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rev4eva

@rev4eva

Dazzler

+ 4

Posted: 10 years ago

#11

Mind blowing OS...

The little excitement brewing in Ananya, her being concern about her looks were really beautifully written. I'm not sure whether we will ever get to know Ananya's fear over darkness in the show but thanks for giving it a proper closure in your OS.

I could literally imagine the whole scene in my eyes as I read the OS. Hats off to you for such a wonderful piece. Looking forward to reading more of your stories in future.

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sashashyam

@sashashyam

Sparkler

+ 3

Posted: 10 years ago

#12

My dear Ishqshava ( what is your name, which I am sure is as pretty as that of your sister Shivani?),

First things first. You write extremely well - the grammar, syntax, punctuation etc are all impeccable. That is important for a purist like me; chaotic spelling and incoherent sentence formulation put me off. Such an excellent presentation adds to the charm of the subject matter.

Next, I can see that you would be a surefire hit with young, romantic readers ready to go into ecstasies over this latest couple. I am not a romantic, and never was one even 40 years ago, but I must say that you have handled your powder puff passages to perfection: there is no OTT drooling over the male lead, no coquetry, just a fluent description of the unfamiliar feelings of a young woman being attracted to a man for the first time.

I was interested to see that though your heroine is supposed to be a strong, independent and capable young woman professional in a technically demanding line of work, you have given her a dark place in her mind that terrifies her inordinately, and out of which only Akash can extricate her with his rock solid presence and his strong arms to cradle her and wipe away her nightmare.. It only goes to show that for young women even today, the man of their dreams has to be stronger than they are, even if they no longer demand the knight on a white horse!😉

Not that I have anything against this time-honoured formula, but I would like it better if Akash had the nightmare, maybe of crashing in the desert during his Air Force days, and it was Ananya who pulled him out of it!

I do not normally read FFs for I do not like the sentimentality in which they abound as a rule, but this one is an exception that I am glad I made.

Shyamala Aunty

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TR19

@TR_19

Stunner

+ 3

Posted: 10 years ago

#13

lovely akya os 👍🏼 so well written i enjoyed it a lot.

@ Asmimelody thanks for the PM 😃

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zainabawoon

@zainabawoon

Dazzler

Posted: 10 years ago

#14

Aww it was a really cute os ❤️ 😃 Great yaar 👍🏼

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Dark Princess

@DaRkPrInCeSs

Voyager

Posted: 10 years ago

#15

👍🏼 Soo nice dear! Loved every bit!
Do continue with your awesome pieces of writings!😛

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-silentbang-

@-silentbang-

Rocker

+ 2

Posted: 10 years ago

#16

NICE OS...loved akya
plz pm me if u write anything on akya😊

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Vibha Bangalore

@..IshqShava..

Sparkler

+ 2

Posted: 10 years ago

#17

Originally posted by: GORIJOSHI
Wow! awesome update
so sweet

Thank u so much!😃

Originally posted by: ...anika...
Very beautiful and lovely...
AkYa moments were truly amazing and beautiful.
The way Akash comforted Ananya was the best part.
Do continue if possible...
Do write more.

Thank u Anika😃 yeah i'd write more😳

Originally posted by: KHUSHI-99
Ishqshava.. this was very nicely written...Well a bit different from the episode but you can still connect..who knows maybe Akash will come back😊..Very nice..btw did you add music to this post??if yes then how?

Hey Khushi😃 Thanks for the comment..
Yeah, i added that song..we need to use the embed code of the mp3 file and post it on forum's reply box with the update, using forum codes😳 btw u can call me Vibha😳

Originally posted by: daisydee425
Lovely

Thank u😃

Originally posted by: rituka7
Grt

Thanks😊

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Vibha Bangalore

@..IshqShava..

Sparkler

+ 2

Posted: 10 years ago

#18

Originally posted by: rev4eva
Mind blowing OS...
The little excitement brewing in Ananya, her being concern about her looks were really beautifully written. I'm not sure whether we will ever get to know Ananya's fear over darkness in the show but thanks for giving it a proper closure in your OS.

I could literally imagine the whole scene in my eyes as I read the OS. Hats off to you for such a wonderful piece. Looking forward to reading more of your stories in future.

Thank u so much dear😃 Akya's scenes were spoiled by showing Natasha after every two minutes🥱 so i thought of this scenario where Akya get the night all to themselves...

Originally posted by: sashashyam
My dear Ishqshava ( what is your name, which I am sure is as pretty as that of your sister Shivani?),My name is Vibha😳

First things first. You write extremely well - the grammar, syntax, punctuation etc are all impeccable. That is important for a purist like me; chaotic spelling and incoherent sentence formulation put me off. Such an excellent presentation adds to the charm of the subject matter.Oh thank you so much!! perhaps, this is the best complement I've received on this site, in two years..😛

Next, I can see that you would be a surefire hit with young, romantic readers ready to go into ecstasies over this latest couple. I am not a romantic, and never was one even 40 years ago, but I must say that you have handled your powder puff passages to perfection: there is no OTT drooling over the male lead, no coquetry, just a fluent description of the unfamiliar feelings of a young woman being attracted to a man for the first time. I'm not too fond of cliched, soppy stories either, so i kept it short and simple😳

I was interested to see that though your heroine is supposed to be a strong, independent and capable young woman professional in a technically demanding line of work, you have given her a dark place in her mind that terrifies her inordinately, and out of which only Akash can extricate her with his rock solid presence and his strong arms to cradle her and wipe away her nightmare.. It only goes to show that for young women even today, the man of their dreams has to be stronger than they are, even if they no longer demand the knight on a white horse!😉Well, i believe that no matter how strong a woman is, or how old or young she is, there will always be a part of her which would cherish a man's attention and his care..😳

Not that I have anything against this time-honoured formula, but I would like it better if Akash had the nightmare, maybe of crashing in the desert during his Air Force days, and it was Ananya who pulled him out of it! Great idea! I'd write something on the lines of it, if i can..

I do not normally read FFs for I do not like the sentimentality in which they abound as a rule, but this one is an exception that I am glad I made. I'm honored in the true sense, that you have read my OS😳😳 Thank you Aunty😃

Shyamala Aunty