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Posted: 14 years ago
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Originally posted by: simi91

c's ryt. n would u like to read the next part of LSO now kate?
yes awould love to
sorry for disapear i needed
to finish commenting


pls me waiting


alright.

no prob. abt half hr. k? almost done editing...
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Posted: 14 years ago
#12
i want to speak out my heart too!!!
since we all are hurt..some way or other...
dil se...!!
I as a maaneet fan.. read a lot of maaneet FF's ..only maaneet FF
lot of them!!!
almost all of them at times😉
i sometimes comment sometimes don't.. 😡
i know mean.. but trying to be nicer now..😃
if u ask keyma.. we both used to read eachothers updates... very regularly but never commented initially.... on each other..for quiet some time.. even now.. some times we don't...😳
then.. something we.. now make it a pt to leave a line.. on wat ever we read.. something natural now...
i like every one here... every one is different & beautiful.. no seriouly.. koi maska nahi..
when I need my dose of maaneet I fall back on these FFs...
u all have so much to share..
i want to be happy here.. like always.. i am so delighted that u like my work..
socho tho.. it is such a grt feeling...
every time read a comment feel touched.. even if it is one line...😳
i love u all...😳
u all don't even know why!!!
beacuse.. u all made me wat i am.. my threads ..my ffs every thing
this is wat i wrote very first time
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Part 1
I have changed my script... little bit...
Background...
Daadi ma and Geets family are freinds..no past of geet...
(can u believe this was my prologue😆😆)

Daadi maa comes to visit hosiyarpur...to meet geets family..
daadi maa has a very private talk with Darji..saying how she is very upset about maan
and his not coming out of his past..she is looking for girl for him again.. who can really
take care of him and family...darji and daadi maa talk for quite a while ...

Brij over hears their talk and tells darji that we could get Geet married to Maan..
but darji says..u don't know...and stops!!!!
the whole family is excited about the wedding.. Geet is not at all intrested..
she goes and speaks to dadi ma.. and says I am just 18..I have not even completed my studies..
dadi ma.. wonders..thinks for a while.. this girl will be able to face maan and his temperment..
if she can stand up against the whole family and tells me wat she wants...

Daadi..promises that she will let her complte her studies after marriage..geet is still not very sure about all this geet has just entered college..she was very intested in making a simple carrier ...she had not even thought about guys..as such..
she did fascinate..but all girly friends talks only..


daadi maa..tells darji..that when maan comes to know about it...he will surely not agree..
i am trying to get him here first...one of the sweet little pranks of daadi maa... I am not feeling well
maan rushes to geets havali...
every body tells geet see..maan is here... she is least intrested..
daadi ma in the bedroom..Maan walks in with concern.. seeing her on the bed..really gets worried
looking at her he knew wat she was upto...
geet is forced to interupt them with lassi...maan says no thanks.. does'nt even look at her..

Daadi maa - maan this is geet..
Maan - continues excuse me.. i have to take this call..now..
daadi maa - maan maan..

geet stands there wondering wat to do.. she is feeling odd about the situation b/w maan and daadi..
this is was the first time..maan and geet where undersame roof.. but they have'nt even seen each other..geet gives the lassi to daadi maa..and leaves the room..

latter in the evening..daadi..walks to maan and says..u have to agree to this..
hum aap ki man marzi nahi chalne denge!!! maan gets very angry and yells at daadi ma..don't u know I hate girls.. geet was just entering the room with a glass of milk for daadi ma.. she really gets scared and drops it down..Maan turns..and snaps!!
they are good for nothing but breaking things!!
this was the first time..maan actually saw a glims of Geet..scared..litterly ..sahme sahme se .with her hand cluctching her dupatta
and looking down..maan could not see her face...does't even care to..😡
geet runs away!!!

Daadi - Maan why is it always about u?? off late u don't seem to think about any one else..
Maan - wat do u mean
Daadi - wat about us, wat about krishna??
Maan - is spechless..does't say word more

next day they have the wedding cermony..
Geet crying about the fact she has to leave her family and studies..she was just not prepared for all this
Maan totally not intrsted.. just very furious...

maan and geet walk towards each other..

jay mala..
Maan just bows his head.. does'nt even resist.. the whole gathering starts saying..geet..maan abhi se aap ka gulaam bangaya..
geet is suprised..shies a bit..this is the first time she felt some thing..somthing she never knew ..ther was stange tickle in her stomach
she wanted to see his face...while putting the mala..his face got covred with mala in his hand which was approaching her neck..
she had to bow..down..she cried to have a glims of him..

they both are taken to the mundap..all the while maan was burning with anger.. she could feel his restlessness..but was not sure ..wat was that whole thing about!!!
immediatly after the cermony..maan says he needs to leave..
brij tries to stop him.. tum ase kaise ja sakte hoo
maans face fuming ..darji holds brij back..
Maan - aap log doosri gaadi mein ajana.. i have to visit a site on my way..
Daadi - maan ur insulting us!!
Maan - i have had enough of all this..and just rushes away..
Daadi - left alone to face the gathering
geet holds the dupatta along with the knot of his part of dupatta..which slipped away as maan walked away..she picks up the dupataa..and holds it close to her
daadi ma..was impressed..with geets gesture..
geet and daadi drive to delhi in a car!!!

bidaai song and crying!! geet is very upset and alone..

Precap

Maan and Geet unusal SR

only so many clicked like button..actually even remember it clearly now.. 30 odd..yeh thoda latter hain...4 comments before I posted my next update..😳
all read it ...😃
so many spelling mistakes...
the scenes her just avg.. but i was so excited to post.. i didn't even check for mistakes
u know how it sounds now the same scene
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Maans daadi ma comes to visit hosiyarpur to meet Handa family her good old family friend. Daadi maa has a very private talk with Darji..head of the Handa family. She spills her heart out saying how she is very upset about her grandson Maan, about him not coming out of his past. She is looking for girl for him again, who can really take care of him and family, darji and daadi maa talk for quite a while '

Brij the eldest boy of the Handa family, over hears their talk and tells darji why can't we get Geet married to Maan.. but darji says..u don't know...and stops his words not sure whether it will be good to talk about it infront of him!!!! The talk spreads like a fire in the family, every one was excited about the wedding.. Geet was not at all interested. She goes and speaks to daadi ma.. and says I am just 18..I have not even completed my studies, I think I am not prepared for it. Daadi ma.. wonders..thinks for a while.. this girl will be able to face Maan and his temperament.. if she can stand up against the whole family and tells me what she wants...

Daadi promises that she will let her complete her studies after marriage. Geet is still not very.. sure about all this. She has just entered college..she was very interested in making a simple carrier ...she had not even thought about guys..as such..she did fascinate..but all girly types with her friends!!!

daadi maa..tells darji..that when Maan comes to know about the wedding plans, he will surely not agree..I am trying to get him here first. One of the sweet little pranks of daadi maa... I am not feeling well all was seem to work with him. Maan rushes to Handa havali at once. Every body tells Geet see. Maan is here. she was least interested.

daadi ma was laying in the bedroom. Maan walks in with concern. Seeing her on the bed, he really gets worried. After having a close look at her he knew what she was up to.

Geet is forced to interrupt them with lassi...Maan says no thanks.. doesn't even look at her..

Daadi ma - Maan this is Geet..

Maan - continues excuse me.. I have to take this call..now..& walks away

daadi ma - Maan Maan..

Geet stands there wondering what to do. She is feeling odd about the situation between Maan and daadi. This is was the first time Maan and Geet were under the same roof.. but they haven't even seen each other. Geet gives the lassi to daadi ma and leaves the room.

Later in the evening daadi walks to Maan and says u have to agree to this.. hum aap ki man marzi nahi chalne denge!!! Maan gets very angry and yells at daadi ..don't u know I hate girls.. Geet was just entering the room with a glass of milk for daadi ma.. she really gets scared and drops it down..Maan turns..and snaps!! they are good for nothing but breaking things!! this was the first time..Maan actually saw a glimpse of Geet scared! Literally ! sahme sahme se with her hand clutching her dupatta and looking down..Maan could not see her face didn't even care to.. Geet runs away!!!

Daadi - Maan why is it always about u?? off late u don't seem to think about any one else..

Maan - what do u mean

Daadi - what about us, what about Krishna?? Maan is spechless..doesn't say word more

Next day they have the wedding ceremony. Geet crying about the fact she has to leave her family and studies, she was just not prepared for all this. Maan totally not interested and was very furious.

Maan and Geet walk towards each other for jay mala.. Maan just bows his head.. doesn't even resist.. the whole gathering starts saying..Geet..Maan abhi se aap ka gulaam bangaya.. Geet is surprised..shies a bit..this is the first time she felt some thing..something she never knew ..there was strange tickle in her stomach. She wanted to see his face...while putting the garland his face got covered with the garland in his hand which was approaching her neck. She had to bow..down..she cried within to have coolneta glimpse of him..



They both were taken to the mundap ..all the while Maan was burning with anger.. she could feel his restlessness, but was not sure, what was that whole thing about!!! immediately after the ceremony.. Maan says he needs to leave..

brij tries to stop him - tum ase kaise ja sakte hoo

Maans face fuming now, darji holds brij back..

Maan - aap log doosri gaadi mein ajana.. I have to visit a site on my way..

Daadi - Maan u are insulting us!!

Maan - I have had enough of all this..and just rushes away.. Daadi left alone to face the gathering Geet holds the dupatta along with the knot of his part of dupatta, which slipped away as Maan walked towards the steps & to the car. She picks up the dupataa..and holds it close to her. Daadi ma was impressed with Geets gesture..

Geet and daadi drive to Delhi in a car after the bidaai song and crying!! Geet is very upset and alone..

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this was pyar ka ehsaas..
this is wat u all have done to me.. chnaged me.. totally...
i am wat beacuse of the love u all shower on me.. thanks a lot..
i so much love to be here..in maaneet land.. dreaming wat will dodo & genei do.. & u all too with me...ummah...
u know i read articles before quoting anything... like..when in madhoshi.. the last bit where maan was a vegi & geet tried her stuffs...
then in the ammunition deal part!! I actually read ...if privatization of such things was allowed in India.. actually it was not.. then read an article abt tata 's getting it!!
ok I am not flashing my hard work.. I do it because I love to be loved by u all...
so plz don't come back to me..ki I am trying to show off now
no babaji..aisen nahi hain..
I am just trying to say.. how much I love doing all this...
& when u all reciprocate..wow ..it is simply bliss
THANXS FOR ALL UR LOVE

Edited by muskanp - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
#13
di, we know you are not trying to show off. and the parts you write, even sometimes affect the readers a lott...in a good way ofcourse...n pls dont change who u r coz of some comments.. whch ff is this? coz i seem to have read this part but dont remember the name... did u write this ff????
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Muskan .......this is ur pyaar ka eshaas FF right?
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Posted: 14 years ago
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di its pyar ka ehsaas
love that its my FV
of urs
thank yuuuuuuuuuu
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Posted: 14 years ago
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i'll be back khushi then comment ur FF okay
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Posted: 14 years ago
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oh di, PKE wasa very good ff.... i remembering reading it. the first maan geet ff i ever read and i dont think ny other ff can be better.
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Posted: 14 years ago
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hey guys i have to go see yu tom khushi i'll comment tom byeeeeeeeeeeee my friends eating my head byeeeeeeeeeeeeee bye muskan di
@bye my pyari beti
Edited by simi91 - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
#20
@ muski....🤗

i know.... do u want to know how many like i had... lol... 39 likes...




LOL... that was my first ever.. then only 1 coment & i updated again....... Se i have told you... we think same... i loved my "My dark lover" research along with bitter truth & some others in every ff.... me bosting as well...


But again it shows u r determent... & how much we love ur ff...
haha me was laughing as well when i read bc the first part today... like my first ever parts... its surprising... :D
xxxxxx


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