PrAja SS: After Marriage : Scene 4# UPDATED Pg7 30/06 - Page 3

while i was the one giving page-long comments...i am now at a loss of words for such beautiful PrAja works...this was really beautiful...the last hay scene...that was the cutest...and its PrAja...they are equal everywhere...and their love for each other is so deep...i wonder how hard wud it be fighting with each other...but what u wrote...there wasn't a single moment out of place...it really went very nicely...and i loved the highlight... ;)

the second moment...it was literally even more beautiful...

morning time...

breaking dawn...

the vicinity of silence...

the intensity of the moment...

the chills which run down the spine...

the blushing and shyness in front of each other...

the sweet moments only for each other...

the blushing n sweet awkwardness...

the care for each other...

the eyelocks...

this was really nice...really really really beautiful

well i shud also mention, that i am not saying that this is amazing...i use amazing when some works ignite the adrenaline in me and make me go, "Oh wow!"...and that happens once in a while...but this piece of writing...it...it touched me...it touched my heart...and i get touched by writings...once in a blue moon...yup...this writing was even more than amazing...

keep it up!!!!!

i'll wait for other works... :)

dear...don't u call ur writing crap...

they r super-fabulous!!!!

and i guess ur name is Kanishka...

so Kanishka...

keep on writing...i'm so sure that ppl will recognize ur works soon... :)

Recap: Ajabde and Pratap had a beautiful morning nd ajabde did d aarti nd sang d bhajan...Uday Singh had called Pratap for some work...nd ajabde had gone to complete her puja...

Ajabde was still lost in d thoughts of pratap...hw he had showed hi love for her in d morning...she blushed thinking of wht all had haped in d morning...she thanked kanha ji for giving her such a lovely husband...lost in her thoughts, she didn't notice a stone on her path...she tripped...but she was prevented by d fall by two strong hands...she luked up nd it was none other than pratap...pratap was following ajabde after he had discussed wid his dajiraj sum rajnaitik problems...he had reached at d ri8 tym...

P: hum apko kuchh nhi hone denge ajabde...apko koi chot nhi aane denge...kyunki jab apko chot lgti hai to hume mehsoos hota hai...

They were luking in each others eyes...ajabde was stunned by wht pratap said...how could a man of such valour speak such words...

A(as usual): aa...aap yaha?

P: han hum yaha...hum apne mahal me nhi honge to kaha hone ajabde (teasing)

A: w...wo sh..shama karie...humare kehne ka wo mtlb nhi tha...

P: koi bat nhi..chlie...aap mandir jar hi hai na? hum bhi chlte hai...

A: ji...

THhey both go nd take blessings..Suddenly d wind starts blowing nd d diya was about to...(I don't knw wht we call diya bhujhna..hee hee..) they both cup their hands around it...they both have an eyelock...

A: hum ranima ke pas jate hai...unhone hume bulaya tha..

P: tik hai ajabde...aur hum dangalsthal...

Ajabde goes 2 d rasoighar where ranima was waiting for her...

J: ajabde...apko to pta hi hai na...humare pratap ko kheer bahot pasand hai...to kya ap aj kheer bna dengi..?

A: ranima aaj ka sara bhojan hum bna de? Wo hume bahot kam avsar milta hai bhojan bnane ke lie..islie humne socha ki...

J(to dasiyan): aaj ka bhojan ajabde bna rhi hai...dhyaan rkhiega agr unhe kisi prakar ki sahayta ki avyashakta ho to...

A: ranima..hume sahayta ki avyashakta nhi hai...aaj ke lie ap in sbko avkash de dijie ranima...

J: aap kar paengi ajabde? Akele?

A: ji ranima..ap chinta mt kijie..

J(to dasiyan): aj ap sbka avkash hai..kal hi aiega aap sab...

They al go frm there..

J: hum bhi chlte hai ajabde...koi sahayta chahie ho to hume bula lijiega..

A: ji ranima..

Ajabde prepares all d favourute foods of d chittor family...then she prepares to make kheer...Pratap was in d corridor...He smells d sweet aroma of kheer...

P(thinking): lgta hair anima humare lie kheer bna rhi hai...abhi ranima ke pas jakar unhe dhanyawaad kehte hai...Pratap goes to d rasoighr nd finds ajabde making kheer dere...

P: to ap hai jo humare lie kheer bna rhi hai ajabde...aur wo bhi akele? Sari dasiyan kaha hai?

A: s aj un sb ka avkash hai...aj hum hi sbke lie bhojan bna rhe hai...waise ap to dangalsthal gae hue the na...

P: han wo hum wapas aa hi rhe the ki aapke kheer ki khushboo aa gai aur hum yaha aa gae...

Suddenly both smell something burning...when they were talking d kheer had just started to burn...they both hold d spoon to stir it...nd have an eyelock...while luking at each other they started to stir d kheer...they were lost in each other...suddenly ajabde's hand touch d hot vessel...

A: aa...!!

P: ajabde!!!

He holds her hand nd takes it under the running water...

P(very fast, shouting): aap bhi na ajbde...kuchh dhyaan se nhi krti...dekhie ...lg gain a chot...aur humne apse kaha than a...jub aapko kuchh hota hai to dard humko hota hai...chlie abhi vaid ji ke pas se aushadhi lekar ate hai...nnhi...aap yahi rukie hum lekar aate hai...yahi rukiega...yaha se ek pag bhi mat hiliega..smjhi ap...?

Ajabde was lost in pratap...she was ;lost in his care for her...she saw love in his eyes...she was so lucky...a tear dropped from her eyes...pratap noticed it

P: roie mt ajabde..kuchh nhi hoga hum la rhe hai na aushadhi...

Pratap rubs her tears...r...

P: roie mt ajabde...hum abhi ae...

Ajabde goes nd finishes making d kheer..

By d tym pratap returns nd sees her putting d kheer in d pot...

P(angry): humne apse kaha than a ajabde chup chap khari rahiega...par ap...ap to humari bat hi nhi manti...

A: w...wo...hume shama karie..

P: lijie hum lae hai apke lie aushadhi./...chalie kaksh me..

They go 2 their room...Pratap applies medicine to her soft hands...while applying he feels d pain lyk he only had got d burn...he blows air to it...

Ajabde was still luking at him...Pratap puts his hand on her shoulder..

P: hume vachan dijie ajabde ki ap apna dhyan rkhengi...kumsekum humare lie..

Ajabde was so overwhelmed tht she laid her head on his shoulders...

A: apka bahot bahot dhanyawaad..

P: ye ap kya keh rhi hai ajabde...hum apko kbhi kuchh nhi hone denge chahe hum khud hi kyu na mar...

A(puuting her hand on pratap's mouth): mare apke shatru...aisa mt bolie...abhi to humare nae jeevan ka arambh hua hai aur ap abhi se ye sari baten kar rhe hai?

P(kissing her forehead): hum apse bahot prem krte hain ajabde...

A(blushing) again lays her head on his shoulders nd feels all d peace...Pratap also feels d same...they seemed lost in each other...living for each other..

P:abhi jo humne apse kaha...aj tak apne to kbhoi humse nhi kaha haina?

A(blushes): hume bahot kam hai...hum chlte hai...nd runs away frm there...

In d dinner hall...

Ajabde serves fod to all d members of d family...Only Pratap knew tht ajabde had made d food nd jaiwanta baiji too...After eating d first morsel...Pratap and Uday Singh(together): jaiwantabai ji(US), ajabde(pratap)

They both luk at each other...

US: aaj to bhojan bahot hi achchha bana hai jaiwanta baiji...

P: dajiraj aaj hojan ajabde ne bnaya hai...

US luked shocked...

US: ajabde...itna swadisht bhojan! Apke hathon me to jadu hai...bilkul apki ranima ki tarah...

Pratap ttastes d kheer nd indicates ajabde tht it was vry nyc...ajabde bows her head in a thnks...

As we know ..women at tht tym ate after their husbands ate...during tht tym...d kheer got finished nd ajabde dindnt get it...but no one knew about it...she didn't ell anyone...She goes to d kitchen after d lunch nd sees pratap standing there..

A: aap yaha kya kr rhe hai? Kuchh kam tha kya..

P: apne kheer nhi khai na ajabde?

A: n..nhi wo...kha li...(not luking at his eyes)

P: humse jhoot bolengi ajabde...hume pta hai...aapke lie kheer nhi bachi thin a...aur apne ye bat kisi se kahi bhi nhi...Islie humne apke lie thodi si kheer is katori me rkh di thi...

He shows her d bowl wid kheer...

A: dhanyawaad..

P(taking sum kheer on d spoo): ye lijie ajabde...

Ajabde nd pratap...each luking t each others eyes...Praatap gives d kheer to ajabde...while doing this...a small amount stick to d side of ajabde's lips..

Pratap moves hius hands nd rubs it of...Ajabde goes tomato red...They have an eyelock...

P: ajabde apne abhi tak apne man ki bat nhi btai hume..

A: h...kaisi bat..

P: apko pta nhi hai jaise..

A(blushes) nd runs away frm there...Pratap luks at her retreating figure...smiling...

Precap: ajabde tells her man ki bat...nd PrAja moments...😳😳

please bear wid this crap...hee hee...tamatars, rotten eggs, chappals...r not allowed...Likes nd comments wud inspire me more...Plz tell if u want me to write more...plz share ur views about this...😊