MY FIRST STORY - Page 2

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Posted: 13 years ago
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Hey buddy... I m waitin for the COMPLETE STORY...😊
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Posted: 13 years ago
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k i am continug
abhi : kya 25 crode ka
sachin : mujhe tho ye sara shak us karan par hi hai
abhi : tho der kyun chalo
SCENE 6
daya : karan darwaja kholo
freddy : sir darwaja tod de
daya : ha thod de
viivek : (with karan ) sir rukiye karan yaha hai
daya : tumne ie kab pakada
viivek :jab hum yaha aa rahe te ye peeche se bhagne wala tha
dya : very gd viivek
freedy: viivek toh mujh se jyada hoshiyar ban raha hai aaj kal (himself )
daya : karan batao kyun kiya ye khoon
karan: main sach kaha raha hu sir main ne ye khoon nahi kiya
daya: to kisne kiya
karan : mujhe nahin pata
sachin: juth mat bolo tum ne nahin kiya toh kisne kiya ye 25 crode kaha se aaya
karan: sir hum log ek dusree ko jaante hain
kareeb 3 saal pahale hum log ek office main kam karte hain humara boss bahut aamir tha unke pass bahut jaydat tha hum log ne unhe dhumke ddekar unko aur unki patni ko kidnap kiya aur hum log un ko mar dalne ki dhamki diya aachank se gun hali aur vo dono mar gaye hum log bahut dar gaye the us ke bad vo saara jaaydat leke hum log bahut dur chale gaye thai (ith crying) bus mujhe inti malum hai ye sab khoon main ne nahin kiya
abhi : sahram aani chahiye tumein viivek arrest karo ise
SCENE 7
acp: ye hain kaun itni salo bad badla le raa hain
kajal: sir ye dekhiye ye khooni har char din main khoon kar raha hai
abhi : matlab aaj ek ur khoon hone wala hai
daya : who hamara haat se nahin nikalna chahiye
in the night all were in their places then one man wth long coat enters all r elert
then freedy phone rings tht man will leave
acp : abhijeet daya pakdo use jaao
they run after smetime thy return n say nahi sir vo nikal gaya wahan se
freedy : sorry sir vo mera wife thi
acp : will give 😡 a nice look of anger
SENE 8
aftr 4 days
again they r on same places
acp : aapna phone band rakho samaj gaya varna is bar tera chuuti karayunga main
freedy : s sir ghar main wife yahan acp sir😕
then again a man wth long coat enters he oen a window of nishat house he reach near his bed and try 2 attack him viivek comes n stops by seein him all will shock
daya : to tum ek ladki ho ye sab kar rahi hai
viivek : sir main ne ise kaha pe dekha ye meri dost thi stut school main aur iska naam rosy hai
rosy: ha main ne hi kiya ye khoon
acp : kya ye tumhari dost thi... kyun kiya tumne ye khoon
rosy: sir badle mein in char log ne mera ma aur pappa ko mar dala
daya : tumhe kaie pata
rosy: main wahi pe ha jab ye log mere ma aur pa ko maar dala
sachin: par tum ne ise mara kaise
rosy : main ne aap ne liye k banaya tha jo mujhe diwar ko pakad kar jaa sakti hu main main khoon kar ke is shoe ki madad lekar teress pe chadkar vahan se bhag jati thi
acp: mana ki tumhare saath jo kich bhi hua vo galath tha par lekin tum ne tho kanun ko aan haat main le liya tumhe tho fasi hi hogi
rosy : no no no😭 viivek plz help me
viivek : i am sorry rosy i cant help u

Edited by gayatri - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Wowww di AMAGING STORY:-):-) The investigation was SUPERB:-) and I LOVED IT:-):-) great work di...
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Hmmm... GAYTRI, U started STORY very nICELY but U ended up it very ABRUPTLY... The character of ROSHY comes n accepted all SINS...
STORY is TOO SHORT too... But for UR FIRST ATTEMPT... DONE a GOOD JOB.👏.. KEEP it UP...👍🏼
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Posted: 13 years ago
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thanks shiva and thanks dada i will do my best in my nxt story😊
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Posted: 13 years ago
#16
nice story
plz add me in ur pm list..
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Posted: 13 years ago
#17
yar kamal ka kahani tha at last vo rosy tha na he is fabulous...loved it
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Posted: 13 years ago
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r the first time i tried poem on viivek

UR NAME IS VIIVEK
ON BIRTHDAY U CUT A CAKE
LISTENING 2 CID MUJHRIM ILL SHAKE
IN FB UR IDENTITY IS FAKE
BUT U KNW ... VIIVEK IS VIIVEK...

SOUNDS SILLY RIHT...
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Originally posted by: gayatri

IN FB UR IDENTITY IS FAKE

😕
Edited by visrom - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
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I think she has meant about lots of fake account on FB with the name of Vivek Mashru...
Am i right...@gayatri ?
Edited by debasree04 - 13 years ago

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