SanRaj Moments We wish For (Updated pg 49) - Page 18

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Posted: 15 years ago
Such a beautiful,tender moment.Such effortless writing style you have,Rakhie,Its like enjoying a candy.Didnt even know when it got over.

CVs should be ashamed of themselves.The scenes they show dont come anywhere near yours.Do keep writing,after the holidays,that is,Enjoy the break,Rakhie. šŸ¤—

As for the epi,i have absolutely no comments.
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Posted: 15 years ago

when reading i can almost smell the jasmines & hear a soft , tender music plays at the back...😳

how elegant & simple is your writing ...just like a fresh breeze of air.....šŸ‘.this is what the show sud be about : ā¤ļøRā¤ļøOā¤ļøMā¤ļøAā¤ļøNā¤ļøCā¤ļøEā¤ļø.... not all that long lasting crap of conspiracies,fights and banishments...😔
keep on dazzling us rakhi...šŸ‘šŸ¼šŸ¤—
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Posted: 15 years ago
Yeah, Rakhi, as Hamdasgh has described, your stories are so fluid and like a breath of fresh air. The flowers are blooming, the birds are singing, the air is so refreshing, these are the descriptions that fit your story.

I don't really know how to describe the plot now, I don't mind it ,as long as they give some SanRaj scenes. But we have not had any romantic scenes at all in a looooonnnnnggg time.
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Posted: 15 years ago
Hi Rakhi
Thx a lot. here i am not getting the words to describe my happiness. really its tooooooooooooooo gud
ur story was realllllllly gud and it's more more more ................... than my actual expecations.
Rakhi Thx a lot
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Posted: 15 years ago
Marvellous work,
Have a wonderful break!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Posted: 15 years ago
CVs made a mess of what could have been beautiful after SR moments. Rakhi you have more than made up for it . you should seriously think of a career in romantic fiction
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Posted: 15 years ago
Rakhi
i felt the following sentence describes how much u r romantic and how much DM loves SDM
'I asked one of the women of the village to bring a gajra early in the morning for me so that your day starts with a beautiful fragrance, jaise mere din ke shuruat teri khushbu se hone lage
Really i lost my self after reading ur story
Thx, Thx, Thx --------------------------- N no of times
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Posted: 15 years ago
Thanks everyone for liking the scene so much.
@ Mallika - Wish I could say I was going somewhere glamorous, but no such luck. Off to the in-laws to spend the hols with the Addams Family šŸ˜•
@ Vidya - You're most welcome. I'm happy to have met your expectations with my SanRaj moment.
As for that particular line. In my head I was imagining DM to say it in a similar manner as that day when he told her 'mera mann ka bahut priya hai tu'. Sweet, but not overly romantic as that isn't really DM. In my head, he says it more nonchalantly than it probably appears on paper, so to speak.
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Posted: 15 years ago
I'm happy to have met your expectations with my SanRaj moment.
Not met with my Expectations, it's more more more ..................... than that.
Thx a lot Rakhi
I have one more request for you.
The day when DM asked her not to sleep on the Ground
cv's ruined that scene, i know u can prescent it in very gud scene
here i am giving my idea also, u can use this sceleton for ur writing if u feel it worthy
Next day after SR
DM was looking for Santu and found her in Kitchen
He asked her that, whether she is having any plans to sleep or not ? (the time is around 10 pm)
she told that she need to sing a lori for suraj, after that she can go to bed. DM got irritated and told that OK better u sleep in his room only
She said fine (she didn't understand his words) and she went to suraj room to sing a lori for him
After some time again DM came out searching of her to Suraj room and found that she slept there only (Got surprised)
He called her and asked why r u sleeping here? she told that as u told. then he told duffer get some milk for me
She told that ok i will get the milk to ur room
When she reached his room with milk, he told that
This is not mine alone
This is our room, This is our Bed and u shd get realized with these things as u became my wife and malikin of this house as well as Dharampur
Note: plz ignore if u/anybody didn't like it
Edited by vrsharma - 15 years ago
svmi thumbnail
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Posted: 15 years ago
Hi VR
you are not bad yourself. sweet scene. so many lost opportunities . Makes me more angry at CVs.

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