Adi Sir BDay STORY CONTEST -- **RESULTS on pg 16** - Page 14

We had so less participants that it is okay if we dont have 2nd and 3rd runner up prizes 😆

Just make a general one Deba...for all participants. It will feel good. Those who put in so much effort deserve it.

And those who didn't write should see it, go,😍 and participate next time.

I will do after posting VMs results & reviews...

Story 6

A well paced pyscho serial killer story 👏 From some of the dialogs and scenes.. I can identify the writer..But keeping aside those scenes and dialogs.. I would say... It was a very nice serial killing plot.. The investigation was kept simple.. but the motive of the serial killer was nice 😊

If you don;t include those peculiar statements like "letter likha tha .. nahi..SMS kiya tha" and stuff.. I would say... your content and presentation of the story has changed a lot.. and ofcourse in a positive way..
In your case.. again i am not sure if its because of time constraints... you don;t seem to have re-read your story,.. or got time to review it...Many a places i feel..in the sentences you thought of writing it one way and ended up writing something else.. 😆which made the sentences weird 😆

Good going... and as a suggestion... don;t think of becoming a writer like SS sir.. think of being Nk or NC 😆 Less OTT dialogs and more khooni stuff 😊 Good Job 👏

Asto and Vis !! Congrats 😃 .. don't you both get tired of winning story contests ?? 😛 .. hehehe kidding .. I'm sure you're stories must've been really good !! Congrats 😃 ...

Originally posted by: astonish

I have already read 3 stories the day they were posted...will soon write the reviews for them...
Just now read story 1 - So here is the review for the same...

Story 1 : A nice interesting case... I like the way you brought back the characters of CID + Adaalat...👏. I was actually wondering how would you connect the TV's eagle encounter with the Eagle... did Nik turn back with the the TV programme schedule ..??🤔 I think i missed that part... but then you brought in a real eagle... The story was well paced... no where I felt it was being dragged.. and you managed to put in enough duo scene though initially you said that Daya sir was on some other mission 😆

There were two things which were a little tough to digest.. . 1. keeping eagles as pet in india is illegal.. well. this is something which can be ignored.. doesn;t strike much when you enjoy the case😆 but the second one is that... Abhi sir remembers his police Academy training... Now this is something which keeps striking your mind whenever in the story Abhijeet remembers his past.. We all know he doesn;t remember anything since the accident took place and that accident took place after he joined police.

There were also two things which were very nice to read .. you didnt hurt any of the CID team members .. didn't divert from the track and kept the story crisp...interesting... well paced... maintained the suspense... concept was less complicated.. and bureau less crowded 😆👏
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Originally posted by: visrom

Finished reading story no 1.

I had some difficulty in understanding it because of the grammar. Request the writer to give some attention to this aspect.

However the story was very good. 😊 it was nice idea to take up the Zoravar track... 👏

Abhijeet remembering his past is tough to digest but we can assume that all his old friends have kept in touch with him and tried to tell him stuff about his past.

Then the thing about Daya's secret mission...was it linked to finding Zoravar's whereabouts? The reason why he was away was not clear. Maybe you could have connected it more clearly.

Overall I liked the story. Very nice attempt. You have some good ideas, so please try writing more stories.

Originally posted by: Bhavanab

Asto and Vis !! Congrats 😃 .. don't you both get tired of winning story contests ?? 😛 .. hehehe kidding .. I'm sure you're stories must've been really good !! Congrats 😃 ...

This time I am... har baar... I am only in story and scene... I wish someone could teach me someother talent... I wish someone could teach me how to make a VM... Then i will try winning that contest 😛