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Oyster

@Oyster

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Posted: 13 years ago

#141

And that's 113 words.. you better don't ask me to make it shorter than that!

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Johny S Raj

@Johny.S.Raj

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Posted: 13 years ago

#142

It is 2.30 AM in India, By the Way Miyah done with VM's Check Whether it is right. Off to Do Siggies and Avis

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@MaleehaSuhail

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Posted: 13 years ago

#143

Originally posted by: Oyster
I tried to make it short and informal:

Burno believes that when she smiles, the whole world stops and stands for a while.
Ne-Yo says that being the sweetest drug, she got him strung between fantasy and what is real.
Raghav claims that she has angelic eyes, so he just can't get enough of her.
Mohombi concedes that her charisma is causing him trauma.
Now imagine a female saying she could kiss her lips all day long
Or thinking of her 24/7 in every way,
She can't move on
The enchantress has has now become
An obsession
An addiction
And thus leads her girl crushes confused
Here's one of them speaking out her mind after seeing Khushi in a red Sari:
I doubt I can make it funny though cuz that's one thing I am completely deprived of in terms of writing... humour and I are two poles apart.

Yup, this is fine in terms of length!

How does it look this way? (I'm trying to make it look shorter without taking something out)

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Burno believes that when she smiles, the whole world stops and stands for a while; Ne-Yo says that being the sweetest drug, she got him strung between fantasy and what is real; Raghav claims that she has angelic eyes, so he just can't get enough of her; Mohombi concedes that her charisma is causing him trauma.

Now imagine a female saying she could kiss her lips all day long or thinking of her 24/7 in every way; saying she can't move on.

The enchantress has has now become

- An obsession

- An addiction

And thus leads her girl crushes confused.

Here's one of them speaking out her mind after seeing Khushi in a red Sari:

[TIYA'S WRITE UP]

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It still sounds very formal 😳

Btw, do we need like an actual write up for this section? Can't it be something like:

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Does looking at Sanaya make you confused? Give you inappropriate thoughts or feelings that make you question yourself, your gender? Here's a girl speaking out her mind after seeing Sanaya in a red sari:

[insert Tiya's write up]

Have a look at what girls have to say when they see Sanaya!

[Insert comments]

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Don't mind me throwing random ideas Sonya. My one and two year old neices are here and it's practically a fish market at my place! 😵 Have I told you how I can't get a thing done on the weekends?! 😵 Jeez! Anyways, this is kinda what I had in mind. It's short, not much to read. See if you can work with this.

Edited by EtherealSanz.. - 13 years ago

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Oyster

@Oyster

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Posted: 13 years ago

#144

Well I'd suggest you don't change the format of what I have cuz it changes the meaning. The punctuation you've used messes up the meaning.. The other reason I wanted to have the above lines is because it's kind of relating it to the songs we've chosen for the the thread.. In other words, we're saying there's a reason why we've chosen those songs..

But your point about length and having it short is also valid.. so we could use what you have instead.. And that's pretty straightforward.. so there's no need to revise anything..

It's okay you can throw your random ideas.. I'll be around to bear your madness! I am not sleeping as I really need to get done with some work and send it in.. So I'll be doing that and passing by this cc every now and then.. Remember we're meeting in 6 hours?! So go get some sleep if you need.. I don't want to surprise myself with your absence at that crucial hour!!!

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@MaleehaSuhail

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Posted: 13 years ago

#145

Alright then we will keep both of these write ups, and ask the rest of the girls. hahaa me absent at that hour?! No way unless I die or something, I will be here!!

I'm babysitting though, so I'll be on and off the CC as well.

REMINDER: Guys many of us haven't sent our messages in for Sanaya yet. Johny, Sonya, Nelu, me and Drishti need to send our messages in ASAP!

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@MaleehaSuhail

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Posted: 13 years ago

#146

Also Sonya, you know how Viswa was helping us with the music bar? Now it's -Stutz-. So I'm not sure whether you want to credit her...up to you. Of course you will credit yourself for the mix. Which you would anyway! :P

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Johny S Raj

@Johny.S.Raj

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Posted: 13 years ago

#147

K Done My work and I have to wake up at 9 AM, I have only 4 Hrs to Sleep 😆

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Ragini

@ragzz.

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Posted: 13 years ago

#148

Guys there's a problem I pms miyah but she seems offline , guys my work schedule got changed to 11 am from 2pm so i will not w there at the time U guys are openin the thread , can someone please post stuff on my behalf I can give you guys my password

I am so sorry for the Inconvenience guys :( my boss just told me like 10 mins ago im so pissed I was looking forward to to this day :'(

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@MaleehaSuhail

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Posted: 13 years ago

#149

Originally posted by: Ragz.
Guys there's a problem I pms miyah but she seems offline , guys my work schedule got changed to 11 am from 2pm so i will not w there at the time U guys are openin the thread , can someone please post stuff on my behalf I can give you guys my password

I am so sorry for the Inconvenience guys :( my boss just told me like 10 mins ago im so pissed I was looking forward to to this day :'(

*screams into a pillow*

*bangs head to the wall*

Dammit! Your boss me no likey! 😳

PM me ur password, we'll take care of it.

Edited by EtherealSanz.. - 13 years ago