ArMu OS : Mukhi ji ki Mukhiyani! (UPDATED) - Page 3

Originally posted by: Gunja_Siya

Wow! ArMu one shot. Just can't wait😛😛

Originally posted by: Aquabutterfly

Ahhh...this was beautiful ❤️
I can't stop smiling...Good job 👏👏
You portrayed Mukhi and Aru perfectly
I'm blushing 😳...Write more of these.

Originally posted by: realraul2307

Awesome yaar!! Good job!👏

Originally posted by: sanabmw

Wonderful OS Amreen👏.. superbly written.😊plzz make more😉

Originally posted by: SudHaVeN-

I've read a few OSes on EDKV forum as well, but never was active. But when I saw an OS from a Edkv fan I was like wow, it's really gonna be good. And it was indeed great. I really loved the flow of words in your narration.

You made the bedroom scene sound super hot than it did in the show 😆... The cooking stuff and the women teasing I could imagine all that happening in my mind as I was reading your story. Great job!

One thing though, in the show Mishri isn't on speaking terms with both ArMu right now. Did you avoid that deliberately to make the OS be lighthearted as possible?

Thanks for the beautiful OS. Looking forward to read more from you!😊

Originally posted by: malkasub

👏

Beautiful OS!

Loved every bit! Couldn't stop smiling😳

Originally posted by: C0raline

Amreen,

What a beautifully written piece of writing.

It was in line with the story, characters and still offered beyond what we saw in the show.

Loved it. You have not just lived up to our (rather high) expectations but also surpassed them.

Love,

P. S. I have such a craving for Undhiyo now. :-(

Originally posted by: cheezluver98

Hey Amreen,

I'm a silent stalker of this forum and was super excited to hear someone was writing fanfics for this jodi, and you did not disappoint! I think you described Mukhi's, Aru's and Rami's thoughts and emotions really well. You took the time to develop Rami's internal thoughts instead of skimming over it, which I really appreciate. It brings the quality of your writing to a greater level. You describe events and emotions really well and I think that makes your writing awesome! The only criticism I can give is that there were a few grammar errors and typos, but I get that even after proofreading for the 700th time, we still miss some things🤣 I like the storyline you developed and overall it was a coherent and enjoyable OS! Great work!!👏

I hope to read more writing from you in the future... maybe even a fanfic? (No pressure😉)