Am in Love:)PRIYA'S DIARY .Updtd page 15

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Posted: 13 years ago

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most beautifully written, once again. Loved it. I agree with Neenzoo, in hoping that the whole family does not hear their argument, but other than that it is totally wonderful.

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Posted: 13 years ago

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Neenzoo

Lovely thoughts...the only snag is I dont want the whole house to hear what Mr Kapoor said...that will really create a different impression in each of their minds..I hope they dont play it like that..

But love the way she goes and sits in the lawn...nature will clear her mind of any bad thoughts and will give her the clarity to understand why such a man whom she loves spoke like that...

mem1

most beautifully written, once again. Loved it. I agree with Neenzoo, in hoping that the whole family does not hear their argument, but other than that it is totally wonderful.

Neenz and Mem,

Thanks for your comments..The thing is Raya were shouting beyond their senses..Its just natural that sound carries far..As it is Niharika and mama are always wondering and poking their noses into Raya's room and affairs, and hence need no excuse to assemble when such a fight was going on..

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Posted: 13 years ago

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Maris👏What a heart wrenching portrayal of Priya's pain...Jeans when ripped can be seen and mended but a heart's wound cannot be seen with the naked eye...It also rips and the raw pain sears till the balm of love is applied...Love is so complicated and when your loved one hurts you the pain is like a cruel stab...Excellent portrayal of Priya's feelings 👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏Maris

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Posted: 13 years ago

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Originally posted by: avivakirk
Maris👏 What a heart wrenching portrayal of Priya's pain...Jeans when ripped can be seen and mended but a heart's wound cannot be seen with the naked eye...It also rips and the raw pain sears till the balm of love is applied...Love is so complicated and when your loved one hurts you the pain is like a cruel stab... Excellent portrayal of Priya's feelings 👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏Maris

Thanks Avi..

How succinctly you have said about Priya's feelings..Thats exactly what I wanted to convey..Priya hurts and the only balm that can soothe and relieve her pain is Ram-His words of contrite and action..Lets see..

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Posted: 13 years ago

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Originally posted by: maris08
It Hurts!!
Your words tonight hurt me so much!! Words can hurt more than anything else can,because sometimes they can last forever.

How can you say those words Ram? Kya main aisi aurat hun,ki meri soch bhi aisi neech hai? Kya hua aap ko? Seeing such jealousy and anger makes me afraid.. Afraid that such a man thinks so much of me.. Does this show another facet of your feelings for me? Is this how your love is getting expressed?

The way you shouted woke everyone and made them scramble here.. Faces reacting diffrently; concerned and questioning by some and knowing and smirking by some.. I wasnt able to face any of them..Just smiled and walked away..

Behind my smile is a hurting heart,walking away while falling apart.And now here Iam sitting on the lawn, mindless of the chill and the nocturnal insects inspecting me..

Words hurled at me lashing like a whip.. Your anger blinding your sense, clouding your sight..Your jealousiness betraying your agony and disbelief..

Cant you see that love permeating my body and lighting up my face..Take a look at me now.. Am just empty, feeling nothing, coz my heart is with you..

A ray of Hope!

I see the faint silhouette of you.. Walking straight and purposefully,towards me..The closer you come,the closer I can make out all those feelings dancing on your face..

Yes!! yess! YES! My heart in you skips a beat. Your remose and silence speaks more than those apologies.. A faint but different heart throbs and pulsates in me..Yours beating in mine..

No words are need.. I know! Your strong arms lead me back into the house. I feel safe and secure..

It hurts!

It does hurt...

This new feeling thats mutual,hurts.. Waiting for the day to say it out,least it eats me alive..

LOVED it. Absolutely correct that niharika and taklu would definitely be listening outside the door.

And I loved the part when Ram comes to the lawn and just holds out his hand and Priya allows him to lead her back to the house.

Very subtle and this is exactly the type of confession I want. I don't want them saying anything to each other.

When they go back to the house, I would like Ram to close the door and engulf Priya in a bear hug. Followed by a soft and long kiss on the forehead. And then he makes her lie down and they sleep, close to each other.

Consummation will happen a few days later or maybe in a week...they'll progress slowly. But I dont think they need to "confess" that they need to love each other.

Later, in fun, ok...when they force the other person to say it. But not required now.

I really liked the update. Serene.

Lalita

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Posted: 13 years ago

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LOVED it. Absolutely correct that niharika and taklu would definitely be listening outside the door.

And I loved the part when Ram comes to the lawn and just holds out his hand and Priya allows him to lead her back to the house.

Very subtle and this is exactly the type of confession I want. I don't want them saying anything to each other.

When they go back to the house, I would like Ram to close the door and engulf Priya in a bear hug. Followed by a soft and long kiss on the forehead. And then he makes her lie down and they sleep, close to each other.

Consummation will happen a few days later or maybe in a week...they'll progress slowly. But I dont think they need to "confess" that they need to love each other.

Later, in fun, ok...when they force the other person to say it. But not required now.

I really liked the update. Serene.

Lalita

Thanks Laitha.. As much as possible I try to feel the emotions like how Priya will feel.. A mix of little bit of realism and liberty of writing always helps in getting across to readers..Priya's anger is momentary as love for Ram will prevail over it and help her in understanding him better..

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Posted: 13 years ago

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Zindhagi ke rang.

Zindhagi roz naye rang mein dhal jaathi hai

Kabhi hasathi; kabhi rulathi

Kabhi cha jaaye, baras jaaye,kabhi ghata 'Mausam ki tharah

To see the rainbow, the rain has to happen; to find true love some pain has to happen.

The past few weeks I had never been able to tell you what all happened, dear diary..

It seems as though my life's best times happened during these weeks..

My confession, where I had literally screamed and vented my frustration at Ram.Oh! What came over me? Then his confession, simply melted my heart. What he said was more than enough, what he didn't say I could implicitly understand..

Then when the two of us became one;Divine.. Iam just quoting John Keats here for that magical night.

"Two souls but with a single thought;two hearts that beat as one"

Life is like a beautiful melody these days, but I do detect one or two sour notes. Sometimes while seeing Sid and Niharika ji I feel my songs lyrics are messed up..

Thats when the fear sets in..

Holi ke din mein kya hua? I feel so embarrassed to even think about it..But whatever happened was all for the good,just as Ram has told. The colors of life painted a wonderful picture for me.

Patha hai Ram? I don't know why, but I fall even more love with you each day..

You are a man of contradictions.

One time you are like a child aching for a mothers love, another minute you are that kind and gentle lover who who gives more and takes less from me.

Another minute you are that concerned father/brother who dosent want his ward to go astray..

Then again you are a totally obedient and dutiful son( though I cant accept this blind acquiescent towards your stepmom).

But what puts me off is your ignorance or knowingly unaware of whats happening in this household.

Aaj jo hua, maantha hun mein ghalat tha. I should have first checked it out with Ayesha before precipitating the matters.Par kya Karen bahut emotional hogayi. Especially when it concerns my little sis..

Am standing by this window looking out at the moonlit garden. Ram you are yet to come to our room. Whats keeping you so late?

Niharika ji's ( am unable to call her maa) warning and the slick way she handled the issue, hurt me. But then it's a lesson for me. Ab mein bina sabooth unhe nahin confront karungi.. Sid evokes a feeling of repugnance in me. Use saavadhan rahna chanhiye.

Hmmm! These weeks I feel I have lived a lifetime..

You learn to like someone when you find out what makes them laugh, but you can never truly love someone until you find out what makes them cry.This I have learnt...The day you confessed to me I have truly understood what love is. Love dosent have any expectations; Its implicit in every connection and nondemanding..

Life has taught us that love does not consist of gazing at each other, but in looking together in the same direction..

The day you opened your heart across the closed washroom door; I felt a connection happening. Two lost souls yearning for their own love.. Shayad, Bhagwan ne banaya hamare ye Jodi. Varna Zindhagi mein, main ithna kush naseeb kab thi..

What I need to live has been already been given; Why I need to live has been given to me by you..

Zindhagi ke har ek rang khubsoorat hai.Ram, jab aap mere saath hai toh, har ek pal kushiyan hi kushiyan hai..

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Posted: 13 years ago

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Another feather in the cap Maris👏👏👏👏👏👏This page too takes the cake describing Priya's feelings...The myriad of emotions painted in the canvass were so vibrant piercing the soul...Just like the leaves turn colour for every season u very aptly described the changing seasons of Priya's life...tender shoots of love springing up during spring season, the profusion of colours during summmer (blooming love)..falling of leaves during the fall and the bleakness of winter(sad emotions)...Loved your quote of Keats! Good job Maris👏

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