Dear sbp1971,
No, I am not at all offended, and in fact I liked you response, for I always like people who fight for what they believe in.
No again, I have not been in the IF for very long, in fact only since April this year, though I did join formally in January. The only other forum I was active in was that for Pavitra Rishta, which is huge by comparison with this one, and focusses very largely on the actual serial. There, I never read any of the FF. In fact, on coming to this forum, I was quite taken aback by the volume of the FF and started reading 4-5 of them, including yours, which, as I said, I quite liked. So I am completely new to the genre.
As for your point of view, I can only quote Voltaire, who once said to someone about whose writings he had reservations, "I disagree with you to the death, but I would fight to the death to defend your right to say it". Of course all the 'to the death' part is wildly exaggerated, but you would get my drift!
This said, while you have
not taken that stand and so this is
not for you, I do not see why I cannot say what I did not like in this or any other piece and also what I would like you to do in your future efforts. That is the right of any critic, and you are, after all, under no obligation to follow my advice. It is a free forum, and so long as I do not cross the IF rules, I do not see any reason for anyone to accuse me of moral policing, for that implies compulsion, which is a non-starter here. And I am surely not obliged to limit my comments to unqualified praise. Though I must say that this seems to be the norm in this forum; in my limited FF readings, I am yet to come across even the mildest critique.
As for the effort put into FF, that is naturally to be deeply appreciated, but the writers do it because they enjoy it, and once they put something out in a public forum, they have to learn to take the brickbats (not that mine was intended as such!) with the bouquets. Which, in this instance, you have done, and admirably at that.
So I do not accept the kind of restrictions that jake and others would like to impose on me in terms of my responses to your FF, or indeed any other. It is in fact curious that while they insist that
I should not tell you what to write and not to write, they have no such hesitation in telling
me what I should not write!!
Where I agree completely with you is when you say that I am taking this too seriously. Point noted; it is probably the generation gap! However, I must tell you that Indian TV is far more old fashioned in what one can show on it, and I for one am glad of that.
Lastly, most offices, and definitely Govt. offices in India, would not permit one spouse to work under another. It would inevitably lead to accusations of favouritism, including in terms of the performance reports that the senior spouse would be writing for the other. Not that this should stop you from incorporating this in your FF; there is such a thing as creative licence, after all!
In conclusion, I would like to wish you all the very best for your future literary efforts, of whatever genre.
Shyamala B.Cowsik
Originally posted by: sbp1971
Dear Shyamala
First of all thank you for reading and taking the time to comment on my OS. I run the risk of offending you by clearing your misconception and I am sure you are not going to like it, but like you I mean no offense to you or your point of view. I am not defending myself either; I am simply stating some facts below to your comments.
I also do not take offense at your comments because I disagree with all your points. Matter of fact I find your criticism surprising because you sound like a person who has been around IF for a while so I am sure you have read things that are far more sensual than what I wrote.
I do not find anything wrong with taking only the romantic part of this story and writing a fictional scenario that people who enjoy this part of the story would like to read. This does not mean all my Ariya fiction will be filled with romance only and not focus on other aspects of the show. Romance is not the focus of the show as of now but the show will eventually focus on this part also. Also this was supposed to be a one shot, and if I tried to focus on solving a crime and tension between Arjun and Riya then I would have to make this a FF, which was not what I intended at all.
I believe what I wrote is less than what is shown on television everyday no matter what part of the world you live in. I stand by my work, and I am sorry you feel differently, the world has moved forward, we should learn to move forward with it.
As for Arjun kissing her in the open and Riya working under him, you missed the part about his regret. He acted in the heat of the moment and also regretted his action. And when let's say that eventually Arjun and Riya are together, who says that Riya has to leave the job? It is not written in stone, after all this is fiction and any kind of liberty can be taken with fictional shows or stories.
If Riya has guts to be ETF officer then she also has the courage to stand up for herself if she believes that Arjun is taking advantage of her. We all do things in the heat of the moment because we can not control ourselves, but that one moment of losing your senses does not make us indecent, so in this case it does not make Arjun a man who was trying to take advantage of a young, vulnerable girl. They are both adults and know the right from the wrong.
Anyway, you are taking this far too seriously than it is meant to be. It is supposed to be a different scenario away from the show, this is something that will never happen on the show I am sure and so are all the members who read the OS.
I am sorry if my OS offended you, but this was strictly for entertainment purposes, mainly mine, and I am sure my imagination will come up with many more fictional scenarios, romantic, non-romantic, it could be anything.
P.S. I did not attempt to fix things in part 2, as a matter of fact I had not planned to write part 2, but went with the flow and wrote what came to me. I have done nothing wrong, so why try to fix it?
Again, thanks for the criticism, but I just don't agree with it.
Edited by sashashyam - 12 years ago
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