Mishbir SS// Ghar kaha hai?// Pt 3 pdated pg4 (20/6) - Page 2

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Posted: 5 years ago
#11

wow Nandu seriously first a big jhappi to you dear 🤗🤗🤗🤗 take a bow yaar this is simply superb, 👏👏👏🥳❤️❤️ and thank you thank you so much for dedicating this to me this means a lot yaara 🤗🤗🤗❤️❤️

you have given an improved and the most beautiful version of the most important scene of baba track.... the way kept the original scene intact and added the most needed and bang on dialogues, especially monologues, actions of meenu noticed the tears n all the small nuances... Nandu you nailed it... you just nailed it 👏👏👏👏🥳🥳❤️❤️

the meenu monologue was so good yaar the way she thinks on mehul n also this provides a perfect insight of her hatred towards mish n reason on why she wanted mish out of abir life.. this is more logical and so so good dear.... 👏👏👏

and mishti's monologue cleared on why she never tried to say truth to abir and also this has already given idea to him about mish involvement.. superb.. 👍🏼👏

and the most important part abir questioning meenu on why she hid it all these years just take a bow this is something we all wished the most needed part 🤗👏👏 and the final scene abir's ghar you made me emotional yaar already i'm a bit in abir phobia now feeling for him and this made a little emotional... his original ghar he went in search of her... wow 👏👏🤗🤗

ok again from captain 😆😳 when are you updating next part mostly its gonna be mishbir convo much needed n what we all wanted ohhooo looking forward darling so so excited to read your story than watching the show seriously will get some peace 🤗🥳

there is only like button if there is other options too like heart, star and all i would give you infinity hearts n love n kisses ❤️🤗🤗

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Posted: 5 years ago
#12

Originally posted by: LetThereBeLight

wow Nandu seriously first a big jhappi to you dear 🤗🤗🤗🤗 take a bow yaar this is simply superb, 👏👏👏🥳❤️❤️ and thank you thank you so much for dedicating this to me this means a lot yaara 🤗🤗🤗❤️❤️

you have given an improved and the most beautiful version of the most important scene of baba track.... the way kept the original scene intact and added the most needed and bang on dialogues, especially monologues, actions of meenu noticed the tears n all the small nuances... Nandu you nailed it... you just nailed it 👏👏👏👏🥳🥳❤️❤️

the meenu monologue was so good yaar the way she thinks on mehul n also this provides a perfect insight of her hatred towards mish n reason on why she wanted mish out of abir life.. this is more logical and so so good dear.... 👏👏👏

and mishti's monologue cleared on why she never tried to say truth to abir and also this has already given idea to him about mish involvement.. superb.. 👍🏼👏

and the most important part abir questioning meenu on why she hid it all these years just take a bow this is something we all wished the most needed part 🤗👏👏 and the final scene abir's ghar you made me emotional yaar already i'm a bit in abir phobia now feeling for him and this made a little emotional... his original ghar he went in search of her... wow 👏👏🤗🤗

ok again from captain 😆😳 when are you updating next part mostly its gonna be mishbir convo much needed n what we all wanted ohhooo looking forward darling so so excited to read your story than watching the show seriously will get some peace 🤗🥳

there is only like button if there is other options too like heart, star and all i would give you infinity hearts n love n kisses ❤️🤗🤗

Aww you're welcome yaar🤗 Your encouraged me to write, so it was an honour to dedicate my first ever fan fic to you 👏

Yea many scenes throughout the show so far, have been done really well, but there were important sections that could have been done better - so that's what I'm aiming to achieve here. Glad you really liked my touch and flavour to this seq👍🏼😃

Haan writing these ff stories help me gets some peace with the shows' wacky track nowadays😆


Hopefully should get to the next part very soon; maybe Friday?; the mishbir convo has to happen on mishbir day right?😆

P.S haha see Uru's comment, she actually liked the story 3 times!😲 I had no idea you could do that🤣

Jokes apart, thankyou thankyou so much, for all your kind words. Hope I live up to everyone's expectations for all the upcoming writings

xx

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Posted: 5 years ago
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Originally posted by: yrhpk_aus

GURUJI! I am speechless😲 You have no idea how much this comment means to me All your kind words give me so much encouragement🤗, I was really anxious since it was my first piece of writing ever!😵

@bold: Aww thanks yaar❤️! It honestly took waay more time than I expected (multiple trial and errors) Hats off to those who write FF/OS so regularly👏👏 The last para with the ghar reference suddenly hit me like an epiphany, glad it worked😃😆


Glad you enjoyed it so much ❤️ Will try to make you proud with the next part too


hahaha if only dkp took lessons from all of our analyses and theories in the forum🤣😆

xx Stay tuned, will update soon🤗


P.S OMG I had no idea that you could like a post multiple times😲😆 You're awesome (real wala) Thankyou soo much ❤️


You deserve all the appreciation guruji 2.0 ...you surely know how to use the words 🤗🤗🤗....also I read your post on kuhu in the AT ...would request you to post it separately.. I have been trying to write something on kuhu since long but was unable to put it in words ...you have described her so beautifully bang on !! 🥳


Haha I know...🤣🤣 Dkp actually needs lessons lol 🤣🤣


Waiting waiting


Ps: it's a technical glitch ..happens sometimes 😛

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Posted: 5 years ago
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Originally posted by: yrhpk_aus

Aww you're welcome yaar🤗 Your encouraged me to write, so it was an honour to dedicate my first ever fan fic to you 👏

Yea many scenes throughout the show so far, have been done really well, but there were important sections that could have been done better - so that's what I'm aiming to achieve here. Glad you really liked my touch and flavour to this seq👍🏼😃

Haan writing these ff stories help me gets some peace with the shows' wacky track nowadays😆


Hopefully should get to the next part very soon; maybe Friday?; the mishbir convo has to happen on mishbir day right?😆

P.S haha see Uru's comment, she actually liked the story 3 times!😲 I had no idea you could do that🤣

Jokes apart, thankyou thankyou so much, for all your kind words. Hope I live up to everyone's expectations for all the upcoming writings

xx

thank you so much dear ... 🤗🤗

true and your are doing proper justice to all the loop holes and perfectly putting together the left over pieces... hats off to you dear keep going 🤗❤️

wow so today nandu is the update ready yaar it will be a double treat 🥳

haha even i didnt have idea we can like multiple times if it was surely we all would give infinity likes 😆🤗

we are always there to support dear keep going.. 🤗

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Posted: 5 years ago
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HAPPY MISHBIR FRIDAY everyone! 🥳 After such a blockbuster few episodes and a memorable friday episode, today I decided to share a small sneak peak to the next part of the story

Sorry I was planning to finish the entire part by today, but I got busy. 🤔 Nevertheless I hope you enjoy this insight. I will update the complete 2nd part very shortly.

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Part 2 TEASER

As Abir made a quick turn around the corner, he instantly stopped and silently took his first proper deep breath since the godhana. He could finally feel his racing heart slowly calm down. He had found his home. Mishti was sitting curled up like a ball with her head buried in ghagra and her hands hugging her knees together. The sudden rustling sounds of Abir’s feet with the ground, had snapped Mishti from her trance. Turning around from the steps she met eyes with the man she had promised to protect him from any hurt and pain. Yet those were the exact emotions she could see in those pure, innocent brown eyes, standing a few meters away. Mishti’s eyes began to well up with tears, as she helplessly watched a shattered Abir. Abir who had beamed a small smile of relief, quickly formed wrinkles on his forehead, at the sight of Mishti’s red puffy eyes.

“Mishti…

“Abir….

They aspirated.


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Part 2 completed will be updated soon. Stay tuned xx

Thankyou for your patience and support❤️

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Posted: 5 years ago
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Originally posted by: LetThereBeLight

thank you so much dear ... 🤗🤗

true and your are doing proper justice to all the loop holes and perfectly putting together the left over pieces... hats off to you dear keep going 🤗❤️

wow so today nandu is the update ready yaar it will be a double treat 🥳

haha even i didnt have idea we can like multiple times if it was surely we all would give infinity likes 😆🤗

we are always there to support dear keep going.. 🤗

That's so kind and sweet of you🤗🤗

I'll definitely try my best👍🏼


haha A sneak peak is ready for you Diya. Not quite a double threat today, sorry, the writing is taking much longer than expected. Want to make sure mishbir is given justice😃😊

Full part will be updated soon.

xx

thankyou!❤️

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Posted: 5 years ago
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Originally posted by: yrhpk_aus

That's so kind and sweet of you🤗🤗

I'll definitely try my best👍🏼


haha A sneak peak is ready for you Diya. Not quite a double threat today, sorry, the writing is taking much longer than expected. Want to make sure mishbir is given justice😃😊

Full part will be updated soon.

xx

thankyou!❤️

nandu 🤗

teaser is so intriguing yaar looking forward for the update... its so so good i so wished we got mishbir heart to heart after baba truth thankfully you are doing it nandu... 🤗🤗❤️ take your time and give your best will be waiting 😃👍🏼🤗

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Posted: 5 years ago
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Here we go! Part 2 is finally here everyone🤗 Hope you enjoy it😃

PART2

Kaha ho Mishti!? Abir had been frantically searching for Mishti for the last 20 mins. Driving in each and every nook and corner, trying to find the solace to his distressed heart. You know how I feel when you’re not with me…main lost feel karta hu. Like an empty house with no residents. As the sun began to set, Abir tried his last chance at the market. He parked the jeep on the side of the road and began rushing towards the shops when he heard a crack under his foot. Looking down below, he picked up the familiar piece of jewellery. Abir realised “Yeh to Mishti ke earrings hai, she was wearing them today,” this means she has to be here somewhere he thought. Grabbing the crushed earrings in his hands, he continued running in to the market. “Mishti!!” Mishti!!” howled Abir. He waited to hear any familiar sound in reply. Nothing. Unconvinced, Abir continued to search around the stalls. “Okay calm down Abir. Calm down!”Abir reassured himself. “Think calmly, where could Mishti be in the market?” Abir stopped and peered towards the end of the road. “That’s it! I know exactly where she would be.” Rushing towards their regular tea stall, Abir held on tight to Mishti’s earrings. As Abir made a quick turn around the corner, he instantly stopped and silently gulped his first proper breath since the godhana. He could finally feel his racing heart slowly calm down. He had found his home. Mishti was sitting curled up like a ball with her head buried in ghagra and her hands hugging her knees together. The sudden rustling sounds of Abir’s feet with the ground, had snapped Mishti from her trance. Turning around from the steps she met eyes with the man she had promised to protect from any pain and sorrow. Yet those were the exact emotions she saw in those pure, innocent brown eyes, standing a few meters away. Her eyes began to well up with tears, as she helplessly watched a shattered Abir. Abir who had beamed a small smile of relief, quickly frowned with creases forming on his forehead, at the sight of Mishti’s red puffy eyes.

“Mishti…

“Abir….

They aspirated.

Within seconds, before Mishti could even process the situation, she found herself engulfed in Abir’s warm embrace. She could hear and feel his heart pounding against his chest. Mishti began gently patting and rubbing Abir's back to comfort him, as she felt his arms tighten further around her. Resting his head on hers, Abir felt a wave of sukoon he had been yearning for the last hour. He just stood there for a moment savouring that feeling he never wanted to lose. Remembering his panicked state for the last 30 mins, he abruptly pulled Mishti out of the hug. Puzzled, Mishti looked up at Abir’s fretted face.

“Do you have any idea how worried I was!? Abir yelled. “I’ve been looking for you absolutely EVERYWHERE!? I’ve been in every street of Rajkot, searching for you for the last half hour aur Tu yahan hai!” Mishti shocked at Abir’s flustered state, tried holding his wavering hands. “Tu yahan hai! sitting here all alone in this distraught state?” concluded Abir.

“Sorry Abir. I’m very sorry,” Mishti apologised. “I felt you needed your mum the most during this time. It’s just seeing the wall between you and Meenakshi aunty finally break down, I didn’t want to disturb the special moment you both had been longing for.”

“Mishti… Abir grumbled. “I need you as much as I need maa. How could you just go? You know how I feel lost without you around. And now, when my entire world has come crashing down, you thought you would just leave? No questions asked? Abir asked.

“No! Ofcourse not. I would never leave you at such a difficult time. I was going to call and meet you later. I thought to give you some space and time to digest the situation. Abir…” Mishti continued to explain, holding Abir to sit on the step with her. “Abir, I know exactly how you feel. The disheartening feeling when you realise the father you waited for your entire childhood, is not worthy of the title ‘papa.’ When the man you had high hopes and dreams about, ends up being your worst nightmare instead, I know how painful it is. I wish I could have somehow saved you from this pain. I wish hamare kismat ek jaisi nahi thi." Mishti lamented.

Abir looked deeply into Mishti’s sorrowful eyes, filled with tears reflected in his own. Finding it difficult to handle and digest, he looked away hiding back his tears. Mishti grabbed his shoulder and said, “Abir, I’m so sorry. Sab meri galti hai. I’m the worst girlfriend, who always fails in giving surprises.” Abir shook his head at Mishti. “I believed I was presenting you with the best birthday gift, by returning your lost childhood with Baba. But meri phooti kismat…I officially presented your life’s biggest dhokha.”

“Nahi Mishti, How can you blame yourself?” Abir tried reassuring her. “You believed Baba just like I did when we met him, how could you have known he was going to do such a scam game? You didn’t know the truth.” Abir paused and noticed Mishti lowering her gaze from his. “Right?” Abir asked, raising an eyebrow. The silence from Mishti, created further confusion in his mind. Instantly he remembered Mishti and Baba’s taunts earlier at the lakeside.

Baba: “If ONLY you listened to me, and kept your mouth SH--!

Mishti: “…yaad hai maine bhi aapse kya kaha? – Main bhol sakti hu, aur bolungi bhi, especially jab baat meri Abir ki ho.”


“Mishti…” Abir prompted. Mishti could feel the deep gravitas of his tone, in her guts. She knew there was no escaping now. “The things you and Baba yelled at each other earlier, at the lake.” Abir anxiously asked, “Woh sab kya tha? What was all that about?”

Mishti gulped and took a deep breath, turning towards Abir. She still didn’t have the courage to look directly in his soulful eyes. “Nahi Abir, I knew your Baba was planning something against you before the GD today.”Mishti confessed. Astonished, Abir simply watched her continue. “I’ve had these doubts on your Baba for a few days now, and in order to confirm them, I went to Rajgadh.”

“Haan I know you went to Rajgadh, but you told me on Karwa Chauth you were there to look around for our shaadi. After that night together,we got busy with our godhana. So how? When did you get to know Baba’s truth?,”Abir stammered to find reasons.

“Nahi Abir, I had gone to Rajgadh on KC to find out about Mehul. Something was telling me, he was hiding something, but I just didn’t know what. So I went to find some proo—”

“Kya!? Tumne mujse jhoot kaha tha? You lied to me Mishti. How could you!?” Offended Abir, got up immediately and walked down the steps with his hands on his hips.

“Abiir!...stop, Abir! Just here me out, please!” Mishti pleaded.“How could I tell you when, even I didn’t know what was going on? What would I say to you, when you ask me why I had the doubts? I had no evidence—”

Turning to face Mishti, Abir exclaimed “I thought we both knew the importance of honesty and openness. Issi baat pe tho tum naraz hogayi thi, when you learned I hid about Nanko running away from his shaadi. THIS was the exact reason why I was upset with Naanu when I realised, he had been lying to me too, and of course all these years I fought with with maa. They both constantly lied to me and kept me in the dark.” His voice was now choking up. “And now you too? Not ever in my dreams would I think YOU of all people would keep me in the dark Mishti.”

“Abiir, I know I made a mistake. But I promised myself as soon as I had solid proof, I would tell you. And that’s exactly what I did.”Mishti tried to explain. “I tried calling you, when I found the proof this morning in rajg---

“This morning? You were in rajgadh this morning?!” Abir was beyond shocked. He was appalled. “You left our godhana to do jasoosi? I knew it!” Abir scoffed. “I knew something was not right, I felt you were not at home. I can’t believe you were secretly investigating behind our backs whilst I was worried sick.” Abir overwhelmed, covered is face with his hand as he turned and began walking away.

“Abiir! Ruko! Please!” Mishti pled. “Abir we can talk this out…

“Nahi Mishti, I need some time. I need some time to process everything. Go home,” Abir requested. “Don’t worry, I’ll be fine,” he assured as he started to leave again. But Mishti wasn’t going to give up. She grabbed hold of his hand and started “Abii—” when she felt something within those unusually cold hands. Opening up his hand, Mishti saw the earrings she unknowingly dropped earlier. Abir turned around, glancing at his hand then at Mishti’s teary eyes.

--BG music begins to play—

Tadpe tub hi dil mera dukhake

Dheere dheere se dil ko churake

They both noticed the crack in the earring, holding their strong gaze at each other, Abir slowly handed over the broken earrings in to Mishti’s hand. Before he walked away, he took a long pause to just look at the girl barely standing infront of him. He tried to read her emoting eyes, but his vision was blurry with his own tears. So, with a heavy heart he turned to walked away from the girl he couldn’t recognise anymore. Mishti silently watched Abir disappear out of the market, just like the sun disappeared, setting behind the horizon.

--Dheere dheere se meri zindagi me aake

Dheere dheere se dil ko churake

Mujko chodke chale ho kis rah pe

Jaana hi tha kyu aaye yaha pe --

It was like he was looking at estranged Mishti. Her unusual out-of-character behaviour, made him question….

Why does my home feel different? What happened to you Mishti? What happened to my ghar?


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Hope this mishbir confrontation, held your expectations😊🤗

What will Mishti do now? How will she manao Abir?

Or will Abir realise his mistake first?

To know the answers..stay tuned. Some interesting twists are upcoming👍🏼😆

Don't forget to like and comment your thoughts and feedback🤗 Thankyou so much for all the love and support so far❤️

xx

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Posted: 5 years ago
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Nandu, honesty... what Abir and Mishti expected from each other was honesty, to some extent they were able to be honest, but they couldn’t be so beyond some point.

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Posted: 5 years ago
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Nandu first of all sorry dear for reading this late and late reply 😳🤗🤗 i was the one excited for this but got lost and didnt read it this long...

but now i've read this twice already and love this so much dear.... from first frantic search of abir, the comforting hug after finding her a very unique mishbir thing everything aside first the love n comfort well done nandu 👏👏👏

and my most favorite how you incorporated mishti's private talk here and the flow of conversation between mishbir their emotions while truth is revealed is so so beautiful... 👏👏⭐️⭐️❤️

the end was the perfect reaction of abir we all wanted... this is what we call as realistic relationship problem... i'm so intrigued to know how abir will handle this, mishti trying to manao abir, how they together solve their issue.... 👏👏

Nandu please yaar this time i promise will read it asap after you update.. please do continue this i'm so intrigued n interested to know your take on how mishbir will handle this issue and whats gonna happen.. 😳🤗🤗

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