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MrsSSO

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Posted: 12 years ago

#31

Nice CS and updates ...

Great start 👏

Continue soon ...

Thanks for the PM

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Skaliya176

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Posted: 12 years ago

#32

😒 plzzz pst prt 4 soon cnt wait for it n plzzz pm me

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LittleDhampir.

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Posted: 12 years ago

#33

nice work annesha
Verry good concept and detective...sounds interesting
update soon...

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annesha kapoor

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Posted: 12 years ago

#34

will update in march last week
i am leaving this 20 for my exams and will be back on by march

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manisha98

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Posted: 12 years ago

#35

first of all...sry dea...i wasn't able 2 read ur new work earlier...

d concept is superb !!

i'm a huge fan of detective stories nd i'm sure dis ff is goin 2 be on of my favourites...

d prologue reminds me of sherlock holmes..!!

d first chappy was 2 gud...uday d detective - luv it..

cumin 2 d 2nd chappy...it was even gud...

love at first sight...uday fell 4r manyata...

d third chappy was 2 interesting...

manveer scenes 2 gud..

omg manyata got kidnapped...

d suspense is killing me...donn'o who's doin all this...

precap's 2 gud..!!

can't wait 4r d nxt update...

d first thing ur doin wen u cum back is 2 update this story..plz...

Edited by manisha98 - 12 years ago

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angleroops

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Posted: 12 years ago

#36

hey pls continue i luv dedective suspense story

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annesha kapoor

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Posted: 12 years ago

#37

chapter 4
there was a glint of joy in the sun while the winds danced around ,kolkata was experiencing a rare and most beautiful day as uday and akash headed outside the Dumdum airport ,akash twirled around the taxi stand like an innocent child ,he was so happy it had been his dreams for him to come to Kolkata while uday was talking to the taxi driver it was a really hard task as most of the driver did not know english and there hindi was hard to cope up with ,still he tried his best making an attempt to mske thing go and the hot weather was frustating him and akash joined in to irritate him some more ,there was anger erupting in him ,as at last akash pulled the end of his jacket and almost screamed making his eardrums burst
AKASH:LOOK uday so huge building and soo many cars so big building
uday 's anger out burst in anger he gave a sharp turn and screamed at akash
UDAY:WHY ARE YOU BEHAVING IN SUCH WAY ,AKASH DID YOU NEVER SEE SUCH BIG BUILDINGS HUH YOU NO NA I AM TRYING TO COPE UP WITH THE DRIVERS AND THERE LANGUAGE SO THAT WE GET TO HOTEL YOU KNOW WRITE HOW IMPORTANT THIS CASE IS FOR ME CAN'T YOU JUST SHUT UP FOR A SECOND
saying this uday marched to another corner of road an isolated sorner he lighted his cigar and started to smoke the main problem was not akash or the language it was manyata ,he had already began to miss her ,her smilling face kept appearing infront of him even with his eyes closed for the very first time , he had turn sad ,nostalgic often used to get lost in his own imagination forgetting the entire world ,he needed her ,he had began to grow desperate for her,in middle of his thought he felt a hand on his shoulder he turned around to see it was akash ,
AKASH:uday i managed to communicate with a taxi driver and he is ready to take us to the hotel
at this point uday realized how rude he ahd been to akash he realized that akash had been victimised in his anger ,he hugged akash for the first time two mens shared such warmness as akash felt his shirt wet
UDAY:kash i love her i cannot stay without her please akash do not get angry on me please i love her
AKASH:do not worry we will find her now do not cry
uday recollected himself as he was now embrassed he broke the hug with a sudden jerk and looked at akash
UDAY:i was not crying now lets see which driver you had set i am sure you made a mess
and mummering like this he went to the driver ,but akash was splendid he took full care ,the drive started to Bauria as uday sat resting his head on the window and was lost in manyata 's thought

after a drive of hours they finaaly reached there destination Bauria as the taxi driver holted infront of an old guest house ,they paid they driver and got to there respective rooms uday had already arranged everything as he was a perfectinalist and they were all very happy to help him who would not be after all he was the sherlock homes of India even it was said that satyajit ray wrote his script of feluda keeping him in mind ,after a heavy lunch and long sleep of five hours finaly in the afternoon they departed for the Mukherjee vila on reaching two huge guards welcomed them inside ,uday was very known in the villa and popular among the villa as once a long time agao he had helped a ald of this village to solve a mystery so the owner of the house debandra mukherjee welcomed him but uday asked akssh to stay outside while uday had a meeting with debandra ,akash waitd in the living room while the girls drooled on him making him shiver and sweat ,yes the biggest fear of akash was being stalked after a long meeting when finally the dusk came over uday got out of the study all laughing and giggling and directed akash to get back to the office along with him ,they reached the guest house akash kept pleading to him for telling about there meeting but he kept shut finally after dinner while going to bed akash mummered in anger
AKASH:fine do not tell me but just see even you won't get your manyata
just by listening to the last sentence he jumped to akash bed caught his neck ,making it shake
UDAY:take your words back now
AKASH:ok but promise you will tell me about the mystery meeting
UDAY:fine but first take your words back
AKASH:fine i take my words back you will meet manyata soon and tie the knot with her and live happy ever after
uday let off his neck and sat back while even akash sat beside him in a demanding eye
UDAY:ok fine let me start but do not interrupt me in the middle it is a very sensitive case ok
actually in the mukherjee villa i meet komal yes komal mukherjee according to doctor she was supposed to be binod babu widower and manyata 's mother but the truth is she indeed is widower of binod babu but she does not know any bridgraaj and she has only one son and that is as we know debandra now let me come to the warning letter well it was written by virat her friend as only he posses a modern new printer which is now frequently used accoeding to the electronic bill and as for her chain wala attack let me tell you that day virat 's house was not dark as according to one of his neigbour the light in his artic was glowing the whole night and the neigbour also heard frequent household noise so it had to be virat ,he was just hiding and the attack well there was no attack on manyata as that day when she wore an off shoulder there was no mark of chains and that is the reason i asked her to wear an off shoulder as for the kidnapping case it was her friend virat to help her out she stayed at virat 's place for some time
AKASH:oh my god bhabisa is such a liar
UDAY:do not blame her it is not her fault i guess someone even she found out her mother was a mystery i ownself found it difficult to digest when doctor said his wife died while coming back from church i mean sunday masses are mostly attended by christians so i myself came here to check and found this out so was what manyata wanted she wanted to find about her mother and wanted to come to kolkta and that is the reason for her to start all this treat letters and whne i came she saw her her plan spoiling so she made the kidnapping plan and hence she succeded no wonders i love her i mean what a match perfect brains with beauty she is just 18 and what brains
AKASH:so what am i supposed to do write love poems for you are we really working on a case oh sorry an adventure or just planning your love story
UDAY:both now listen sharp tommorow she is going to come here i mean even her search bought her here ,she will be here by evening all you have to do is take bridgraaj somewhere dark in the juggles drug him and stay there make sure neither you nor he return til tomorrow morning
AKASH:ok so manyata knows about our where abouts
UDAY:no she does not it will be like a suprise meeting we will tell we are here for a holiday
AKASH:ok so now the mystery turns who is manyat 's mother but uday why you want her to be all alone with you i mean you know na that even the guards return home after dusk i mean it will be just you and her why
UDAY:as i want some private time with her
AKASH;no uday see she is just 18 if anything happens to her law will not leave us
UDAY:i am ready to take up the responsibility but i have decided
AKASH:OK BUT YOU ARE DOING AT YOUR OWN RISK GOODNIGHT
saying this he tugged himself and went off to sleep and uday could hardly close his eyes as he was lost in her thoughts the next day happened as planned as they reached akash took bridgraaj for a walk to jungle and in a small broken hut drugged him and stayed there and as for manyata it grew dark so she took a bath she was told that uday was not there with akash and akash was all by herself while uday was hidhing in her room only after a bath she came out in her towel being nave to her guets but within a fraction of seconds she found herself being pinned to the world as uday with a low yet husky voice whispered in her ears
UDAY :time for our private time manyata
done with this chappy
sorry very less manveer scene
but next update will be full of manveer
promo: manveer private time

Edited by annesha18 - 12 years ago

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anushruthi

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Posted: 12 years ago

#38

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Oooh

Awesome Update

very nice

like this new M

definitely a beauty with brains

cont soon

thanks for PM

Edited by anushruthi - 12 years ago

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annesha kapoor

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Posted: 12 years ago

#39

Originally posted by: anushruthi
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Oooh
Awesome Update
very nice
like this new M
definitely a beauty with brains
cont soon
thanks for PM