Written Update 12 Mar 10

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Hello, Namaste, and Salaam everyone!😃 Sorry for the delay. as you know spring break and I'm already lazy right now😆
Khoon Ka Raaz Jahaz Mein
Dead body found
Episode starts off at some main road and camera shifts to some random guy waiting or watching😕 Someone driving Black Sumo fast. Finally, it stops near the red light. After a few seconds, red light turns off and green light turns on. All the vehicles start moving but the black sumo doesnt start. Vehicles behind the car are beeping but the guy in the sumo doesnt start the car. Bunch of people surround the car. Some guy knocks the car door but the driver doesnt open. Finally, the guy outside the car opens, and we see a woman's dead body. Another guy says we have to call CID.
Bureau & Silent comedy Promotion😳
Freddie hiding under the bench is making a weird noise😕 like pigeon. Abhijit and Daya enter the bureau and talk about the case where they have been to kerala and the bride went missing.Suddenly, both of them hear some nose and wonder how pigeon got inside the bureau.Daya asks Abhijit if Dr. Tarika send him a love letter by pigeon.. Abhijit is blushing😳 and it might be true!🤣Abhijit and Daya find Freddie sitting on floor. Abhijit tells Daya that they were searching for pigeon but crow is sitting here 😆 Abhijit goes upto Freddie and Freddie apologizes and says that he didnt know that they would come early. Abhijit sarcastically apologizes and says that that they didnt know that we was reharsing for some song and is about to leave from there. Daya too follows Abhijit😳Freddie stops them and tells Abhijit that he wasnt practising any song. Daya in frustration asks Freddie about the matter. Freddie says that there's a new show on sony.. silent comedy.. basically promotion😵 Bureau phone rings..Abhijit answers it and says that they're coming.
CID team arrives
CID team arrives at the spot. Abhijit, Daya, and Tasha are checking the body. Tasha checks the body pluse. Daya says that there are no wounds on the body. Abhijit says that the bullet was shot at the stomach. Daya says that the murderer could have sat in the car. Daya and Abhijit ask witnesses about the murderer and they come to know that nobody got off from the car.Vivek shows the woman's id card and her name turns out to be Sheetal Kumar. Tasha informs Abhijit that she took all the fingerprints from the car. Abhijit appreciates her work and tells her to send all the things to Forensic Lab.
Sheetal's House
CID team comes to know that Sheetal was a paying guest. Sheetal's house owner is shocked to hear about Sheetal's death. She says she doesnt know anything about sheetal's family🥱 ACP tells her to bring the agreement form which Sheetal filled .
Bureau
Daya is walking back and forth and talking on phone. He tells the other person to call him if he comes to know anything😕 Daya hangs up the phone and leaves to ACP's office and informs ACP that all the information about Sheetal is fake. Abhijit agrees with Daya and says that there's no information about her in the database. ACP is wondering why sheetal never revealed her true identity. Vivek and Tasha tell ACP that they have found two fingerprints from the car.. out of them one turns out to be Sheetal's and other one could be murderer. Tasha says that she'll check if another fingerprint is on the records or not. ACP agrees. Abhijit tells ACP that sheetal might have done some crime and this is why she doesnt want to reveal her true identity.Daya agrees with Abhijit. ACP says it could be possible. ACP leaves his office and tells Tasha to check Sheetal's fingerprints as well. A guy called Mahesh from Witness Protection Unit enters the bureau and introduces himself to ACP. He's shocked to hear sheetal's death😲 He says that Sheetal purposely doesnt want to reveal her identity because she happens to be an eye witness of sancha's case. Her real name is Menka. Mahesh says that sancha a criminal might have killed her.ACP asks him where sancha can be found. Mahesh says sehar jail. Tasha informs ACP that the other fingerprint found on the car turns out to be shreyan😕 who takes money to murder. Daya says sancha might have hired him to kill Menka. ACP tells Daya to go to some bar while rest of the team leave for sehar jail to meet sancha.
Jim-Jim Bar
Daya bumps into a drunkyard and their have some conversation. Drunkyard mistakes Daya for some kamla girl😲 Daya is frustrated. Vivek is also here. Manager asks what happened. Vivek says nothing.. the guy was thinking about kamla but it reminded him of his nani😲😆 Manager identifies Menka and is shocked to hear about her death. On that day, when sancha killed someone; the manager sat on the counter while Menka along with her friend witnessed sancha killing someone. Vivek asks for menka's friend but the manager says that he doesnt know. Daya asks the manager if he knows anything more about sancha. Manager says sancha is a very dangerours who warned Menka not to eye-witness against him but she didnt listen to him.
Sehar Jail
ACP is talking with commisioner. Freddie and Tasha are standing behind ACP( who's sitting). Constables bring Sancha and sancha is here ,tied with chains around his limbs. Comissioner tells Sancha that CID came to visit him.. But before comissioner finishes his sentence, Sancha interrupts him and says " ACP Pradyuman" and asks what is that he wants. ACP walks toward him and tells him that sheetal is killed. Sancha sarcastically says what am I suppose to do. ACP repeats its Menka who gave witness against him. Sancha says that its good that she died and because of her he's in jail. ACP chuckles and asks him if he killed her. Sancha says what do you think I can kill people by sitting in jail. Freddie abrupts and says they'll take sancha to the bureau. ACP says that he'll open sancha will mouth and tells constables to take him away. Sancha leaves from there and ACP asks commisioner if he got any call recently. Commisioner says that he did get a call twice. ACP tells Freddie to check phone records between 11 and 2pm and find out who called sancha.
Bureau
Abhijit is working on the computers. ACP and Freddie are standing beside him. Daya is talking on phone. ACP says that it was Menka's friend who was with her on that day when sancha killed someone. Another eye-witness is Mansi. ACP tells Abhijit to look for mansi's address. Abhijit finds mansi address but no picture of her. ACP says mansi is in danger and we must save her.Daya informs ACP that the phone call received from the sehar jail turns out to be a PCO from chanpur.
Chanpur PCO
ACP, Vivek, and Freddie get off from the car and park the car opposite to the PCO. Vivek is driving the car😎 Vivek shows a picture to the guy in PCO. The guy says that so many people come here and its hard to remember faces😵 Vivek says that the guy in picture called twice 11am and 2pm. The guy finally remembers something and says that he saw him at the PCO but doesnt know much about him. Freddie gives bureau's phone number and tells him to call if he ever sees the guy. ACP- vivek conversation : ACP thinks that if the guy calls sancha at 11am and then kills Menka and comes back and calls from the same PCO at 2pm, this means that the guy lives close to the PCO.
All three officers search for Sheyra
Vivek, ACP, and Freddie ask everyone about Sheyra in the neighborhood. WIth a help of a guy ( whos's mentally challenged), officers get to the guy's house. Nobody's home.. ACP finds a picture of Menka's dead body on the wall.. There's also a "X" mark on the entire photo in a big size. He also finds another sqaure box to menka's but there's no picture. ACP finds a red mark on dates on the calendar. ACP is wondering why Sheyra marked these dates. Vivek finds a prescription which says Zylomoriflyn😕 This medication is used for avoid dizziness in boat or ship. Someone calling out the sheyra. Officers are ready with their guns. The guy gets scared and says that he's a neighbor. He tells ACP that sheyra must have gone out of town because he saw him carrying a big bag.
Mansi's House
Daya and Tasha reach Mansa's house but nobody responds. Tasha checks the backside of the door and informs Daya that it seems like nobody's at home. Both of them leave but they find some woman who recognizes Mansi. She says that Mansi doesnt live here anymore. In fact, a guy also came here last week to asked about her. Daya and Tasha are shocked. Daya asks the lady if she has any picture of Mansa.. She says she doesnt have it ( Cant Daya tell her to come to the bureau and make a sketch of mansi?) Daya and Tasha leave from there.
Bureau
Abhijit is sitting infront of laptop. Other officers enter the bureau. ACP is asking Abhijit if he has any news. Abhijit says that he doesnt know but he called Mahesh. Just then, Mahesh enters the bureau and wishes ACP. ACP asks him if he changed Mansi's name just like Menka. Mahesh says that he changed only Mansi's. Daya says then maybe someone changed her name. She too gave witness against Sancha. Daya tells Mahesh to find out about this. Mahesh says that he'll go to office and find out. Abhijit tells him to call as soon as he gets any information. Freddie and Vivek discuss about the red marks found on the calendar and also about that prescription. Tasha informs ACP that there's a ship which is leaving to Goa within an hour. Everyone leaves. CID officers are riding on a boat so that they can catch the other one which leaves to Goa.
Goa Ship
Finally, CID officers catch the ship and begin searching for Mansi. Abhijit finds a few people surrounded around the dead body. The girl was shot near left hip. ACP tells Freddie and Vivek to check all the people surrounding here. Random guy wearing red coat comes running and calling out " Sonia". Abhijit wonder if Mansi changed her name to Sonia. He says that its wife Sonia and they know each other for more than 4yrs. and this is the first time Sonia came to Mumbai. Officers think that this cant be Mansi because Mansi gave witness 2yrs ago. ACP wonders why this woman was killed. Daya finds a room key and shows the key to ACP. Abhijit asks the people about the key but nobody responds. Manager tells Abhijit that he will find out whose room number it is. Freddie inform ACP and Abhijit that they didnt find anything. Manager informs ACP that he came to know whose room it is.. it's Kamal. ACP asks the people about Kamal but again no one responds🥱 ACP tells Abhijit to find out about Mansi while himself and others leave for the room #112 ( the room key found).
Room#112
Freddie, ACP and Vivek enter the room but no one is here. Everyone is checking the room. ACP finds a bag inside the cupboard. He opens it and finds a gun inside. ACP tells Vivek to hide in the room because Kamal might come again.
Mansi
Abhijit, Daya and Tasha are looking for Mansi. Tasha informs Abhijit that she couldnt find Mansi. Some guy walks up and looks tensed. He tells these officers that his girlfriend Priyanka is missing. He says that she got a call and she left. Abhijit and Daya think its Priyanka who's Mansi. Abhijit tells Tasha to send SMS to Mansi's neighbor and ask if the picture is Mansi's. Tasha calls the neighbor and she confirms that its Mansi. Daya offers help. Abhijit tells the guy to send Priyanka's pic to his cell phone so that all three officers can find Priyanka.
Room #112
Vivek is hiding under the bed. Someone enters the room. The person is wearing orange pant and also it looks dirty🤢😆 The person leaves and Vivek comes out.
Looking for Mansi
Abhijit, Tasha, and Daya are showing Mansi's picture to everyone to identify but nobody is recognizing her🥱😵 Vivek informs ACP about the orange pant guy. ACP thinks that they guy must be from engine department. Daya, Abhijit and Tasha still dont find her😲
Engine room
ACP tells Vivek to close the doors and tells the employee to call all workers. ACP looks at everyone but none of them happen to be Sheyra. ACP asks the worker if there's anyone left, the employee agrees and says he( raghu) must be in the engine room. Freddie, Vivek and ACP look for Raghu. But Sheyra changed his name and stayed in ship as Raghu. Sheyra is found dead. ACP think that there's someone else behind Sheyra.
Daya finds Mansi hiding beside something. He calls her out and runs toward the place. Some other guy finds Mansi hiding. Mansi sees him. Daya finally gets to the place where he saw her but she's not there😲 Abhijit and Tasha come in and Daya informs Abhijit. Some girl screams. Daya says that its Mansi's voice and all three run from there. Some guy is dragging Mansi in some cabin. Mansi is seeking for help. Freddie sees them and tells him to stop. But the guy drags Mansi even faster. Abhijit and Daya point their gun at the guy. Tasha is behind the guy with Freddie. Daya identifies him.. he's the bar manager. The guy says he did all this to fool CID. ACP comes there and says fool CID? The guy says not to interfere otherwise, he'll fire. Daya tightly grabs the guy's right hand and the gun falls down. Daya slaps him😍
Manager's Confession
He confesses that Sancha is his brother. He wanted to kill Menka and Mansi for witnessing against him. He became succesfull by killing Menka but CID came and saved Mansi. He says he did everything for his brother. ACP says then join sancha to be hanged.
**** THE END****
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Posted: 15 years ago
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Thanks, great work! 👏
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Originally posted by: priya_sparsha

Bureau & Silent comedy Promotion😳

😆😆😆 Loved this part. Love the way you wrote it. Did you see Daya Sir expression when they were speaking of that series. He has a strange grin since he is part of the show he is promoting in another show. 😆
Greak work like always Priya, you add your own flavour to the story and make it interesting all over again. I never miss a single update. Even knowing the culprit does not dampen the interest in reading about it. And I just love your smilies. I say this everytime but then i HAVE to say it.
Just one correction the tile is - Khoon Ka Raaz Jahaz Mein
Its just KHOON KA not KHOONI KI 😃
I have a request. If possible can you write the an update on the first ever CID Case aired - KISSA ZAHAR KA.
Edited by prabhanarayan - 15 years ago
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Beautifully written. waiting for this.
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Originally posted by: Brosder

Thanks, great work! 👏

anytime & thanks for the liking my work😳😃
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Originally posted by: prabhanarayan

😆😆😆 Loved this part. Love the way you wrote it. Did you see Daya Sir expression when they were speaking of that series. He has a strange grin since he is part of the show he is promoting in another show. 😆
Greak work like always Priya, you add your own flavour to the story and make it interesting all over again. I never miss a single update. Even knowing the culprit does not dampen the interest in reading about it. And I just love your smilies. I say this everytime but then i HAVE to say it.
Just one correction the tile is - Khoon Ka Raaz Jahaz Mein
Its just KHOON not KHOONI 😃
I have a request. If possible can you write the an update on the first ever CID Case aired - KISSA ZAHAR KA.

awww...thanks for all the compliments😃 I made correction.
If I end 1st episode, I would love to update😃 Do you have it?😳
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Posted: 15 years ago
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Originally posted by: sunnyp1414

Beautifully written. waiting for this.

Thanks Sunny😃
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Originally posted by: priya_sparsha

If I end 1st episode, I would love to update😃 Do you have it?😳

Oh you did not see it yet. I put it up few days back, check this thread
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Cool Prabha! I will update it soon!😃
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Good job . i liked the boat in which they shoot the case .i have travelled in that boat but not when cid shoot was going on many months before .i liked your written update .

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