FF - Lost Heritage - CHAPTER 5 UPDATED (pg27) - Page 8

Originally posted by: wendy25

please update soon!
Awesome characterization of manyata , can't wait for ManVeer's interaction

Originally posted by: kakacool123

After i'm done writing my other update fro my other FF, I will soon start on this, thank you and in the next update there will be tons of Manveer moments. So stay tuned. LOL😃😛

Originally posted by: kakacool123

After i'm done writing my other update fro my other FF, I will soon start on this, thank you and in the next update there will be tons of Manveer moments. So stay tuned. LOL😃😛

Originally posted by: mahnoor2468

ohhh wow *stading ovation👏👍🏼 i loved it,its just wonderful p!please udat soon and give us a proper day on when u will update because if u dont then it becomes impossible to wait😳

Originally posted by: vampire12345678

wow u will update an update with so many manveer scenes please update soon i am getting impatient to read the next update please update soon

Originally posted by: mahi0809

Will wait!... and yup got ur message. I totally understand yaar, exams are a pain but a reality lol so take your time... Uday already finds M beautiful, lets see what happens in the next update!

Originally posted by: chitra_rao

Hey Ash 🤗, the update was amazing👏, with teh right mixture of revelation of some things to the reader plus u had explored Uday in this chapter 😳. Got ur meaasge dear, I totally understand ur situation, update can wait but ur studies cannot, so study well, stay healthy and make an dhamakedar comeback with a mindblowing update, will wait till then😛.

Analysis:

Part 1: UV's overconfidence watered down by Manyata's confidence: I really liked how u started this update from UV point of view in the race. I liked how you continued the race scene and showed UV's perspective👏.UV mesmerised by Manyatas beauty and then teh sudden realization that he lost to a girl was all well put.Loved teh following line:

her natural breezy look gave her an advantage over other girls as well as the confidence so absolutely drilled into her. There was one way to put it straight ' Feisty.

This whole part was a Fiesta for me. So now UV want tyo avenge Manyata for the pity that seh showed him. Would be quite interseting to see how they fall for each other.

Part 2:Veer a friend or a ally : Seems quite an interesting character, as he has crush on Anvesha, he might me used a reverse cupid for Manveer in future 😉

Part 3:Foxy Maya trapped Rajamata, all pay for their sins 😈: Though I shouls hate this character of Maya, but from Rajmatas presepctive I loved her 😆. He is so exactly like Rajmata totally evil😡, has plans of seizing the power from Rajmata.Well Rajmata a piece of advice-Aasthin ke saap ho kabhi nahi palna chaheye😒. Yes this Ramata choose Maya over Komal, now This same Maya will bring a time on Rajmata where Rajmata would understand the worth of Komal. Now this might take time, but would love to see this happeneing 😃.

Part 4: Rajmata gets more intriguing: Well she is the most mysterious and strong charter of ur ff. She still after 22 years is not that much found of Maya? hmmm interesting, and she doent even seem to be dying found of her grand daughter😲. Well ash use her character very wisely, u can create a fury of hell with her character.along with Manveer, Anvehsa, Rajmata is another person whom I'm waiting yo read more about. again a brilliantly penned part. Looks like Brijraj has become alcoholic or has gone into acute depression😭. He dearly loved Komal, hope they get back together.

Part 5: Sarphiri Anvehsa 😡, pathetic Maya -both need a psychiatric help🤢 :Ash a commendable work here👏👏. I loved how u have created a whole contrast in Manyata-Komal and Anvehsa-Maya. The firts two are a perfect symbol of love and compassion though they have been ripped of their rights, the last two ambassador of evil of selfishness though they hav got more than what they deserve. Again a base of wonderful future track Ash, would like to see this two MAA-beti jodi fight against the psychotic pair to get what rightfully belongs to them, their heritage😊.Well done 👍🏼

Part 6: Anvesha overconfident enough to not see the alarming signs of destiny: Loved the way you have portrayed Anveer(Anvesha + Udayveer) realtionship👏, very baseless and shalow. Would expect you to show manveer equally deep and passionate.

Part7:Unnati-the calmness in the roaring sea named Udayveer: Loved the chracter sketch of Unnati 👏. Also loved the fact that Uday has not even been brushed by the queen of love, would love to see how he would react when the queen of love will rain on him. He is with Anvesha just for satisfying his ego👍🏼. I love the depth of Unnati and her analysis of love 👏👏.

Part8: Trying to let go but destiny has some other plans😈: Manyata wants to let go but destiny is serving her the invitation card and telling her time to put all the years of training and suffering to practice and get back what is urs😉.

Super excited for the next update, sure Manyata will meet her family but most importantly there will be Manveer 😍. Cant wait for the Manveer story to start with passion, hatred, jealously and then the unsaid feeling of love all merging together.

Loved the update Ash, and thanks for the PM 🤗and sorry for the late comment.