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GOLDIEE ABROL

@Gold.Abrol

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Posted: 11 years ago

#421

PART 16 A

She calmed a bit & made a call to Sameer & said, "ACP Rathod, Arshad bhai tumhari custody main hai, unhe leke aadhe ghante main jo pata main tumhe de rahi hoon uss pate pe pauncho aur koi hoshiyaari nahi warna anjaam tum jaante hoo" & line went dead after that.

Man said, "bi par Pratap?"

Shehnaaz said, "Pratap abhi kuch deer pehle hi bhaaga hai, itni jaldi waapis nahi pauch paayega or uska phone to hamne pehle hi tod diya tha wo kisi ko inform bhi nahi kar sakta hai aur jab tak wo waapis paunchega tab tak Arshad bhai aazaad ho chuke honge"

She looks at them with anger & said, "aur yadi koi gadbad hui to inn sab ke zimmedaar tum sab hoge, naakara ho chuke ho sab ke sab"

All leave & started to prepare for final attack.

Here Defense secratery, Amar & Aisha were keeping an constant watch, old codes were already changed for the protection so that no one can intrude.

Shehnaaz along with few men marched towards the address & here according to plan SamJun took Arshad along to meet Shehnaaz AKA Simran.

Few minutes back Pratap safely came to academy & all started to discuss the plan & also SamJun made him aware of the plan Pratap, Amar, Abhi & Aisha along with all the backup force started to march to the planned destination at the out skirts of Mahabalesher from where they will marched to attack the nuclear plant which was about 100 KMS away.

Shehnaaz reached the spot & located Sameer & Arjun & also Arshad but there were no traces of them till now.

After a while Sameer & Arjun arrived along with Arshad Khan to the place & Sameer said, "Lo le aaya main Arshad ko ab baba ko chod do"

Shehnaaz said, "wo hum chood chuke hai tumhe agle 1 ghante main tumhare baba ghar pe milenge"

Sameer said, "mujhe bharosa nahi hai pehle baba ko dikhao tabhi main Arshad Khan ko chodunga"

Shehnaaz said, "behas mat karo ACP waqt nahi hai mere paas, tumhare baba ko choda jaa chukka hai aur hum unhe nahi dikha sakte tumhe bharosa karna padega, tumhare paas koi chara nahi hai"

Sameer said, "hai kyu nahi"

He grabbed Arshad's collar & punched him hard across his face Shehnaaz said, "ye galti tumhe bahut byhari padegi ACP"

Arshad said holding his jaw "ye kya kar rahe hoo ACP"

Sameer smirked & said, "tune kaha tha na na ki tere ilaaque main jaanwaro ko maarne ki permission hai wahi kar raha haoon" & then turning to Shehnaaz said "galti kise mehengi padegi ye abhi samajh me aa jaayega" with that heavy firing started & soon Sameer & Arjun over powered them & soon Arshad Khan & Shehnaaz were under their arrest & Arjun said "Sam inka kya kare chod de ya khatam kar de"

Sameer said, "chod diya to fir inme se kissi ko chudane inki geedadoo ki fauj khadi ho jaayegi, academy pe fir se hamla hoga waise bhi to inhe bada shauk hai marne ka to inhe maar hi dete hai " with that Arjun fired at them & Shehnaaz & Arshad Khan went dead there.

Arjun & Sameer were already informed about people marching towards the nuclear plant so they zoomed to the place & joined ETF & all their friends to stop them at the right time with all their might as no damage can be done by them.

Amar kapoor had already informed the plant & soon along with back up forces all attacked at the group.

Sudden attack gave them no chance to stand & soon heavy firing started from both the ends & most of the gang members were either dead or arrested by the backup forces.

There was still firing going on to nab the rest few when suddenly a gang man tried to fire on Sameer but before he could do that Aisha had already fired & he was dead .

Sameer acknowledged it with a nod & smile & bit later when Aisha was approaching towards the hidden gang members a gang member tried to shoot Aisha but Sameer grabbed him from behind & broke his arm & arrested him, Aisha too smiled at him with a nod.

Finally after while when every thing settled down & rest of the gang members were arrested all took sigh of relief that finally its all over & every thing is safe.

Pratap & Amar took the charge & finally all closed the case by submitting the reports to higher officials.

After all the formalities were done higher officials apologized for doubting him & Pratap too understood & said that he understands that it was all circumstantial & there was no way out as only he had access.

After that all retuned to academy Sameer went to Aisha & said, "Miss kapoor aapse kuch baat karni thi"

Aisha said, "Ji Kahiye"

Sameer said, "aapse kuch confess karna tha, main jab aapse mila tha to mujhe laga tha aap ek egoistic aur self centered person hai, par aapne jis tarha se maa aur baba ka saath diya bina kissi shart ke bahut kam loog dete hai, aapko nahi lagta hame puraani galat fehmi bhula kar acchi dosti se shuruaat karni chahiye"

Aisha said with a smile, "waise dosto ko naam se aur tum kehke bulate hai aap nahi"

Sameer said, "right to fir aaj se deal lets start with a new friendship" both shake hands start off with a new friendship.

SCROLL DOWN FOR PART 16 B 😊

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GOLDIEE ABROL

@Gold.Abrol

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Posted: 11 years ago

#422

PART 16 B

Few months rolled by Sameer & Aisha became good friends there was a sort of special understanding between them which could be seen by every one.

Intially they had hitches in calling each other by name but soon their hitches vanshed as their friendship grew stronger.

Even Pratap & Amar shared a good friendship but Dhara had something different thing in her mind.

She liked Aisha a lot as a person & she wished to have a daughter just like her, her attitude, her strength, her values & her upbringing suited her family really well & to be honest she wanted a girl like Aisha to be a part of her family precisely to be her Daughter in law.

She knew that she understands Sameer & his job & moreover she is in the same field & so she found her a perfect match for her son but she wanted to ask this before as well but formal behavior between the two stopped her from all this, she knew how Sameer would react to all this so she let it go that time but now when Sameer & Aisha were close, she thought of asking this to Pratap.

That night she stepped into the room & said to Pratap, "aapne Sameer ke baare main kya soocha hai?"

Pratap sai,d "kya sochna hai acchi naukri hai ladka kabil hai aur kya chahiye?"

Dhara said with a smile, "Bahu"

Pratap said, "acha to ghar main bahu lane ka irada hai, waise koi dekh rakhi hai ya Sameer ki pasand ki sifarish karne aayi hoo"

Dhara said, "dekhi to hai, par Sameer usse aap jaante hai na "

Pratap laughed at her & said, "Kiski baat kar rahi hoo?"

Dhara said, "Aisha ki"

Pratap with a smile, "Idea bura nahi hai waise main khud Amar se baat karronga, kal uska birthday hai hum sab chaleenge"

Dhara smiled & nodded.

Next day Pratap & Dhara come to Amar to wish him Happy birthday

Pratap in teasing tone said, "Kyu brigadier kitne patjhad dekh chuke?"

Amar said, "jitney tune dekhe usse 2 kam" & both started lauging

Dhara said to Amar, "Bhai saab aap bura na mane to ek baat kahu, hum Sameer ki shaadi ke baare main sooch rahe hai aur agar aapko baat pasand ho to main Aisha ka haath maangna chahti hoon Sameer ke liye"

Amar smiled & said, "yadi Aisha ko koi problem nahi hai to mujhe bhi nahi hai aur main kush hoon ki Aisha ko aisa pariwaar milega jo usse samajh sake"

Soon Aisha, Sameer along with Abhi, Sakshi, Arjun, Riya & entire etf entered to wish Amar a very happy birthday.

After the celebrations were over Pratap & Amar told Sameer & Aisha about their decision to get them married first both were bit surprised at all this but after being friends both knew each other aspirations , likes, dislikes & most important that they understood each other well & after giving good thought on it & also after parents convincing they agreed for the marriage.

Paratap, Amar & Dhara were really happy after hearing this they soon announced their engagement & intend to get married soon.

After few weeks date was fixed for the marriage of Sameer & Aisha & preprations started in full swing.

All the rituals were performed accordingly haldi, mehndi, sangeet & all enjoyed it too the core.

Marriage was done with both the traditions Punjabi & Rajasthani.

It was simple & elegant function & all arrangements were done accordingly.

Sameer came to the mandap in brown color Jodhpuri & looked really handsome & Aisha looked beautiful in bridal mehroon lehenga & matching jewelery with light make up, just as angel from heaven .

Pandit ji enchanted the mantras & Sakshi tied a knot of gatbandhan & Sameer & Aisha started the taking pheras (circles) around holy fire promising to love & respect each other their entire life.

Amar was happy to see her daughter going to another home which will give her same love & affection as he did.

Pratap & Dhara were happy to have such a daughter in law who will support their son in all ways through out their life.

After rituals were done Sameer & Aisha took blessings from all their elders to start their new life in a new way altogether.

All elders blessed them & Dhara welcomed Aisha with all rituals in her house & she was always a mother figure for Aisha indeed, she felt at times that she was like her own mother whom she lost long time back.

Dhara gave her all the support love & care like mother & never made her feel that her mother was dead.

Finally Sameer & Aisha started their new life with love & hope.

SCROLL DOWN FOR EPILOGUE 😊

Edited by GOLD.A - 11 years ago

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GOLDIEE ABROL

@Gold.Abrol

Stunner

+ 12

Posted: 11 years ago

#423

EPILOGUE

After 4 years it was 3rd birthday of Sameer & Aisha's son Aayush all were enjoying Abhi & Sakshi had a cute daughter Avika & Ariya too had a cute & naughty son Aarav .

Aisha has taken a break because of Aayush & was suppose to join her duty back in next few weeks but was bit tensed as Aayush was small but Dhara supported her well as she was a full home maker infact she used to took care of all the three kids lovingly so that they could continue doing their duty towards their Nation & their kids too can learn from them.

THE END - THERE IS NO END TO LOVE & YOUR DUTY TOO

THANK YOU NOTE : Dear readers I want to thank you all for your love & support & your this love really craves me to write more with bottom of my heart a big thanks to all of you

@ Dear RIMI & SNEHA : you 2 have supported me a lot in my most of the stores thank you for you would be very small 😊 without you this was not possible love u lots

Regards Goldie 😊 ❤️

Edited by GOLD.A - 11 years ago

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Bhavna Antriwale-Gargate

@bgargate

Voyager

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Posted: 11 years ago

#424

Unres 😊

OK... so I m commenting on the story as a whole 😊.

Overall the story was interesting with its specific high and low points 😊.

Concept was interesting, but at some points story became a little predictable but you managed the story well 👍🏼

The Best points

1. The interpersonal relationships were perfectly balanced and no forced romantic scenes. Everybody's attitude towards each other was perfectly natural. 😊

2. The main storyline of Terrorist plan was written well. The moves by Simran were portrayed well. Right from stealing Pratap's locket to killing guards, using that cadet's tablet and later kidnapping Pratap. 👏👏

3. The minute details of how Shehnaz became Simran, her fighting abilities, and all were taken care of brilliantly and was perfect. No bloopers in it. 👍🏼👍🏼

4. How Shehnaz was exposed was written interestingly. 😊

5. Pratap's torture and later escape part was perfect

6. Climax was easy and perfect. Nothing over the top. 👍🏼👍🏼

For me, the main two low points of the story were -

1. Story looked a bit dragged when the culprit was not revealed and many initial chapters ended with the same old point. The story didn't seem to move at all.

(One tip about such stories that I have been reading so far - in such suspense stories, it looks dragged if you keep on leaving the story at same point in every chapter. The fun and thrill element is added if you open the suspense from last part in the new part and create a new suspense in this new part and keep the readers hooked to the story. This keeps the story moving and adds to this cliffhanger effect 😊. And I trust you, you can write such stories 👍🏼 )

2. That last part which was "Inspired" by the movie Zameen (Mazaa nahi aaya )

Looking at your past work, you write very well but this was not your best 😳.

Your best is may be yet to come and I will be waiting 😊

All the best 👏👏👏👏

Edited by bgargate - 11 years ago