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bridgeofdreams

@bridgeofdreams

Dazzler

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Posted: 11 years ago

#311

Originally posted by: EXPELLIARMUS

I thought that I'd written about someone called 'shrug' and forgotten all about him!

I thought that I have forgotten a character!

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bridgeofdreams

@bridgeofdreams

Dazzler

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Posted: 11 years ago

#312

Originally posted by: MsDroolKanthan
Only You could give us the shower , the bed , the mile high club AND the office desk in half an update . KBA?

I so agree! Now the question is, don't you think that your DP is apt for that half part in a way?

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Skyfall

@Skyfall

Voyager

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Posted: 11 years ago

#313

Okay I think I've finally calmed down my hyperventilation..well just about about.. 😳

Part one

Damn, I felt so bad for Khushi, the poor girl. I understand that Arnav had every right to act all aloof and not care about her at that moment but damn, just reading her plight was so heart breaking. However, I think it did her some good as she managed to stand up for the bratty Payalia and it was until now that you realise just how much Khushi has done for her, how much her sister treats her as if she is the local help and not her sister.

I'm also glad Khushi's mother admitted her wrongdoing, that she let khushi manage payalia and that she can see the differences between the two children. i think this is what khushi needed to hear at that time!

And I loved the bold khushi at the end, she was taking things in her own hands ! This is why your version of Khushi is simply the best.

Part Two

I have no words.

No damn words at all.

Okay I do.

Hot, passionate, steamy, gentle...should I go on?

A couple of things that did stand out to me was that Arnav didn't just jump into the whole physical aspect straight away, he took khushi to the shower so that before anything happens, she was comfortable. Even if he did it for some self indulgence, it was a touching gesture even if i was hyperventilating while reading it 😆😳

I'm also glad that he made it clear why they were going to be intimate as Khushi needed to hear it.

The whole insecurity of khushi and her low self esteem is becoming really obvious to Arnav and I love how he pushes her to talk. She needed someone to make her think about why she thinks of herself in that way and i love how honest Arnav is in your story.

And lastly the little note, hmmm I don't know who this could be as i'm suspecting everyone LOL so i will wait until you disclose this to us otherwise I'll be saying Sheetal is culprit with the way my winds works 😆

Anyway, an absolutely wonderful chapter, every word kept me hooked. I commend you for being able to write such lengthy but freaking amazing updates as I know I can't do that at all! What a fantastic update and I have to say it once again, you have been given the gift of writing!

Can not wait until the new chapter is up, it's going to be a long wait 😆

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Divya Bharathi S

@divyaarnavsr

Voyager

Posted: 11 years ago

#314

OMG, nights of passion. And the explorations. .fabulous part 2. Is that la ?? I strongly suspect la than nk with that note !! Khushi better tel him !!

And wat more secret that she hides ??

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EXPELLIARMUS

@EXPELLIARMUS

Rocker

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Posted: 11 years ago

#315

Hello!

So I've been reading some comments and PMs about how I've just broken one of the rules set by the person who challenged me to write this story, and here is my defense :)

Her challenge was very specific: she did not want the leads to have a dark past that influenced the entire tale, and she did not want every update to end in a cliffhanger. I asked her before writing this if that included other mysteries in the tale itself, and she said that she was fine with it.

With that said, here's why I think that today's update cannot be classified as having a cliffhanger ending. I gave you the note at the end, but before that, I detailed how and when Khushi received it and how she was hiding it from Arnav. So no cliffs there!

And since this update is being written from Khushi's POV, I couldn't tell you anything more about that note because Khushi herself doesn't know who sent it yet. So how could she be thinking about it?

Does that make sense? I even went back to the person who challenged me and asked her about this, and she said that I was safe for now😆

Her identity will be revealed at the end of the epilogue, and she will rate me on how I've done!

Would love to hear your views on this.

Also, I will not be on IF from Saturday- Monday. I will probably be tempted to log in and 'like' your comments here and on the blog via phone, but replies to PMs and scraps will be delayed.

And finally, I have created a banner gallery on the blog so that I can display all that creativity in one place. Do check it out!

http://shaadibyexpel.wordpress.com/the-wedding-album/

-Juhi

Edited by EXPELLIARMUS - 11 years ago

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bridgeofdreams

@bridgeofdreams

Dazzler

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Posted: 11 years ago

#316

Originally posted by: EXPELLIARMUS
Hello!

So I've been reading some comments and PMs about how I've just broken one of the rules set by the person who challenged me to write this story, and here is my defense :)

Her challenge was very specific: she did not want the leads to have a dark past that influenced the entire tale, and she did not want every update to end in a cliffhanger. I asked her before writing this if that included other mysteries in the tale itself, and she said that she was fine with it.

With that said, here's why I think that today's update cannot be classified as having a cliffhanger ending. I gave you the note at the end, but before that, I detailed how and when Khushi received it and how she was hiding it from Arnav. So no cliffs there!
And since this update is being written from Khushi's POV, I couldn't tell you anything more about that note because Khushi herself doesn't know who sent it yet. So how could she be thinking about it?

Does that make sense? I even went back to the person who challenged me and asked her about this, and she said that I was safe for now😆

Her identity will be revealed at the end of the epilogue, and she will rate me on how I've done!

Would love to hear your views on this.

Also, I will not be on IF from Saturday- Monday. I will probably be tempted to log in and 'like' your comments here and on the blog via phone, but replies to PMs and scraps will be delayed.

And finally, I am planning to create a banner gallery on the blog so that I can display all that creativity in one place. Do check it out when it's done!

-Juhi

I never considered the end as a cliffhanger. Your explanation isin its place.

The banner gallery is a good idea. Shaadi has awesome banners.

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VYGA

@VYGA89

Dazzler

Posted: 11 years ago

#317

Amazing update.
Loved it.
Thanks for the pm.

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vandana.sagar

@vandana.sagar

Stunner

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Posted: 11 years ago

#318

H did a outstanding job with that new sensual banner as did you with chapter 7.1 and 7.2 as expected.

I loved the background and the way everything including their feelings and thoughts were put into perspective. It was a solid chapter with such a positive outcome and the change of the nature of their relationship now a proper shaadi.

NK was my suspect, but some how it cannot be so easy and you being you...and making Sheetal a parrot...I take nothing for granted and know anything is possible.