannot bear and she decided to speak to Rajmata.. For the first time she managed to stood up in front of elders. She demanded manyata back home and Rajmata could only nod yes to that demand..



There at boarding Manyata cried whole night without having food.. The strictness of dadisaab and helpless face of her dad flashed through her eyes...Manyata was changing and none noticed that.


It was Komal who went the very next day to boarding school to bring back Manyata but then a lot changed that day..The small 6 year old child broke every single expectation...She for the first timed called komal maa ...but then the following things that she said broke Komal...



Aaj ke baad main aapko maa bulaoongi aapko samman denge aapki izzat karoongi lekin hum mahal wapas nahi aaoge..keh dijiye Rajmata Mrinalini Devi se ki ab woh chahe lakh koshish kare Manyata ko kabhi apna nahi paoge...keh dijiye dad se ki unki khamoshi ne hume unse door kiya...



The small child's words surprised and hurted Komal at the same time...She was adamant, strict and strong. For a moment komal felt that she was talking to her friend Maya...



Komal knew there was no use in talking that day and hence just hugged and kissed Manyata. Manyata accepted Komal with a weak smile and kissed her cheeks seeking pardon for all her misbehaviours till that day...



To be continued...

Upcoming: Thread of past in the present...


Hope u enjoyed the chapter friends...Please leave back ur suggestions as i really need to know how u felt after reading😊


Ok guys this FF will be continued only if i get good response and likes bcoz there is no point in continuing else...😊

Edited by snowdream - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
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nice cs but why u didn't mentioned anything about uday and his family

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