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Posted: 13 years ago

Hey! guys thats the very first time i'm trying my hand on a Fan Fiction! Hope you all like it 😳 plzz comment and critisize and suggest too coz i don't think i'm too good at it. 😕

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Part- 1 ~ Page 1

Part- 2 ~ Page 5

Part 3-A ~ Page 8

Part 3-B ~ Page 10

Edited by ayushi.luvsid - 13 years ago

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Ayushi Budhia

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Posted: 13 years ago

PART 1

After all the thing in mela Shiv was quite interested to know about this Bal vivah thing in deep.

"Although it's no more in practice, how many have been and are bearing its consequences?" Shiv thought ot himself while he got sometime alone after standing among the people who were trying to impress him...

Everything was quite by now atleast if compared the crowd was less it was just the few shopkeepers settling their shops (stalls).

Just then his gaze went to the girl whom he felt was perfect to ask his questions from... He saw her talking to two elderly ladies and seeking blessings from them, seeing this his lips curved into a smile he just din't know Why?

He took a step in her direction and her eyes landed on him, she saw him walking towards her she just forced a formal smile on her face as soon as thier eyes met with each other. She shifted her concentration from him to the ladies who said, "Anandi beta ab hum chale hain ghar pe ghanro saaro kaam pado hai!"

"Ji Kaki sa" she said as she bowed a li'l bit and folded her hands "Ghamba ghandin kaki sa"

"Ghandi ghamba" the lady said and and went in other dirction .

by this time Shiv was just a few steps from anandi , a perfect distance to talk from. she turned to him and politely asked "jee? aapko kuch chahiye?"

He looke at her, "nahi.. wo actu..just pucchna tha??? er..." he moved his eyes in other direction and said " er... aur kitne log hain ese?"

"matlab?" she asked?

"i..mean us bacchi jese?" Who all suffer with tihs? kis kis ke aath esa hota hai??"

She understood the serious concern he had for the Child widow...

"Ye pratha bohot saalon se se hai hamare samaaj me uhin to khatm nahi ho sakti halaki ab baal vivah toh kaafi hadd tak balki bilkul hi band ho chuka hai jaitsar mein par uske dushparinaam abhi bhi hai ab logon ki soch toh pidhi dar pidhi badalte badlte hi badlegi naa?"

He nodded.. as he listened to her carefully...

Just when Dadisa was looking for Anandi to go home she saw both them walking together smiling to each other and talking...

She went away along with the family members leaving Anandi and Shiv in the Mela groung all alone...

Edited by ayushi.luvsid - 13 years ago

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Ayushi Budhia

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Posted: 13 years ago

SORRY FOIR A SHORT ONE BUT THATS ALL WHAT I COULD THINK FOR NOW 😔 HOPE YOU ALL LIKE IT :)

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Anj01

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Posted: 13 years ago

wow amazing start!!!👏
👏
first chapter was superb⭐️
liked the way you described AnSh's first meeting👏...i also wished that they could have talked more in the mela but it didn't happen in the show.😍..at least you made it possible in your ff...thanks🤗

so dadisa is already on her mission..huh!!!😉

continue soon😊 n add me in pm list

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Ayushi Budhia

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Posted: 13 years ago

Originally posted by: anjali0111
wow amazing start!!!👏
👏
first chapter was superb⭐️
liked the way you described AnSh's first meeting👏...i also wished that they could have talked more in the mela but it didn't happen in the show.😍..at least you made it possible in your ff...thanks🤗

so dadisa is already on her mission..huh!!!😉

continue soon😊 n add me in pm list

You're already there sweety 🤗 thanx for liking it!! 😊

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Preeti Ravindra

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Posted: 13 years ago

Nice start!!!! Im glad Shivraj started his job as collector by concentrating on Baal-Vivah...Well dats 1 topic dat is definitely gonna gv him hints abt Anandi's life. 😊

I hope in d real serial too d CVs make Shiv interested in knowing more abt child marriage..dat can make things easier 4 Dadi-Sa! 😛

Thank u 4 d PM nd Im interested..so keep sending m more PMs of dis lovely FF!!!

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Pratibha mehta

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Posted: 13 years ago

wowww aayushi awesum yaaraa...
lov it my shiv ...awww...
lov u ...muhaaa!!!!!!!!!!!
thnxxx a lot ayushi for write ...

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Ayushi Budhia

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Posted: 13 years ago

Originally posted by: Riasa
wowww aayushi awesum yaaraa...
lov it my shiv ...awww...
lov u ...muhaaa!!!!!!!!!!!
thnxxx a lot ayushi for write ...

my shiv? O.o u cant say that to a fan like me 😆 jk

btw thanx 🤗

i am not getting how people are liking it its too short to be called a start of an FF

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Pratibha mehta

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Posted: 13 years ago

Originally posted by: ayushi.luvsid
my shiv? O.o u cant say that to a fan like me 😆 jk
btw thanx 🤗
i am not getting how people are liking it its too short to be called a start of an FF

noo yaaa it's a gud start dear ...tu acha likhti h ...
agar pehele pata hota tho mein tujhe sid and aastha pe ff likhne bolti bt anyways jo bhi ...
keep it up :P:P!!!!

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TheFictionFreak

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Posted: 13 years ago

#10

Nice start. Thanks for the pm...

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