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Shalini

@lyfisbeautiful

Voyager

Posted: 12 years ago

#11

Sure rafi let it b our little secret.. n as u said jinko samajh ana hai aa jayega n they cn join in on the secret pleasure or watever that feeling is.. looking forward to the next update!

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Phantasm

@Phantasm

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 12 years ago

#12

With many people in this forum writing on SwaRon with their amazing writing skills, I just wondered why you didn't write anything on SwaRon long back. But it seems you did write but didn't post it. I mean the post which you used to make explaining the minuscule details of SwaRon scenes which actually drew me more closer to SwaRon explained itself how beautifully you write. Well this piece was indeed beautiful and I would really love to read it further. I hope you continue it.

PS: The title seems mysterious and intriguing.

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Hibernated

Posted: 12 years ago

#13

Originally posted by: lyfisbeautiful
Sure rafi let it b our little secret.. n as u said jinko samajh ana hai aa jayega n they cn join in on the secret pleasure or watever that feeling is.. looking forward to the next update!

Wohi ... jinn ko samajh mein anaa hai ... yeh chota saa part parh ke bhi samajh mein ajayega ... Swayam Shekhawat is too good natured to fit the description of the guy in the OS . The Guy in the OS is more real ... And jinn ko samajh mein nahin anaa hai ... unko batanaa mai zaroori nahin samajhti. Its like how the Illuminati found the trail to their Churches ... jinn ko pata chalna hain , unhe aa hi jayega :)

Originally posted by: shreyasi28
Itz grt!! U shud continue!!

Thank you Shreyasi .. I hope to be able to ... but to write one needs inspiration ... and personally I have lost all , when it comes to SwaRon / TanHa

Originally posted by: Rutu
With many people in this forum writing on SwaRon with their amazing writing skills, I just wondered why you didn't write anything on SwaRon long back. But it seems you did write but didn't post it. I mean the post which you used to make explaining the minuscule details of SwaRon scenes which actually drew me more closer to SwaRon explained itself how beautifully you write. Well this piece was indeed beautiful and I would really love to read it further. I hope you continue it.

PS: The title seems mysterious and intriguing.

Rutu .. I guess back then I had enough of good SwaRon stuff to talk about without the need for me to weave more fiction ... but now that SwaRon is over ... I just wanted something to .. I dunno keep it alive.. This OS was written a LONG time .. when I had hope and inspiration .. now prospects are too bleak .. but I had to get this out of my system anyway .. so yeah ..

Edited by TanHa911 - 12 years ago

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Rahul Gupta

@ramsgupt

Explorer

Posted: 12 years ago

#14

plz continue... Seems like "Da vinci code"; I wud luv 2 break it... :-)

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Marium

@pehlanasha.

Rocker

+ 4

Posted: 12 years ago

#15

Arre,please continue karo na...and Pm me...i loved you writting skills...they are very eye catching..😊

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--Rumeli--

@--Rumeli--

Dazzler

Posted: 12 years ago

#16

Rafi dii!!you are writing an OS!!dat itself sounds sooo goood!!please please continue koro taratari!!Goa-fest was such a quick bygone for swaRon and was untended!
so i m so eager to read abt it!!
i really liked the start..the mystery gal who can attract swayam's attention can bt no one other than just the one lady who owns his heart!

Edited by --Rumeli-- - 12 years ago

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BeulaSwaRon

@BeulaSwaRon

Rocker

+ 2

Posted: 12 years ago

#17

beautiful rafi...imagining it is so beautiful...short but very heavy in a good way...want to know more...plzz continue...loved the last line you mentioned...hope u wud continue

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tanuka

@Tanuka_TanHa

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 12 years ago

#18

Awesome start to the os Rafi di !

fantastically written.

why did u stop there ?? I am eager to read further .

update the next part real soon...

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ananya randhawa

@Ananya.SwaRon

Voyager

+ 3

Posted: 12 years ago

#19

you got me with this one. it was nicely written,deceptive much. For me Details are not necessary but the feel is. that is what i found in your OS for the most,which caught me by my heart. Rinni-Simmi bit was lovely, poor they Nilesh scared them with his plastic lizard,i wonder how did the prank went on Simmi too as Rinni is very obvious but Simmi 😳. never mind,it added a layer of humor to it. the theme seems very intriguing which would make me stick to it.

P.S:i have this doubt in my mind, if the form appearing on the shore is familiar to him or stranger.

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Sawyer_Tom

@Sawyer_Tom

Dazzler

+ 3

Posted: 12 years ago

#20

Rafi, this is an incredible piece of work. You write with a sharpness that I envy. The setting is believable, the characters are believable. This feels more realistic than fictional. Your Swayam isn't really Swayam though and I know that you know that because this wasn't intended that way, was it? There is something about cold, wintry nights and warm shacks that imparts a magical feeling to any story. Combine that with a girl on the beach, looking for answers, looking for something and it takes it to a whole new level. Loneliness and confinement are two very potent combinations which you seem to portray flawlessly. It was very well written. And I told you earlier that I was surprised because this particular piece of work had no sarcasm, no snarky humour in it. I had come to associate those with your work. My Bad.

P.S. I don't know whether you should continue this as a SwaRon OS or post it like the way you intended but I'll tell you this - Everybody, at this point, is at a stage where wishful thinking seems like the best course. So if you were to post like it like the way you intended, I'm sure everybody would more than welcome it. I hope you understood what I was trying to say. 🤔