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Posted: 10 years ago
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Hello friends! I was a silent reader before this so I am sure nobody knows me here.
This is something I would have liked to happen in serial but what cvs showed was also very good.

Note- you may find this story similar to that scene in the starting but as the story progresses it is completely different to what they showed in the serial!

This is from where ajabde and pratap come to ajabde's room as ajabde has still not realized that it is the real pratap she is talking to!

Here u go!

"aaiye bethiye yaha or hiliyega mat jab tak hum na kahe"

Saying this ajabde started walking away but pratap also stood up to follow her. she turned around and glared at him making him gulp and he sat down again.

"aap samajhte kya hai apne aap ko. Subah se dekhre hai ki hum jaha bhi jaate hain aap hamare piche piche aa jaate hai aur aate hai toh aate hai hume aadesh dete hai so alag."

"kabhi laxmi ka dhyan rakhna, toh kabhi zyada mirchi mat khaao"

"par me..." pratap started to clarify but she cut him off again.

"kuch ni suna hume bas"

Saying this ajabde sat on the sofa in front of him

He kept staring at her wondering how and when did that innocent and introvert ajabde started speaking so much.

"kya hua, aise kyo dekh rhe hai" she said blushing lightly but he didn't reply and started looking elsewhere.

"aap naraz hogaye na, shama kijiyega hume wo hum gusse meh the" said ajabde sitting besides him. Pratap started looking the other side pretending to be angry enjoying her attention

"sach bataye toh bhaut acha lagta hai hume jab aap iss tarah hamesha humare saath rehte hai"

"waise bhi asli pratap toh kabhi aayenge nahi" he jerked his head to where she was sitting but she was too lost to notice

"jaante hai, hume hamesha lagta tha ki chaahe pratap kitne he gussa ho humse par kabhi na kabhi zaroor aayenge hume lene par" she stopped again thinking about her previous meeting with pratap

"par kya" pratap asked wanting to know her inner feelings

"par pichli baar unse milke hume ye ehsaas hua ki sirf gussa nahi hai wo, nafrat karte hai humse itni nafrat ki mukh tak nahi dekhna chaahte the hamara" a tear leaked out of her eyes which pratap wanted to wipe away but controlled wanting to know how much pain she is going through because of him

"itni narfrat ki humse zyada izzat wo patta ki jeeja ki karte hai aur chaahe wo or hum ek he ho par sach toh yehi haina ki ye sach jaane ke baad wo unse bhi nafrat karne lage"
Ajabde unaware that this is the real pratap she is talking to continued

"aadat si hogayi hai unke bina jeene ki, har din iss dard ko sehne ki, jaise dosti si hogayo ho iss akelepan se" by now ajabde was crying silently

"unki bhi kya galti hai, unhe lagta hai ki raanima ke mehel chodhne ka kaaran hum hai, nafrat toh karenge he na"

"par phir bhi yaad to aayegi he na aakhir pati hai wo humare" she said turning her face to look at him and giving him a sad smile

"waise acha he hai ki aap humaare saath hai" she said getting up

"ab kam se kam koi to hoga jisse hum hamari dil ki baatein kar sake. Wo kya haina maa ko ye sab batayenge toh wo pareshan ho jaayengi humare lie par aap, aap toh humaare andar he haina humaari ek kalpana" she said giving a huge smile this time

Here pratap was heartbroken seeing her condition. He didn't in the slighest have an idea that his behaviour would have hurt her so much

Pratap (st)- "hum vada karte hai ajabde phir kabhi apki aankhon meh aasun nahi aane denge"

"chaliye chodhiye ye sab aa.."
She stopped when she saw hansabai coming towards her room with veerbai and two other girls in tow

"arre pratap aap yaha hai aur humne aapko pure mehel meh dhundlia" hansabai said to pratap

Ajabde's eyes widened realizing that it was the real pratap she has been pouring her heart to

She looking at pratap but then looked down not able to meet his eyes

Pratap greeted hansabai and touched her feet while seeing ajabde did the same to veerbai

She was introduced to maan and chand and after exchanging pleasentries they left from their

Here ajabde was tensed wondering what to say to pratap after the way she behaved and said all those things to him

"h..hume shama krdijiyega" she said not meeting his eyes

"hume pata nahi tha ki aap sach meh hai yaha. Hum..hum abhi maa ko bolke aate hai ki aap hume lene nahi aaye. Aapko yaha dekhke unhe galat fehmi hogyi hogi shayad" she blabbered nervously and started going but pratap stopped her by holding her hand

"rukiye ajabde"

Ajabde closed her eyes listening her name though his mouth and a tear made its way out of her eyes.

Thats it for now!

Pls lev ur feedback and silent readers this is a special msg for u guyz 😛


**Index**

Ch-1 pg-1
Ch-2 pg-2
Ch-3 pg-3
Ch-4 pg-4
Ch-5 pg-5
Edited by ilovei - 10 years ago

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Posted: 10 years ago
#2
wow this is great i so wish this would have happened... please continue soon
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Posted: 10 years ago
#3
Awesome begining
loved it
i wish ajabde sa galti sa hi sahi muah sa nikal jaya ki usko adaat hai akaalepaan ki
Plzz do continue
Kaam se kaam ss ma to kuch logical milaga
cvs to kudh hi apni script bhul jata hai
really ajabde not once questioned pratab about his behaviour
preleap ma khud hi kaha tha jab tak app hampe vishwas nahi karega ms apka prem nahi apnogi
but they forgotten everuthing 😕 👏
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Posted: 10 years ago
#4
wao its actually very good loved to read each bit of it !! atleast it made pratap realise the damage he made on Ajabde in absence ! its very nice...😊
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Ohhh superb..wish this could have happened in serial also... In serial stupid ajabde was behaving like she is so despo that she forgot what prtap had said to her...
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Posted: 10 years ago
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I wish the actual episode had been like this. This is so perfect. Please continue.
CV's have ruined this track in the show. Your write-up makes up for our loss. Thanks for writing.
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Wow. ...ur take on the epi is amazing. ..hope they cd hv shown sth like this instead of making ajabde look kinda desperate. ...waiting for ur next update
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Posted: 10 years ago
#8
Its awesome...
please do continue...
wished something like this happen in the serial
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Posted: 10 years ago
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plez cntinue soon..waitg😃
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Posted: 10 years ago
#10
Thanku so much for all your reviews!!!
Here's the update!

She turned around with her eyes closed while one by one tears were dropping on her cheeks

Pratap brought is other hand forward and started wiping them but ajabde shocked at the sudden touch took a step back. She looked at him with confusion in her eyes trying to figure out what was going in his mind.

"aap kyo kar rhe hai ye sab, kyo aaye hai aap yahan" pratap started to take a step forward but she again took a step back

"nahi, door rahiye humse ek aur galat fehmi nahi paalna chahte hum apne man meh"

"bas hamaare ek sawal ka jawab dedijiye ki ab kyo aaye hai aap yahan?"

"aapko wapas lene" said pratap unsure of her reaction

"wapas lene? Kyo, ab kyo jab aap khud pichli baar hume rota hua chodh gaye the"

"kyoki ab hume ehsaas ho gaya hai ki aapka koi dosh nahi tha. rani maa ke mahal chodh kar jane meh aapka koi haath nahi tha" He said holding her by he elbows

"hogaya aapko vishwas humpar, par kab? Jab aapko shi laga, tab ka kya hua jab hum chilla chilla kar bol rhe the ki humara koi dosh nahi hai, aur pichli baar bhi toh kaha tha na humne ki le jaaiye hume, toh kyo nahi maani humari baat, kyo chale gaye yun akela chodh ke" said ajabde moving out of his hold

No she was not blaming him nor was trying to make him feel guilty about it. She genuinely wanted answers for what was happening. She really wanted to know that if he knew that she was not the one to be blamed that why did he not tell her this the last time.

"kyoki bandhe hue the hum. Jab chote the toh nahi jaante the ki kya kare. Rani maa ko khone ka dukh itna zyada tha ki uske saamne aap ya koi bhi nazar he nahi aaya"

"thode bade hue toh ehsaas hua ki aapke bina jee pana kitna mushkil hai par phir bhi mewad ki dekh rekh meh he man laga lia apna taaki aapko zyada yaad na krre"

"phir bijolia aaye, mile aapse toh samajh aaya ki aap toh kar he nahi sakti aise, ki jitna prem hum apni raani maa se karte hai utna he aap bhi karti hai" he said a small smile playing on his lips

"par phir bhi nahi keh paaye, kya kehte vachan badh the hum, vachan diya tha raajiraj ko ki milenge bhi nahi aapse"
He said with a frown

"hum jaante hai ajabde ki humne bhaut peeda pahuchayi hai aapko, par sach keh rahe hai ki hume bhi utni he peeda hui hai inn sab meh"

"uss vachan ko chaahkar bhi nahi tod sakte the hum"

Ajabde broke down on her knees, tears continously flowing out of her eyes
"aur humara kya?" she said looking at him

"aapke lie aapka vachan zaruri hai par hum nahi" pratap's heart constricted in his chest seeing her condition. He knelt down besides her cupping her face in his hands looking into her soul through her eyes

"hum jaante hai ki humne jo kia galat kia, shayad puri zindagi lag jaaye hume iss galti ko sudharne meh par hum tayar hai puri zindagi maafi mangne ke lie"

Ajabde hugged him not able to control her emotions anymore

They sat there for ages with his hand around her waist and her head on his chest. She crying her heart out for all she has gone through in all these years and he soothing her pain while whispering sweet nothings in her ears. Telling her that he could never hate her nor did he before and never will thereafter and the two love birds made up for the lost time in each others arms not saying anything while their hearts communicated through beats <3


That's it!
Gonna wait for your response!
Edited by ilovei - 10 years ago

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