Ippudu baagundi- LWL Drabble series

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Posted: 11 years ago
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Hello hello...

Vinu's torture is back!

This one is also a part of my HarshIka/ZaYa drabble series, now officially the "Lipgloss wala love series" and I suck at keeping titles so don't mind!

All those who are aware or unaware of the concept of the series, please refer to this post

READ IT COMPULSORY even the OLD readers!

And coming to this one,

scene: mainu kuch nahi bolna..khud batao mujhe ki kaunsi scene hai! šŸ˜›

Ippudu baagundi


Aliya/Preetika's POV

He put his hand next to me and I moved a little and turned my head to look at his hand. "nahin ... bilkul math mudna. Only look into his eyes in the entire shot" Maan sir screamed again! Look into his eyes? I could offer to jump from this window instead! For God's sake it's my close-up shot not his. I'm sure the second I look into his eyes, I'll be paralyzed! But I did it and as expected, I am doing nothing but looking at those irrationally deep eyes. Not like how deep they usually are... they were a thousand times more. Can't he stand neutral- expressionless? It's only his ears and shoulders that are covered by the camera!!! "Aliya dialogue bolo! kaha ghum hogayi? Aliya" and I looked at sir, after putting in great effort to detach my eyes from his, mind you and gestured that nothing is wrong and we will go for a take.

It took a good 20 minutes to finally tell my dialogues properly! Can you imagine? Just 3 lines and 20 minutes and this moron! He was enjoying himself I'm sure. Why was he looking at me like that? Dare he tell me that he was being Zain! He for sure was not. His eyes are literally boring into me. I felt like I'm totally transparent in front of him. His eyes today have an intensity which Zain's never had, looking at me with such a passion that Zain was not even supposed to have! But what is scaring the hell out of me is the shot which is coming up. "Ready?" I heard a voice and saw him nod softly and my head moved in sync, involuntarily. "Action" and he came forward till his nose was almost touching mine and my eyelids suddenly became heavy and my breathing deepened. I was not hyper ventilating but my breath did deepen considerably. The next thing I could feel was his stubble rubbing against my cheeks, possibly transferring the pink color on it onto my cheek. It felt a little prickly and I would have laughed because of the sensation if it was anyone else. But this guy always makes everything difficult for me! Even breathing. Thank god he finally let go off my skin. I opened my eye expecting a naughty or victorious or casual look but damn! it's that intense look again! "Cut. Good one. We'll go for a break now. Pree, you don't look alright... tum thoda rest lo" I looked at Maan sir and nodded. I was kind of relieved. Finally done. But... maybe not! He was still looking at me...like that. It was probably one of the top 10 seconds I would regret in life- the second when my eyes met his!

I felt his finger on my cheek. Index finger probably. It moved across the area of my cheeks which was coloured by him, in his colour. But in all this, his eyes never let go off mine. He was just... staring? Ok fine gazing at me! the next thing i felt was his finger land on my forehead...right between my brows. his lips curved into a smile. no not a smirk, a smile. in which he usually looked like a joker to me but today...no! not a joker please! he looked extremely lovable! what the! no. he can never be lovable. not to me atleast. he breaks my chain of thoughts which were travelling at 3*10^8 m/s right now! " ippudu bagundi"( abb accha hai/looks good now) hhhaaa... what did he say? what did he do? before I could say anything, he just walked away! not like I could speak even if he was here for the next 1 Hr also. I should be happy he left for good! I can breathe and be alive! but what did he actually do? I took the mirror and looked into it to find a pink bindi clad face of mine.

Hogaya..aapka torture aadha khatam!

No don't worry..iska koi 2nd part nahi hai!

Just that abb aapko like n comment karna hai!

Then ur torture will be only to read my replies

Toh jaldi like n reply

And Pleejjj...res karke bhoolo math

other drabbles--> At the end of this post

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Posted: 11 years ago
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unres...!! OMG...!! I M FIRST...!!
Sorry Bombshell...you are late...!!šŸ˜Ž

Ab...ok...was that window scene...??😳
Hayyy...Harshu staring intensely at her...and aakhir baat kuch aur hi thi...Bindi...how cute is that
The deep gaze...wo bhi Hrshu ka?? Hayy hayy...🤪
20 mins...??? Good going pree😳...
I liked Pree ka POV...and Harshu ki smile...(i can imagine na?)
This was written beautifully...
Kaash ye sab sach hota...(which could be😳)
Aise hi torchure karti reh Buttercup...mujhe intezaar rahega...!!šŸ¤—

P.S.-I LOVE YOU MORE...!!!

Edited by ZayaShiz - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Unres

Beautifully written šŸ‘... Hayye the holi scene 😳

Who can survive through harshu's intense gaze pree KO bhi phasna hi padega

Loved it and keep writing

Thanks for the pm

Love
Afu
Edited by zaya143 - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: ZayaShiz

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unres...!! OMG...!! I M FIRST...!!
Sorry Bombshell...you are late...!!šŸ˜Žchup kar! aate hi mera class legi! tere liye use BJKT diya aaj!

Ab...ok...was that window scene...??😳kaunsi waali?šŸ˜•šŸ˜•
Hayyy...Harshu staring intensely at her...and aakhir baat kuch aur hi thi...Bindi...how cute is thatthank god idea flop nahi hua!šŸ˜†šŸ˜†šŸ˜†
The deep gaze...wo bhi Hrshu ka?? Hayy hayy...🤪haaa...
20 mins...??? Good going pree😳...sadist kahiki!šŸ˜†šŸ˜†šŸ˜†
I liked Pree ka POV...and Harshu ki smile...(i can imagine na?) joh tere marzi!šŸ˜›
This was written beautifully...
Kaash ye sab sach hota...(which could be😳)don't drill me! yeh PURE IMAGINATION hai! iss liye read the post i have hyperlinked!
Aise hi torchure karti reh Buttercup...mujhe intezaar rahega...!!šŸ¤—

P.S.-I LOVE YOU MORE...!!!

lolz...I LOVE U MORE!
thank u
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Posted: 11 years ago
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sr wala scene.ā˜ŗļø...i guess...suuuperbbb update as alwaysšŸ‘ ...beautifully pennedšŸ‘šŸ¼ ...loved itā¤ļøā¤ļø.ty so much for d pm..
Edited by RUHANIKAA - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: RUHANIKAA

holi wala scene.ā˜ŗļø...i guess...suuuperbbb update as alwaysšŸ‘ ...beautifully pennedšŸ‘šŸ¼ ...loved itā¤ļøā¤ļø.ty so much for d pm..

PERFECT! šŸ‘šŸ¼itsthe Holi waala scene😳😳😳
thank u so much dear😳😳😳
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Really very well written
I loved it
Hey used Telugu language to the title"
Ippudu baagundi" means "Ab acha/theek hai"
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: vinu127

lolz...I LOVE U MORE!

thank u

phirse...?
u r welcum..n i love u more/...
Edited by ZayaShiz - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: preeharsh

Really very well written
I loved it
Hey used Telugu language to the title"
Ippudu baagundi" means "Ab acha/theek hai"

thanks dear
yup.. its telugu and meaning maine drabble me likha hai in the brackets in the last 3rd or 4th line
as i said in the concept post, Rao's are south indians and Kannada did not sit well in the flow so i used telugu
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Beti jaan.. .you used Telugu title for this ...and upar se holi wali scene ... i just love you for this kanna...!!!!!!!*Muah*

Reswaaa..!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

~~~~~~EDITED~~~~~~~

I'm here after reading the drabble with great concentration and in total criticism mode..!!!

And guess how did i feel after reading it ..???

guess karthi raho .. i will be back after reading your drabble again..!!!šŸ˜‰šŸ˜‰

~~~~~~~RE-EDITED~~~~~~

Well beti jaan ...you have done a amazing job jannu...the emotion were portrayed pretty well..and yes you have improved a lot dearu..keep going ..on whole.. i liked it ( mind you liked it ..not loved it ..!!)well i'm half satisfied...and you have to work pretty more harder to make me fully satisfied ..!

Now on a side note:

i just loved the way you expressed aaliya's feeling .. zain staring at her for mins together.. and aaliya getting disturbed..was totally aww😳😳

Request :

can i get harshu's POV for this drabble plejjj..!!!!

PS: This comment was not done in strict criticism mode..!!!

Edited by ...Renu... - 11 years ago

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