Swaron OS(current track)-Toh phir aao

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Posted: 11 years ago
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Hey folks how are you guys?? I guess we all were so excited when we saw the promo right... Even i was... i wanted to cry with Swayam actually... But some how i could feel the pain which Shantanu was trying to emote as Swayam but the screen play and dialogues and let me down... i have imagined a lot... and i dunno... here is my version of Friday's episode... and based on response in will give next part to it tomorrow . I really don't know if i have written what i actually want to emote. And happy Swaron anniversary all of you... Hope you guys will like it

Tho phir aao..

He had hard time controlling himself from hitting Ruhi with whatever he got in his hands. Everything is making sense to him... every bloody thing. He kept stealing glances at Sharon who was ranting his name. Mentally cursing himself for making her go through all this he was trying to distract Ruhi and take that bloody poison out of her hands. She seemed to have moved by his acting. But what she did she suddenly emptied that bottle.

He ran and pushed her with all his strength. He reached out for Sharon. She looked pale. His senses didn't work for a while. He held her close to his heart. He tried waking her up

"Sharon... Sharon dekho...Swayam...mein..aagaya...Sharon please ek baar dekho.."

Ruhi was standing in the corner fuming with anger .She came and started pulling Swayam away from Sharon..

"Yeh sab jhoot tha...natak tha.. aap aise kaise kar sakte hai... nahi boliye key eh sab..."

Swayam just couldn't control himself anymore. He just pushed her.

"JUST GET LOSTTT"

He just showed his hand warning her..

"Stay away... "

He took her in his arms... and carried her out... ..

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Getting into the first ever vehicle he found. He held her close to him... crying...taking to her... trying to wake her up

"Sharon ...Sharon please ek baar..dekho...dekho mein hoon.."

Holding her close...

"Iam sorry Sharon... iam really Sharon... dekho dekho please ek baar ut jaao... phir chhahe jitna gussa karna hai karlo...maaro... peeto kuch bhi karo..please ek baar aankehin kholo...please..."

She remained silent...pale.. unconscious...

"Tumhe kuch nahi hoga...kuch nahi hoga Sharon..i will not let anything happen...bahut kuch hai Sharon... we have so much to see...so much hai na... "

"Bolo na Sharon...please.. bolo na you will be there with me right...you will be..you are a fighter Sharon...tumne aastma ko fight ki... you will fight thi one too...hai na... bolo na...Sharon...you will fight .. you...wil..fight for me right...bolo..na"

He cried his heart out holding her close... he didn't understand what to do...how else to be positive,...he was always scared of losing Sharon... he living that nightmare now...every passing second ..every passing moment ...he never felt so scared in his life... he is scared of everything,,,everyone around...they seemed to take her away from him,...they are pulling them apart... he held her more close...

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He carried her inside...shouted for doctor...everyone came around...they were taking her on stretcher...nothing made any sense to him... he was holding her hand...rubbing it ...trying to explain her condition to doctor between sobs...

"Doctor usse...usse zeher pila diya gaya hai..."

"Ok ...Ok we will take care aap baitiye..."

"Doctor usse...aastma hai...woh bahut sensitive...usse...usse"

He blabbering all the while not leaving her hand...

"Hum dekhlenege...aap aap baitiye...aap andar nahi aa sakte."

"Please usse bacha li jiye please..."

"Ya we are trying ...nurse inhe sambhaliye..."

"Please save her,..."

He left her hand having no choice...

They took her to operation theatre... he could see from the window...

They are making her vomit all the poison... So many life systems..tubes...so many needles ...

He held on to the glass... ..

"Iam sorry Sharon... mere wajah se...sab...mere wajah se...how could i Sharon...maine tumhe hurt liya... tumhpetrust nahi kiya...i judged you ... i..i... dunno...please...teek ho jaao...please...i cant...i cant live without you"

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Frustrated...scared...Swayam settled down on the chair waiting for the doctor to comeout... Just then he saw Rey and gang coming towards him...

Rey saw him...he ran and went and hugged him tightly...crying his heart out...trying to explain how she was...how she is in ICU how she was pale..

Everyone got a shock of their lives hearing about Sharon's condition... they couldn't help but cry seeing Sharon.

Rey tried being positive and console Swayam which he failed to do...

"Sab mere wajah se rey...sab... Rey...sharon...ko kuch ho gaya tho...Rey...mein...mar jaunga... Please usse kaho ki ut jaaye..please kuch karo na... Rey please..."

"Swayam ...Swayam mere baat suno...kuch nahi hoga...she will be fine... what say guys...she will be... be positive..."

He said pulling Swayam to hug...wiping his own tears...

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There was nothing that could give him solace. He sat on the chair wiping his tears which didn't take the name of stopping. All the moments they have spent...all the fights all the misunderstandings were coming back as flashes.

His thoughts got disturbed as he saw some other doctors rushing to the operation theatre, nurses running around with the equipment.

He got hold of one nurse and asked what happened

"Patient ka heart beat sink ho raha hai... kuch bhi ho sakta hai...be prepared for anything"

Saying this she ran off to OT...while Swayam heart just stopped for a moment hearing that.. he couldn't move or react to it... He just went numb... he felt nothing...

"Swayam... Swayam... "

"Sharon..."

"Swayam... "

"Sharon mujhe chodke nahi jaa sakti..."

"Swayam listen to me..."

"SHARON MUJHE CHODKE NAHI JAA SAKTI..."

He shouted...

"Usse kuch nahi hoga...kuch nahi hoga usse..."

He ran to the OT...

He could see them giving electric shocks to revive her heart beat. He could see her petite form jerking with the shock...

He held on to the glass... and closed his eyes letting fresh set of tears flow...he sank down to the floor not able to see her like this...

"U CANT LEAVE ME SHARON... U CANT..."

He shouted...

Rey came and took him into hug unable to say anything...they kept crying...

Swayam couldn't take it anymore and he rushed inside the OT...

He ran to Sharon not caring about anyone else...

"U CANT LEAVE ME... U GET THAT... "

"I don't care... kya karogi kaise karogi...i need you...i want you with me every second of my life...you just cant leave me like that.."

"GET UP DAMMITTT"

"Sharon...i need you...i...i love you..please get up...please mujhe akela chodke mat jaao..."

"SHARON PLEASE... PLEASE DONT DO THIS TO ME... SHARON ...I NEED U... I...WANT YOU...PLEASE...I LOVE U ..I LOVE U SOOO MUCH..."

He held her hand ...and buried his face in her palm..

"I'll DIE WITH OUT YOU... PLEASE"

"PLEASE COME BACK TO ME... I NEED U SHARON... I CANT LIVE WITHOUT U..."

"PLEASE DONT LEAVE ME... I LOVE YOU...PLEASE DONT LEAVE ME..."

He kept crying... holding her hand...

Doctors and gang were standing and watching the emotional moment going on...when they suddenly hear a beep... they saw a faint raise in heart beat rate... They have started their work..trying to save her... her heart beat was increasing gradually...

Swayam kept pleading her... he kept crying...

Gang was relieved and smiled among their tears as they saw some improvement in her condition...

Swayam felt her hand moving... he just looked up... he saw ...her eyelids moving... she was trying to open her eyes... he smiled through his tears... he he looked at the gang...

She has opened her eyes... and saw a faint and blurred image of her love ...holding her hand...

He felt so happy... he felt peace... he felt so...happy that he could not even put it in any kind of words...

He held her hand and kissed it.

She felt.. it was a dream...she felt so light... she didn't feel her senses...except his touch...she could see him smiling even through her blurred eyes... she could feel him... She felt his kiss.. She felt euphoric... she felt alive...

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Posted: 11 years ago
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unres

This was some brilliant stuff varshu di..seriously..
You showed Swayam's pain wonderfully..i had tears in my eyes reading it..
The way he was shouting for Sharon to come back was heart wrenching.. :'(
brilliantly written di..thanks fr wrtng
and thanks for the PM

P.S. Me first :D
Edited by Nishi.Kss - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
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RES



Unres

Oh My God!!!
Like Seriously!
You know what you've done??

You made me cry ya 😭
I mean Seriously!
Jo kuch main kal episode dekhte waqt feel karna chahti thi..
Woh aaj tumhara yeh OS padhke feel hua hai..
I can't tell you How Much I loved It!!!
It was exactly how I wished seeing Swayam yesterday..
Woh hai na.. Woh tadap dekhni thi jisko dekh ke Swayam ke saath rona aaye
I felt it while reading this OS
It was an Amazing job done by you dear 👏
Apt Emotions.. Apt Words.. Apt Song..
Just Perfect!
Now I really can't wait to read the next part

Please Update soon dear
Eager to ready ahead

P.S Thank you SO SO SO SO much for writing this 😃 And also Thanks for the PM too 😳
Edited by Tan.vish.K - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
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unres..

ahaaa di its an aswom update..

hum to apki writing ke fan ho gaya...

kya bat ha kya dialoug the... ek dum hindi film jaisa...

sharon opend her eyes...

i actully feel swYam pain Im DiaLoUg ..

upDTe sOon ...

p.S :- pLzz UPdTe yAaaDie
Edited by varsh-mayur - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
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amazing...😉...and bg music is too appt..which is giving it a heavenly touch...and great work once again varsh👍🏼update soon please😉
Edited by anindo_vrushan - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
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mind blowing nd heart touching os yaar... ds is what I wanna see in show... swayam's pain, guilt everything was penned down beautifully... plz update soon..
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Posted: 11 years ago
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mind blowing nd heart touching os yaar... ds is what I wanna see in show... swayam's pain, guilt everything was penned down beautifully... plz update soon.. thanks 4 d pm
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Yaar varshu am not able to read it cos my phone screen is switching off again n again cos u have put song in it😔
I badly wanna read n woh bhi on current track am so excited 😔
Pm kar na yaar pls pls
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Read something on SwaRon after ages...loved it...

U r gifted Varshu🤗


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Posted: 11 years ago
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Yepee finally read it. .
Great work yaar. .
I simply simply loved swayam throughout. .
I actually could imagine whole thing happening in front of me. .
Swayam truly truly is sharon.s lover boy. .
I hope dat v get to see a bang on episode on Monday. .
Superb work update soon. .

Ps: thanks for pming it

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