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Posted: 6 years ago
#21
Big congrats Mou! This is just so beautifully written and also so different to your usual style of writing. I did not guess you as the writer for this one.
It's very hard to put into words but there was this underlying feeling of kismat and meant-to-be.
Loved that bit about how she always kept bumping into him and spilling stuff on him and how over a period he grew possessive even about that! 😆
Absolutely loved this OS 🤗
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Posted: 6 years ago
#22
Literally the best !
Deserving <3

Each and every word of this story exudes warmth and shows how beautifully it is thought and penned down.

Moumita , stay blessed.
I have nothing else to add to this gem of writing.
Much love and God bless <3
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Posted: 6 years ago
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Mou, this is a brilliant piece! Can't tell you how many times I read this story. Can't believe how someone can change their writing style with such finesse. I was transported to the hill top with these two adorable characters. How do you come up with such cute ideas, the takrana was dil le lo😳

I should have guessed this is your story given Naina's characterization...strong, ethical, empathetic, sensitive, and with beautiful eyes 😃 You always give us the best of Naina.
At the end of the story Sam's realization and confession that Naina was the answer to his loneliness and the fact that he looked forward to their encounters was perfect. Hint of jealous Sam is always precious. Just good vibes all around😊

Truly deserved win, thank you for blessing us with this one!
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Posted: 6 years ago
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How do u write so well dear. It was so so good.
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Posted: 6 years ago
#25
Mou...
I had voted this os as the best os in the competition...and as I read and reread this piece...I realise wat a masterpiece it is...
I don't even remember how many times I've read this...and thought of reviewing... But every time I felt really incapable of doing justice to the beauty that this story is...

You have not just written an os... But made us witness the full journey of samaina

You know ... My biggest draw for this particular love story of Sameer and Naina was Sameer's loneliness and how Naina became that one entity that fulfilled all the voids in his life...the show has shown us this journey through different tracks... You portrayed it even more beautifully with just one night of a heart filled conversation between them.

I loved the parallel you drew towards the beginning... Sam moving aimlessly ... And then being drawn towards Naina...thus finding an aim...a focus...a definite path in life...that was absolutely brilliant...

I also loved how you drew out the different ways Sameer and Naina completed each other...if one skipped dinner in anger...the other had the presence of mind to pack some and eat wen she was in the mood... If one found cheating to be wrong...the other made sure to correct that mistake and not venture down that path...

You know mou...it was really a treat to read how The Sameer Maheshwari... who was so used to be stalked by girls coz of his charm and suave...had actually started to look out for this padhaku chashmish behenji types ... How unknowingly he had fallen in love with her... Though this teacher ki chamchi had made no special attempts to woo him...it was just that he was drawn towards her simplicity...a girl who understood him in and out... a girl with whom he could share his deepest secrets...

I loved the way you described the grey clouds hiding the only source of light in Sam's life at that point...and how the moment those clouds moved away...all he witnessed was the sheer natural beauty of the girl who was ruling his heart unknowingly...


Mou...I really could not guess who the writer of this os was...but ...the way u made Sam confess his feelings to Naina..."Abse sirf mujhse takrana"... I was just blown away and the inner me knew that only you can bring out a confession so so beautifully...

Thank you so much for this mou...this os will be a treasured one always...
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Posted: 6 years ago
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Never have I ever thought the sunrise theme in such a way, simply spellbound.
Apart from my love for Mount Abu, this just connected with me to an another level, I have lost count on how many times I have read it. Sunrise set on the college days, I thought I would give this the out of the box during the start of reading but then my whole perspective changed, The symbolic thoughts behind the sunrise and then, the possessiveness angle and anticipation coursed through me as I read every single line and the butterflies in my stomach didn't take the name to leave. The writing was awesome and it was so romantic...
"Naina, tum aaj ke baad mere alawa kisi aur se mat takrana."
This dialogue simply was magical I knew instantly this OS would be my winner and congrats for the win! 🥳❤️
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Posted: 6 years ago
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Mou dear Congrats on your win and the very first time I read this piece, I was emphatic about who the winner would be 👏⭐️
The title...There is only one him and he owns my heart, my smile, my world...Only For Him ❤️
Each of your stories reverberates your adroitness as a master story teller and this one just left me gobsmacked, I could not even find a word/phrase to define its beauty, this is totally out of the world Mou and I find myself incapable to pen down the extent of its imprint on me. You are truly phenomenal. I have never ever come across a work more romantic 🤗

I loved the symbolism of darkness, the empty road, the bare hill, it echoed the exact mood of Sameer: his pain and anguish of being alone. Even in that what caught my attention was how Sameer's fantasy about a witch looming around brought a smile. I could not stop laughing while Sameer had a flashback of his encounters with Naina, nothing close to romantic at all 😉 And then slowly and steadily the clouds drifted apart to unveil the glistening stars and moonlight similar to the change in mood of Sameer on having Naina by his side.The happiness that crept in him when he realized there was someone who adored him, who could read his mind and understand his feelings.Just then the sun rose spreading warmth, shoving away the darkness and in that moment it dawned on him that she made him feel Home ❤️

The jest of the story summarized in a single dialogue"Naina, tum aaj ke baad mere alawa kisi aur se mat takrana."I want you to know you are a winner when it comes to such minute description that evoke mixture of emotions in readers.🥳

In Love with this OS😊
Edited by mystique123 - 6 years ago
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Posted: 6 years ago
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This was so beautiful Mou, i love all of ur stories but i don't know why i love this a lil bit more. It maybe be because it reminds me of their innocence in their school days. I wish it wasn't an OS and it was more like a proper story or even contained three or four parts, i loved it so much. It was refreshing.
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Posted: 6 years ago
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Hi Mou,
Finally I am here, my comment will be of two parts one by organiser of OS Contest and another by a reader.

First, as a organiser I am grateful. I remember when I had announced that I will be organising OS Contest, there were discussions what if readers guess the particular entry and its writer and they vote it out of favour? Frankly I didn't know how to answer this but you gave answer in your style, by changing your writing style and most of the comments here shows they didn't guess the writer of this piece and winning by a huge margin, you showed that it is not the writer but the entry won. Forumites are wise enough to vote for best OS entry and that is so soothing as an organiser. This encourages others to come forward in such contest.
This also proves you are gem of a person, salute!
When many think winning is the only way to prove their dominance you proved it's not necessary. You could have easily stick to your writing style and your fandom by recognising it as your work, would have wholeheartedly voted for you but then it would have been the showing of power of fandom than prowess of you as a writer. Kudos for experimenting and congratulations for winning, well deserved.


Now as a reader, you know how much I stay away from fanfic world but I read this OS twice. Isi mein sab kuchh aa gaya, hai na? 😉
I have told my wish to read a piece that is totally irrelated to tracks in the show bcoz once that track is over and we know how it is wrapped up in the show, I no longer feel related to the OS. And you fulfilled my desire in this OS, thanks, it means a lot.
If you remember when you had submitted it, I have told you it is a winning entry, I was sure it will be in Top3, I have also asked few others and no one could realise who the writer was but still they had voted for this entry.

Now my two cents abt the story. I loved the concept, it is the 'nichod' of YUDKBH. As an ardent fan of show and as per my understanding, it is a story of handsome guy and average looking girl but inner beauty of that girl attracted him so much that he found her most beautiful girl in the world, you portrayed it so beautifully. I loved the dialogues esp of her " tum ko kya lagta hai? " and various minute descriptions like shawl and its warmth, I can go on and on, it is so worth reading. So now I have to stop and congrats once again for winning and I hope you will be there if an OS Contest is organised in future to set many such examples and to give us many such amazing pieces.
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Posted: 6 years ago
#30
Ekdam behtareen yr. Kitni khubsurti se aapne dono characters of dikhaya hai aapko salam hai, ye sach me mere padhi kuch best stroies me se ek ban gyi hai

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