STORY CONTEST- 2(CASE OF THE MYSTERIOUS KIDNAPPER)

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sunny

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Posted: 15 years ago

#161

kya kehte hai. chota sa surag kafi hot ahai Ravi tumne to bahut bada surag de diya

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Ravi

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Posted: 15 years ago

#162

Yeah! Bad move, CID ko mujhe pakadne mein 2 sec bhi naa lagte.

But mistakes are the best teachers. Now onto the path of becoming the most elusive criminal. 😈 😆

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Bhinder

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Posted: 15 years ago

#163

right.. ab kya fyada Ravi bhai jab chidhiya chug gayi khet 😆

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Ravi

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Posted: 15 years ago

#164

Arre to agli baar fasal ke time ready rahenge na bhai. 😉 😆

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Bhinder

@bhinder.thind

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Posted: 15 years ago

#165

Why it is not Sticky Topic anymore?? Contest is not over yet na? 😲

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prabha.

@prabha.

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Posted: 15 years ago

#166

My Views on the Stories (I will keep adding as I finish the stories)

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1] Story 1 : Good attempt. I liked the narration style. Everything is not revealed immediately, there is a small buildup and then what's going on is revealed. I like that. Flow was good. What I loved the most - Freddie Sir and Tasha. Loved how they were presented in the end.

2] Story 3 : Very Interesting, I loved the twist. I just felt ki too many proverbs were used. I really liked the first scene till "Ghar Bulaya Hai" after that it dragged a bit. Its nice to have casual interations among team members but they should not drag the case. However its a great attempt none the less. Good out-of-th-box thinking.

Edited by prabha. - 15 years ago

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sneh.

@sneh.

Voyager

Posted: 15 years ago

#167

Thanx Prabha for the review. Visrom, the organizer waiting for your review indeed.

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visrom

@visrom

Stunner

+ 4

Posted: 15 years ago

#168

Originally posted by: sneha_fighter
Thanx Prabha for the review. Visrom, the organizer waiting for your review indeed.

I am still reading no 8 ;-)

To pass time, read no 12 - the disqualified one.

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visrom

@visrom

Stunner

+ 4

Posted: 15 years ago

#169

A big thanks to everyone for participating. 👏👏👏👏👏👏👏

Posting my feedback. I loved reading all the stories. Took 2 days to finish. I hope I have done justice to your efforts. Hope to see many more contests like this.

Story 1 : Good suspense, excellent flow of story. Shows ACP risking his life to save Dharmesh and his confidence that his team would rescue him.Climax scene was very good

Story 2 : Slightly difficult to follow the words written in English like 'kalia' for 'ke liye', 'ha' for 'hai' etc. Nice to see a 'lady' politician. Abhijeet flirting?????? CID team in disguise...I always love this.

Story 3 : Sent off Sachin and Kajal on undercover operation??? Ending was a surprise.

Story 4: Excellent plot, but took some time to understand. Many twists and turns. Very good story. But could have avoided statements like 'left to imagination'.

Story 5 : Lengthy story, had a few problems posting it in a single message. Language and story flow are clear. Did a 'chemical bomb' type bomb diffusion. And you seem to be a Sachin fan. Nice 'twist' in the end.

Story 6: Nice to see the kidnapping happening right under the nose of Daya and Abhijeet. Good to see reference to Nakul and ACP's past.

Story 7 : ACP transferring Abhijeet to Kolkata and Daya to Delhi was very funny.I could actually visualise that transfer scene. Short story, but somehow it made me laugh!!! Good one.

Story 8 : Deviated from the plot.We wanted the politician to be kidnapped whereas it was his son in this case. Anyway nice story.

Story 9 : A mix of chemical bomb and maanav bomb. Nice story, action packed end.

Story 10 :Very good story, but could somehow guess the culprit in the beginning. Good to see the dog squad which we have been missing for quite some time now.

Story 11 : Started off with 'Sachin-Kajal backmost seat'. Nice to see team in disguise. I can imagine Abhijeet with the politician's cap, but Daya(that boyish grin and all) - Kahin se bhi politician nahin dikhte hain. Well written story, but only question - why do you use tHiS tyPe oF leTTeRs?