The wee bird sings in abandon!

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Posted: 15 years ago
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This is the first of two poems. i wrote this one for Hema as i promised her!
The next one is for DM and will come out soon!šŸ˜†
The wee bird sings in abandon!

I saw a wee robin one day in the valley

Her breast glowed red at dawn.

I watched her as she hopped and skipped

From branch to bough, playing the rhapsody

Of her journey towards womanhood!

I saw the wee robin another day in the plains,

Her breast was pale and shadowed.

I saw her as she flitted and rushed nervously

From bush to briar, crooning a poignant melody

Of unrequited passion in a loveless union!

I saw a lion lumbering one day in the plains

His mane glowed fiercely amber at dawn.

I watched him prowl, aimless and restless

From bush to briar, snarling a warning

Of love lost in the pathos of parting!

I spied the wee robin perched on the lion's tail that day

Her breast glowed red as his mane did amber

She picked the sores on his back tenderly

Anointing them with her prayers and love!

He snapped at her furiously and cruelly

Snarling a curse of angry disdain!

I saw the wee robin perched between the lion's ears today.

A powerful blend of crimson and amber,

He carries her tenderly as she croons a melody

Of pure and unfettered love!

He carries her flamboyantly as she relates the tale,

Of the blossoming passion between

The wee robin and the lumbering lion!

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fuzzyface thumbnail
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Posted: 15 years ago
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hey there nice work again

used a lot imagery and metaphors

keep it up

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Posted: 15 years ago
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Originally posted by: fuzzyface

hey there nice work again

used a lot imagery and metaphors

keep it up

šŸ˜‰ thought you would notice the imagery.
It helps to keep the boredom out of the process of composition.
Gosh! i feel awful man as though i just ate sand and my head is stuffed with cotton wool. Sigh! i so want to join you all during the episode. Damn!
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Posted: 15 years ago
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Beautiful poem, love the imagery! Gives it such a good visual imagery😃
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Posted: 15 years ago
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Wee Robin and Lumbering Lion 😃

Great poem Chalia...You have to fulfill my wish too..I put my application long back..Remember?Not asking you to wrote romance yaar..just your master piece humor. 😊
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Chalia is our resident poet😃
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Posted: 15 years ago
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Beautiful poem chalia, traces SanRaj journey beautifully.
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Can there be anything more honourable than this..to me..awwww..Chalia..Thank you so much dear..I really am lost for words to explain my happiness that you have dedicated this awesome poem for Sanraj..to me..i will cherish this..I have already saved it..in my pc !! Love ya..ITS SIMPLY AS AWESOME AS EVER..NEED I SAY THAT..!!..You seriously need to write & make it your proffesion..And way to Hifi..in certain areas..I mean a duffod like me..need to really concentrate & read it..you see...to clearly understand..Too good..Love ya..šŸ¤— Hema
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Posted: 15 years ago
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Originally posted by: fuzzyface

hey there nice work again.............used a lot imagery and metaphors........................keep it up



I really applaud it................

but silly me..........what if the lion gets hungry one day and eat that wee red breasted Robin as a Snack.........


I know u guys r going to kill me for even imaging it.............but isn't the LION "HADES"..........rememebr Fuzzy....


But honestly Speaking.......A good poem and good use of metaphores and imagination.........šŸ‘BRAVO CHALIA...........
anxiously awaiting ur poem about DM..........
Gopikas should go nuts then........šŸ˜‰
and I might turn into one...who knows😳
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Posted: 15 years ago
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Originally posted by: HAOOY

Can there be anything more honourable than this..to me..awwww..Chalia..Thank you so much dear..I really am lost for words to explain my happiness that you have dedicated this awesome poem for Sanraj..to me..i will cherish this..I have already saved it..in my pc !! Love ya..ITS SIMPLY AS AWESOME AS EVER..NEED I SAY THAT..!!..You seriously need to write & make it your proffesion..And way to Hifi..in certain areas..I mean a duffod like me..need to really concentrate & read it..you see...to clearly understand..Too good..Love ya..šŸ¤— Hema

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Thanks Hema. Glad you liked it.
My dear, I already have a "noble" profession which takes three-fourths of my brain away. Whats left of it goes to satisfying my creative instincts or whats left of it. I have my phases when i can write prolifically and i have my dry times too. Can feel those coming up. Lets see!
Anyway, do stay on my dear. The best is yet to be!

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