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Posted: 8 years ago
Do you want me to critic it? I can do that if you want me to 😳
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Posted: 8 years ago

Originally posted by: KrishnaPriyaa

Do you want me to critic it? I can do that if you want me to 😳



kind of. you've been reading DKJR for a while now. tell me all the good and all the bad.
what makes it suck?
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Posted: 8 years ago
if you don't have time then it's okay, it is better i write the whole thing first
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Posted: 8 years ago
Isn't it strange how when you see an artist you get so pumped up to do something similar when you know no amount of practise is going to let you get close to that level of perfection!
Also if we are meant to re use plastic bottles to help reduce waste, why do bottles say do not refill?
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Posted: 8 years ago
I wish you could feel the pain
Of when your lies cut in to me
When your words stab deeper
Tearing truth, mutilating trust


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Wither my tender soul
Crush my bones till dust
Call the winds to take and
Scatter amongst the stars






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Posted: 8 years ago
I have lived far too long
Amongst souls so dark
Suspended in this abyss
Without a dracma to pay
Charon to ferry me home




Edited by Cortana - 8 years ago


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Posted: 8 years ago

- The Nature Of Love -

I bloomed in spring expectant
Bore hope all through summer
Finally Fall, these tears fell red
Freezing my heart since Winter


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Posted: 8 years ago
Arya di, here is the update. I need two parts from it.


Marriage fading love epilogue

It was the day, when sanaya has entered into their lives. After saving sanaya from those people he let her stay in the employees apartment and promised her to give a job so that she could stand on her own legs.


It was around 11 at night when he came to his house and saw his wife busy pacing the room.


"Jaan , are you ok. I'm sorry I was late." He explained.


"Don't speak to me. Kis mendak ke godh me bait kar aye ho, huh? I know all men are alike. I'm not beautiful like earlier so you started avoiding me and you must be enjoying with some beautiful girls. Go and enjoy with them." She shouted at him making him smile at her innocence.


"Hmm, so I am enjoying with some girl,huh. Why would I jaan? When I have the world's prettiest woman waiting for me in my house. I'm late because I need to save a girl from trouble. Some people are trying to..." She interrupted him.


"Trying to molest her and you saved her. Isn't it?" She completed with a spastic tone.


"Yes its the truth." He stated.


"Don't lie. I know men after marriage will change. The truth is you are enjoying with some girl and telling lies to me. Don't show me your face." Saying that she ran into the room and shut the door.


"What the hell happened just now." He thought and walked towards the kitchen and bought the food to their bedroom.


"Jaan, I brought our dinner. Come let's have it." He said placing the food on the table.


"I don't want. Go and feed some beautiful girl." She said and gasped as he picked her in his arms" leave me. What are doing."


"What? You asked me to feed a beautiful girl, so I am doing it." He said and she blushed. "Listen jaan, I saved a girl from some people who are trying to molest her that's all. I'm not like other men. I have only you in my life, got it."


He masked his hurt with a smile as it was the normal sight for him since his marriage. If he is ten minutes late to home and that's the last thing he want because she doubts him no matter how many times he clarifies her confusion.


...


It was the day when sanaya has moved to his private flat.


When he asked her to live with the employees she obliged him and she joined his office she was awwed with the money he has and cocooned a story in their apartment which made everyone gossip about their relation.


He soon shifted her to his private flat where she can live without the societies tantrums. He was happy that he stopped sanaya from committing suicide.


He battled within himself to say about this or not. If he says about sanaya being moved into his private flat then his wife surely won't believe him. So he decided to be mum about this matter besides sanaya is a mere employee.


And this was the first wrong step he has taken in his life.


...,...


It was the day when they need to attend a foreign project.


He was happy that he has got the deal and asked sanaya to attend it as she is the obedient employee. But she refused to do so as she is scared of going alone and she trusts only him.


He asked sanaya to book the tickets for his family also to which she manipulated him of non availability of tickets. He planned another trip with his family after the meeting.


The distance between the couple was gradually increasing due to the tight schedule of his work and with her constant Shak on him.


...


It was the day when he came to know that he forced himself on a helpless sanaya.


That day he was in so need of his wife's presence. Like everyday his wife blamed him of enjoying with another girl which made him to loose his cool and scream at her.


"Why the hell don't you understand I could never cheat you." He screamed at her making her flinch at his tone as he has never spoke with her in this tone.


Even now he didn't want to scream at her but her words are making him guilty. He is damn hurt and is unable to express his hurt.


"You have raised your voice on me!" She said in a disbelief. "Now I got it, you must have got a beautiful girl that you are trying to get rid of me. Get lost. Don't show me your fave."


She shouted and shut the door as usual. He came running behind her and tried to open the door but it was locked from inside.


"Jaan, please open the door. I'm sorry. I'm really sorry. I promise you I'll never raise my voice on you ever again. Please jaan I need to say something very important to you." He spoke from outside and dozed off near the door as he felt weak from the things happening in his life.


Next morning


"Jaan, why didn't you wake me. Ok leave it. I need to say something important to you." He said gaining all his energy to speak about the night with sanaya.


"Why don't you feel that I'm important to you? Why are you so selfish." She spoke cutting his words.


"What are you saying. I'm not understanding jaan." He tried to cup her cheeks.


"Yesterday I was hurt with your behavior and shut the door. What if I tried to commit suicide?" She said making him gasp for breathe.


"Why are you speaking about death jaan. I'll die without you." He said absentminded as he was still in a shock of her words.


"Enough of this drama. Agar main tumse shadi nahi karti toh koi nahi karega. We have believed your words and got married. But you are not like the one you have portrayed." She sniffles.


"Jaan please stop it. Why are you dragging the argument. Please listen to me I need to speak something very important.". He held her palms gently.


"Oh so I'm dragging the topic. Really. If any beautiful young girl speaks then you men will start drooling over her." She huffed.


"What the hell is your problem. I am tired of speaking with you. Leave me alone for sometime." He screamed and ran away from this place.


And that day two hearts pained like never before.


...


"You are a man that every woman dreams off. Your wife must be very lucky to have you." Sanaya said him with teared eye.


"You are not a marriage material. If not for me no would marry you. I have done a sin in my previous birth to get a husband like you." A flash of his wife words came in his mind.


He started comparing his words and used to feel good around sanaya as she used to obey his every word which his wife didn't.


And this mistake of hers made him to feel unwanted and loveless.

Part 6


After few years


He stood holding her close to his body while she snuggled into him. Both of them are waiting for their now 14 year old son to arrive in his vacation like always.


As soon as the train halted both of them ran to the compartment where all the school students are seated. Ansh ran into their arms and they shared a family hug.


They started speaking about all sort of random things enjoying their moment. Ansh will be staying for one month here in his home and will again go to his school once his vacation completes.


All the three started spending more time in their house rather than partying out.


Looking at his wife smiling happily he still feels guilty about the deeds he have done. He still feels suffocated with the thought of making her sad.


He started sharing each and everything with his wife which she as usual corrected him in not going on wrong path.


She wasn't that woman who used fuss over every small thing her husband says instead she changed a lot. She started listening calmly and explained peacefully so that he could understand.


And this encouraged him to share his every feeling with her. She became little liberal which made him stop feeling like a caged bird.


Woman like Sanaya are meant to catch the prey for money. They will do anything as they care only for money. She just gave him the freedom which his wife hadn't gave him caring about his life. But she needs money so she used his weak point as her plus point.


And there are many men like the husband who are innocent and are falling as prey for women like Sanaya. All they need is a happy family and little privacy which let's them breathe. She moulded him in such a way that he was even ready to divorce his wife.

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Posted: 8 years ago
continuation ...



Part 6


After few years


He stood holding her close to his body while she snuggled into him. Both of them are waiting for their now 14 year old son to arrive in his vacation like always.


As soon as the train halted both of them ran to the compartment where all the school students are seated. Ansh ran into their arms and they shared a family hug.


They started speaking about all sort of random things enjoying their moment. Ansh will be staying for one month here in his home and will again go to his school once his vacation completes.


All the three started spending more time in their house rather than partying out.


Looking at his wife smiling happily he still feels guilty about the deeds he have done. He still feels suffocated with the thought of making her sad.


He started sharing each and everything with his wife which she as usual corrected him in not going on wrong path.


She wasn't that woman who used fuss over every small thing her husband says instead she changed a lot. She started listening calmly and explained peacefully so that he could understand.


And this encouraged him to share his every feeling with her. She became little liberal which made him stop feeling like a caged bird.


Woman like Sanaya are meant to catch the prey for money. They will do anything as they care only for money. She just gave him the freedom which his wife hadn't gave him caring about his life. But she needs money so she used his weak point as her plus point.


And there are many men like the husband who are innocent and are falling as prey for women like Sanaya. All they need is a happy family and little privacy which let's them breathe. She moulded him in such a way that he was even ready to divorce his wife.


If we think the husband and Sanaya has done mistake then the wife is also equally wrong. She must give him little privacy and must act calmly. Though she loved him too much but she always made a fuss over small things which made him divert to the "Other woman words".


For a successful marriage one must follow the "T" RULE


TRUST each other
TALK to each other
spend TIME with each other

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