my second os:-natik ka sweet surpirse update on (page 3)

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Guys this is my first os my frds I m not good writer but I
try hope u all like my frist os:)-
Akshi in her room get ready for party in front of mirror nd natik comes nd thought kyo na akshara ko daraya jaye nd he swly swly come near akshi but suddenly
A-with loud voice natikk apko party m jana k liye taiyar nhi hona
N-aaauch With sudden voice natik falls down on flour nd said
A-kya hua natik
N-apki wajah s m gir gya akshara apko itni jor s chillane ki kya jarurat thi m dar gya apko kaise pata chala ki m hu maine to aavaj b nhi ki
A-apke aadmo ki aahat se kya natik mai mirror k aage khadi thi dekh liya tha apko maine mujhe darana chahte the na mere duggu k papa
N-ooiii apko kaise pata chala
A-natik itne salo s apke sath hu sab pata chal jata h ap kab kya karne wale hai aacha suniye na pls y blauj ki dori bhand dhijiye mera hanth nhi ja rha h pls
N-ofcouse esse pal ka to hum injar karte h priyetame
A-natik aap b na par no masti nd she turn back nd natik bandhofy dori
Natik hug akshi from back his hand on akshi waist nd head on akshi neck
N-aap bhuttt sundarrr lag rhi h akshara with intimate nd low voice
A-aacha aur natik
N-aur mera man party m jane ka nhi kr rha h nd give a kiss on akshi cheeks
A-(natiks breath touches on akshi neck nd face) aurrr natik
N-uhi apko dekhta rahu nd gave kiss on akshi neck nd gave a lve bite on akshi neck also
A-(lost her on world) aurrr
N-(natik is also lost in lve world) aurrr apko uhiii pyarrr karta rahuuu akshara (his hand surrounding on akshi waist)
A-aurrr low voice
N-aur apkooo uhiii isiii tarahhh
Oooppsss natiks phone ringing natik comes in persent nd said ye phone ko b abhi aana tha
Akshi is also come on present
N- hlooo
In phone hiii janu kaise ho
Natik in confusion kya kon bol rha h
Akshi isro isro m kon h natik nodded
In phone baby tum b na hamesha esse hi karte ho baby give m a kiss
N-tumhe kisse bat krni h u r so stupid pehle no chake karo with anger
In phone sry sur v no galat lag gya m really sry sur
N- chake kr k bat kro y bat krne ka dang h tumhara sry dara diya mujhe
Here akshi is so confused what heppend to natik natik cut the phone
A- kya hua esse kyo chilla rahe hai
N-pata nhi kisi girl ka phone tha bol rhi thi ki hiii janu give me kiss aaj k ladkiyo ko kya ho gya h soch k bat krni chahiye na akhara
A-laugh laud 😆 natikkk usko pata nhi hoga na ki do baccho k papa ka phone k (pulling natik cheeks) warna abhi phone krti hi nhi
N-kamal h apko jalan nhi ho rhi akshara ek ladki ka phone the mere cell p apko thodi si b jalan nhi hui
A-kya karu natik mujhe jalan hoti hi nhi h ap ab do bacho k papa h kon line maregi apko
N-aacha abhi batata hu nd take akshi in his arms
Mujhe kam mat samjhiye na kisi k dekh k apko jalan jarur hogi
A-natikkk chodiyeee aacha jaiye ap kisi k sath dance karege to b jalan nhi hogi mujhe aap s
N-challenge mat kijiye aap jalan to hogi
A-uuu nhi hogi natik ab chahiye na nd bhaogofy
N-aacha dekhta hu apko party m
Both reached in party natiks frd ajay wlcming naksh nd said kaisa h
N-mast
Ajay-chal yr apni gang m bhabhi aap b waja jaiye meri wife h waha
A-ji bhaiya
Natik meet his frd after some time natik gang said yr y wifes k m jalan bhut hoti h h na
N-nhi yr akshi ko to jalan hoti hi nhi h bilkul b infact aaj ek ladki ka phone tha mere cell p to b nhi chiddi ulta mujhe chida diya
Natiks gang said its not possible hame test lena hoga bhabhi ka
N-v kaise all said esse
Ajay call his frd nd talk about there plan girl also agree nd girl come on party in short dress
Here akshi is busy with ladies u know ladies chatar patar
Girl come nd said to natik for dance all r said go natik its our plan
N-(man hi man ja to rha hu par y akshara mujhe mar na d iske sath dekh k maja aayga par akshara ko dekh k try krne m kya)
Girl suddan pull natik nd natik aauch
A-look aat natik nd confused y kon h natik k sath
All ladies said sare mard ek jaise h see akshra natik bhaiya ko us ladki k sath
A-nhi natik esse nhi h koi karan hoga ooo man hi man mujhe chida to nhi rhe h natik
Natik is not interested to dance nd (man hi man y akshara ko chid b nhi ho rhi 15 minit ho gye h)
N-tum mujhse thoda dur rehke dance karo
Akshi continue lokking y dono bat kya kr rhe h nd some anger come on akshi face
Girl-apko jalana h apni wife ko
N-haa par pyar s
Girl sudden pulls natik close
Akshi looking natik nd girls aakhir biwi biwi hoti h na sabar ka bhand tuta nd akshi with anger lost her mind nd went where natik nd girl dance nd gave a tight slep to girl nd push the girl she falls down on flour
A-tumhari himat kaise hui mere pati k sath dance krne ki
N-akshra y kya bol rhi h aap(man hi man haste hue)
A-aap to chup hi rahiye natik mujhe dance krne k liye pucha b nhi iske sath chipak k dance kr rhe h maja aa rha tha na bhut aacha ab samjhi v phone m janu wali yhi thi na mujhe kam mat samajhiye aap sab janti hu
N-(hasi chupate hue)y kya bol rhi h aap
A-sach natik nd start crying ab do bacche ho gye na interest khatam ho gya apka mujhse par yad rakhiye sab k sath essa hi hota h
N-kahi aapko jalan to nhi ho rhi h
A-cry voice nhiii
N-ho to rhi h nd his both hand cuped on akshi face
A-nhi ho rhi h
N-ho to rhi h make pappy face
A-haa ho rhi h jalan bhut jalan ho rhi h kush
Alll guest start jor jor s hasna natik gang come nd said sry bhabhi this is our plan y sabit krna tha biwi to biwi hi h
A-kya with confusion nd sudden smille come her face
Natik gang haa bhabhi man gaya natik sab wife hasband k mamle m ek jaisi h nd taise akshi
Akshi hit her hand on natik chaste n-aapko to mujhe marna tha bichari ise kyo dund diya mere duggu ki mamma apne akshi again hit natik
A-uiii nd 😆
Akshi say sry to girl girl said
Aaj k bad koi plan m samil nhi hougi kisi k pati k sath dance to bilkul nhi
A-sry
Girl-koi bat nhi y to mera risk tha na
Both naksh start dance in each other arms nd akshi give kiss on natiks cheeks nd said I love u natik
N-I love u to akshara alws aap hi aurrr koi nhiii sryyy aaajj k liye
A-nodded
Naksh enjoy the party nd gooo hommeee

Pls press like button if u enjoy my frist os gyss m not so gud but try kiya h this part is not so ramantic but I thought thoda essa b hona chaiyee
Hope u all enjoy my os

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Posted: 10 years ago
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wowww superbb os ruchi... very well done! !! and don't say u r not a good writer. ... u seriously wrote very well... u must continue. ..
plz keep writing
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Posted: 10 years ago
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just simple and so beautiful os ruchi.. m enjoyed it fully loved it.. you are also a good writer.. congo shango to you for ur first os.. keep writing more os like this
Edited by Pragati-naksh - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
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very nice oss.. great going dont say like dat madam...
hw many sry does u say????? ha?????/ u have tried and it was gud i never tried anything na...😭
congos for ur first os finally u made it🥳👏
a simple and different os... 😊
Edited by hinusha - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Originally posted by: hinusha

very nice oss.. great going dont say like dat madam...

hw many sry does u say????? ha?????/ u have tried and it was gud i never tried anything na...😭
congos for ur first os finally u made it🥳👏
a simple and different os...😊


To ab kar lo try pranu di... 😃 jab jaago tabhi savera
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Originally posted by: avinaksh


To ab kar lo try pranu di... 😃 jab jaago tabhi savera

if i write na avi u all will never talk with me again 😔 isiliye nahi likhoongi
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Originally posted by: hinusha


if i write na avi u all will never talk with me again😔isiliye nahi likhoongi

kyu aisa kya likhogi tum
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Originally posted by: Pragati-naksh

kyu aisa kya likhogi tum

kuch nahi likhoongi i know my hindi is very bad and i am troubling u all also... 😔
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Originally posted by: hinusha


kuch nahi likhoongi i know my hindi is very bad and i am troubling u all also...😔

Okii but if u want to wrote then u can wrote in english
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Originally posted by: Pragati-naksh

Okii but if u want to wrote then u can wrote in english

dat means i am irritataing u all na...
u people write i will encourage u all..anyone should be there na to encourage u all am here... its enough... 😊

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