FF: To Be or Not to Be. [Chap4. Pg 24]

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Nishi

@.nerfherder

Sparkler

Posted: 10 years ago

#91

Haven't proofread, so please bear with the mistakes.

Keep the feedback coming. :)

Sanchi and Ash, rejoice. 😛

And Chitra, the part before the last, did it please you? :v

Cheers

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sanchiswaron

@sanchiswaron

Voyager

+ 2

Posted: 10 years ago

#92

You are undoubtedly woman of words :3

Longer update this time and sooner too

So it was Swayam only who pulled her into water and well saved too :p

Crazy duo :v who will say they are married and that to to each other :3

Both seem like opposites personalities in many senses

Sharon's past swimming experience is very nicely written

Coming to the end of update Swayam's monologue is the best part ^_^

'Setting him up with his best friend in a relationship which was as fatal as it was beautiful.' Loved this line

Lets see if it turns to be fatal for them or beautiful :3

Thanks Nishi..

Edited by sanchiswaron - 10 years ago

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sanchiswaron

@sanchiswaron

Voyager

+ 2

Posted: 10 years ago

#93

Originally posted by: Rhapsody.
^That was quick. 😆

:3 ya right when is next?? 😆

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Nishi

@.nerfherder

Sparkler

Posted: 10 years ago

#94

Originally posted by: sanchiswaron

:3 ya right when is next?? 😆

After 19th April only. :3

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aishamathur

@aishamathur

Explorer

Posted: 10 years ago

#95

You scared the hell out of me Nishi yesterday😕.. How I hate you.

But this turned out so cute and eepery.😳

Thank you.

As I was reading I had all the points noting down in my mind to put into this reply but the line

'Swayam was calculative' just cracked me up!😆😆

I am still laughing on the same..

Wonder how many similarities would come up. :3

If you know what I mean.😉⭐️

Such a cute edit.Thank youuu for the update. 🤗

Now waiting for next.

Update soon!😃

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Kankshita

@thegameison

Stunner

+ 4

Posted: 10 years ago

#96

Nishi,

I caught up on chapters two and three. I am gonna say it one more time, you style is bursting with simplicity and purity, both of which are admirable qualities. It is too early to comment on the story itself, because they are on a vacation, married to their best friend each, it's crazy and simple enough and makes me smile in parts.

Thanks for the PMs,
K

Edited by thegameison - 10 years ago

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VReSh

@VReSH

Rocker

Posted: 10 years ago

#97

Whow u Updated Fast n yeh i loved it as Always :)

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Chitra.

@..MiStLeToE..

Dazzler

+ 3

Posted: 10 years ago

#98

Meri seat hai :P

First things first. . .WELL DONE :D

You gained it this time. . .When Sharon said Swayam she wont call him Moron from next time. . .OMG! Trust me I laughed hard 😛 and You-Know-Why 😛

The chapter was great to read. The way Swayam thought he had crossed the line. . .It was again a subtle expression of his care. Swayam's POV was really well written. . .The way he was not sure of future and yet his present is soothing and it is enough for him right now 😊 I really liked how you penned his whole thought process here.

Well done!
Now this well done is 'Earned' 😛

Chitra.

P.S. One pending comment down B|

Edited by ..MiStLeToE.. - 10 years ago

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Trupti Tamore

@VruShan_FanGirl

Navigator

Posted: 10 years ago

#99

Swayam is crazy ...pheke khud hi paani me dhaka deta h n bhvng lyk I-DON'T-KNW-ANYTHG ...n calculative swayam :-P
bt starting perhaps me dara diya tha...n past memory was i lyk mst in dis prt :-)
n chp was Nyc:-)