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EshaalYousufzai

@EshaalYousufzai

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Posted: 11 years ago

#11

Originally posted by: Sakshithegreat
Next time I will make it long. I actually wrote it in a rush so anyway why do u call me jaana

She was actually calling u jaan...🤣

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EshaalYousufzai

@EshaalYousufzai

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Posted: 11 years ago

#12

The concept is good.

I am loving it.

Your dress choice is good..

But you put a lot of dialogues but no description..

So, next time when I write ur update try to describe their emotions, partial views etc etc.

And try to make it little big..😛

Anothor this if you want to use color use the soft shade.

Otherwise it hurts the eye of the chashmishs' like me..😆

Anyways u r going good..

Keep it up..

Edited by EashaYousufzai - 11 years ago

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IArmageddonI

@IArmageddonI

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Posted: 11 years ago

#13

I really liked the concept and I think this story has potential 😃

Bas ek tip... kabhi rush main mat likhna... readers hippo ki tarha hote hai... slow slow 😆... toh agar 15 minute bhi hai na... toh uss 15 minute main ek chutku sa paragraph hi likho... par dil se... fill it with your description and words...

It's fine if you don't update every few days... it doesn't make a difference... par jab likhna ho na... araam se likho 😊

And I am sure you have the capability to write emotions... capitalize on that dear... especially now that she's saved from fire by a particular Mr. Rawte... 👍🏼

LOL... Mr. Rawte catching Shree and Sameer open mouthed! Loved this humor element...

ALl the best for your story...

~ Armagadon

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IArmageddonI

@IArmageddonI

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Posted: 11 years ago

#14

And yeah...

For links...

Copy the link on top : (eg : http://www.india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=4156901 )

Then in your PM Message write anything (eg : Arakshi FF : Majboori)

Then select these words with your cursor (eg : Arakshi FF : Majboori)

After that click this button

Then on address (Arakshi FF : Majboori) would be written

Delete that and over there paste the link (eg: http://www.india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=4156901)

Make sure to delete http:// from the link.

After that click ok.

There you just learnt how to send the link :)

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@Arakshiya_58

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Posted: 11 years ago

#15

Originally posted by: Sakshithegreat
Next time I will make it long. I actually wrote it in a rush so anyway why do u call me jaana

just aise hi...sorry if u dont like it...😊😊
@eashu::: angle jaan aapko bohot hasi aa rahi hai...why so???😉

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EshaalYousufzai

@EshaalYousufzai

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Posted: 11 years ago

#16

Originally posted by: Arakshiya_58

just aise hi...sorry if u dont like it...😊😊
@eashu::: angle jaan aapko bohot hasi aa rahi hai...why so???😉

😆😆

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IArmageddonI

@IArmageddonI

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Posted: 11 years ago

#17

Originally posted by: EashaYousufzai

😆😆

@ Princy : Arrey tujhe kya bataun? Eeshu ko hasi isliye aa rahi hai kyunki *ahem* kehte hai ki jab ladkiyan aise hi haste hai without any reason na... tab... ek signal hota hai ki woh.. *ahem* pyaar main pad gayi hai! *Mubaaraka*

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Sakshithegreat

@Sakshithegreat

Beginner

Posted: 11 years ago

#18

Thanks guys I will be more descriptive next time and thanks for your comments
And arakshiya58 you can call me jaan I don't mind will update hopefully today

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sisodia_shefali

@sisodia_shefali

Voyager

Posted: 11 years ago

#19

was nice but short and usmain bhi u filled most of it with the whole song
nice dresses 😊
thanks for pm

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@Arakshiya_58

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Posted: 11 years ago

#20

Originally posted by: Armagadon

@ Princy : Arrey tujhe kya bataun? Eeshu ko hasi isliye aa rahi hai kyunki *ahem* kehte hai ki jab ladkiyan aise hi haste hai without any reason na... tab... ek signal hota hai ki woh.. *ahem* pyaar main pad gayi hai! *Mubaaraka*

OMG!!!!!congratulations...angle jaan... 😉 😉 🥳