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Ishrasoul

@ishrasoul

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Posted: 8 years ago

#181

hi friends
I am very happy with the response you all have given... This update is dedicated to Abha and raksha both wanted an update asap.. do here it is now I want long comment... hope you all will like it will be waiting for your lovely comment ...
Rhimjhim please change the title of the thread it will be easy for everyone...
Enjoy reading it
ISHRA THREE SHOTS: YOU KNOW WHAT YOU MEAN TO ME
SHOT TWO: TERE BIN JEE NA PAUNGA
Raman working in his office when his phone rings... he takes the call and gets worried as he can hear cries of adi and ruhi from other side while help was asking him to come home... he hurriedly takes his car key and heads to home... as he enters the room and finds both his kids crying and ishita was no where seen...
He wipes adi tears and hugs him and says: bus bacha... papa is here... nothing... shush...
Adi cuddles to him while raman moves towards ruhi and took her in his arms and kisses her cheeks and rocks her... after making his both kids calm.. he looks at help and asks: where is ishita...
Help: Bhabhi has gone somewhere...
Raman looks on and says: kahan...
Help: I don't know.. she has given me this letter and asked to call you when she leave house...
Raman took the letter and asks help to leave... he opens the letter and gets shocked to read it... the letter got slip from his hand and tear formed in his eyes... she has gone forever... she has left him... their kids...he holds his head ...
Romi who have enters the room sees raman pale and lost.. he looks at the letter and takes it and reads it out... he calls his wife sarika and ask her to take kids with her as he want some talk with raman... sarika takes kids with her... while romi was just looking at raman who was just stone...
Romi: now you should be happy she left...
Raman looks on and tears start flowing from his eyes...
Romi: acha hua... she got free from this hell... love less relation...
Raman: she left me.. she left our kids...
Romi sits besdie him and says: she has to leave you one day raman... you both have no love between you... and you are saying our kids??? Like really raman.. it was you who forced her in contract does you forgot it...
Raman: bhaiya... I lov..
Romi cuts him middle and says: no raman... you love shagun... you wants to take revenge from iyers remember... Your unborn child was dead because of those iyers... it was you who goes to iyers and forwards the proposal... remember...
Raman hides his face in his palm and says: no..
Romi continues to says: remember raman... It was you who forced her in contract marriage that after four years when you get two kids from her you will throw her out ... He said disgustingly...
Raman: i... i... he stammers...
Romi: you stooped very low raman... you not only marry her but also stooped so low that forced her in sexual relationship...
Raman shouts: no...
Romi: it is truth raman... it is... I am happy that she choses to move out from this hell.. she deserve to be happy get love and respect...
Raman cries and whipers: I love her bhai...
Romi looks at him and holds his shoulder and shook him angrily: stop it raman... you haven't satisfied with your revenge yet ... aur kitni zindagi barbaad karni hai uski...usy aik baar mout kay mu tak to pohancha chuky ho...
Saying this romi turns hie face away and says: stop this drama raman and enjoy your victory... you have achieved your goal... now you have your two kids ishita is not in your life so just be happy... he leaves ...
Raman cries and says: ishita... I really love you...per kabhi kaha nahe... I really love you..
Raman remembers the flashback when ishita has told her the good news of her being pregnant at ruhi time how much he was happy... He took her to doctor and doctor asked to go for abortion as her body is not ready for this pregnancy and it can be very harmful... she can die also...
Raman straightly makes his mind to go for abortion as he doesn't want to loose ishita but it was ishita who was admanat to have ruhi... how he was worried for the wellbeing of both... how much it was difficult time for him...
When ishita goes in labor and doctor was not hopeful for both... he was all shattered... He gets to know the importance of her in his life... he got to know that he is in love with her... How much he felt ashamed for his doing... he cries and asks forgiveness and asks one chance ...
He wanted ishita to get alright so that he can compensate all his bad doings... how much he was happy when doctor announced that both ishita and baby are fine... how much he was happy...
He looks at their room and imagines her every where how she stands in front of mirror and fills her partition with sindoor in morning... How she wakes him in morning... how she handles him kids and home wihout any rest... her sweet innocent antics with kids...
Tere bin jee na paungaSach much mar hi jaungaYeh tai hain, ye tai hain Hasna Rona tujhse hiMera hona tujhse hiYeh tai hain, ye tai hain
Raman remembers how he has planned for today evening for her... And now he has lost her completely... He cries...
Mojud hai har saas maintu har dafa, ye tai hai
tu dard hai ya davapar hain mera ye tai hain
he gets up and opens his cupboard and takes out all her gifts she has given him on his brithdays any special occasion... he hugs them tightly feeling her near...
Tere bin jee na paungaSach much mar hi jaungaYeh tai hain, ye tai hain Tu naseebon sa mere hathon peShuru se likha hai
Mera haq hai tu aasmano seMujhe jodta hai
Raman remembers romi words and says: bhaiyaa theek hain... I don't deserve you... you deserve much more better than me... it was blessing for me that I got you in my life... but I lost you because of my deeds... kitna badnaseeb hoon... Tumhain ye bhi nahe bata saka kay kitna pyaar karta tha...
Tere kadmon pe jahan rakh doon mainKabhi jo kahe tu koi shaq ho toh azma lenaKisi din mujhe
Raman holds her picture and says: I couldn't get the chance to rectify my mistake... to tell you how much I love you...I would have given you all happiness of the world... he wipes his tears which were flowing endlessly...
he continues to say: acha mein to bura hoon... gira hua hoon per aik baar ...aik baar kaha to hota ishita kay how much I hurted you ... You walk out silently... aik thapad hi maara hota... Muje saza hi de daiti...
Mojud hai har saas maintu har dafa, ye tai hai
tu dard hai ya davapar hain mera ye tai hain
unable to take the pain... he collapses on floor and cries uncontrollably and shouts: please come back ishita... come back... I cant live without you... I really love you...
Tere bin jee na paungaSach much mar hi jaungaYeh tai hain, ye tai hain
He hugs ishita picture tightly and cries... Then he remembers about his kids... he wipes his tears and rushes to take his kids...
He sees adi and ruhi laying on bed silently... he goes to them and took both of them in arms and moves to his room making both settle on bed... he slid beside them... adi hugs him tightly asif he wants to hide himself...
Raman caresses his hairs and says: what happen prince...
Adi: mumma yaad arahi hain... He looks at raman with pout and eyes filled with tears...
Raman simply hugs him and kisses his head... He was pulling both of his kids closer as both were the symbol of ishita...only solace...
Adi: mumma kab ayengi...
Raman: adi... sleep... warna mumma ko bura lagayga na... kay adi itna roya...
Raman makes both of the kids sleep and he was looking at the ceiling of the room thinking how he will live without ishita... how kids will live without ishita.. how ishita will live without kids...
He kisses the forehead of adi and ruhi and says: don't worry you boht will be with your mother soon... mein apne gunah ki saza tum dono ko nahe milne doonga... ishita can hate me but he can never hate her kids...
Other side
Ishita was just sitting lifelessly in iyer house while all were thinking when ishita should get married to abhi... mihika says: I wish raman bhalla give divorce asap to akka then akka cacn marry abhi...
Ishita gets angry and shouts at them and says: I don't want to get married... leave me alone... she leaves angrily to her room and cries...
Her thoughts were continuously on her kids how they were living without her... adi ... ruhi... who were taking care of them or not... and raman ... He must be happy that she move out form his life silently... she was just crying on her fate... and drifted into sleep remembering her kids and raman...
Raman was just thinking... he took his phone and calls his lawyer and ask him to make divorce paper and custody papers of his kids... he voluntarily giving permanent custody of his kids to ishita...
After cutting the call... he closes his eyes and says: shayad is tarhaan mere kuch gunah kam hoon... shayad mein tumhare dil mein koi jagah bana loon... Shayad tum muje maaff kar sako ishita... I know you will love adi ruhi more than me... you will raise them best... adi meri tarhan kabhi nahe banega...
Tear falls from his eyes he says: Kash... Ishita... Mein ... Tum .. AUR humare adi ruhi... Aik happy family ban jain...
He lost remembering her care towards him when he met with an accident.. although it was minor ...
Flashback
Raman comes home with a cut on his forehead.. Ishita was waiting for him to return.. she gets panic seeing the cut and cups his face and start scolding him
Ishita: you don't listen to me Raman.. apko kitni baar kaha hai drive carefully... But no you don't listen...
Raman was just looking at her admiring her ...
Ishita: now will you tell me.. how did you get hurt ..
Raman: nothing.. just minor accident...
Ishita: acha hai.. ye minor hai.. to kiya major accident ka wait KAR rahy thy ap...
Raman: Ishita don't worry... I am fine... Just relax... You are getting hyper... Adi ruhi sogaye.
Ishita gets up and leaves muttering something audible only to her... While Raman smiles seeing her concern and care..
Flashback ends
Raman wipes his tear and says: I want to get your love... Your care... Your scolding .. but it is not possible... Mein Akela hi rahonga.. this is my punishment for ruining your life in my so called revenge...
That's it my dear friend hope you all will like it waiting for your lovely comments and response don't forget to hit like also
Love you
Rida

Edited by ishrasoul - 8 years ago

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Ishrasoul

@ishrasoul

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Posted: 8 years ago

#182

Originally posted by: lalibhaskar
Awesome wirk
Beautifully written
Ishita has fallen in love with the person who forced her in to marriage only to have kids
She feels raman also loves her
She was happy with her family forgetting she has to leave them
How will raman react after ushuta leaves

Pls update soon

Pls update Mumkin too

Thanks dear

After completing this TS I will update Mumkin

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Sairanoor

@Sairanoor

Voyager

Posted: 8 years ago

#183

I just loved this concept of yours..

Lovely part

Waiting for next part Update soonish plzz waiting for it eagerly

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rock12

@rock12

Explorer

Posted: 8 years ago

#184

Superb update

Raman loves Ishita

He crying for her and over his faith and same with ishita

Update soon

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Swarna

@swa6

Voyager

+ 3

Posted: 8 years ago

#185

nice update, waiting for next eagerly😊

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Mdwst

@Mdwst

Sparkler

Posted: 8 years ago

#186

Good update.. she left he's shattered ...hope be brings her back.

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Nithya

@Nithya83

Voyager

Posted: 8 years ago

#187

Lovely update di!!!
Raman loves Ishita???
Poor Raman... he is shattered
Hope he brings Ishu back
Felt bad for both ISHRA
Update soon

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peggy

@peg_pionne

Dazzler

Posted: 8 years ago

#188

Amazing and fantastic story i love the two part
Waiting eagerly for the next one 👏 😉 😊

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abha

@..abha..

Sparkler

+ 4

Posted: 8 years ago

#189

Thank u for such a soonish update.

Well in last update it was Ishita's plight which made me emotional, i mean leaving her kids and Raman, she was in pain but she thought she will be happy even now she felt same .

But this update was heartbreaking, poor Raman he was so sad that she left her , he is guilty , yes he did all revenge thing and ishu suffered bcoz him but now i think for some days he will get well deserved punishment but not those kids, so hoping ishra to be together in love and happy.

All this thing will bring them more closer. and may be jo ab tak na hua ab ho jaayega they will confess.

oops divorce and even custody😲. How will he live alone?😭

Romi was harsh, ya I know valid pts but ab to ishra love each other and they had kids tooo fir ab kya problem h.

Hope ishu didnot mu her that he is divorcing her.

And Raman go and confess , give urself a chance and then see may be life is lucky for u.

Superb

Continue Soon...

I think its long comment.

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shavetamehta32

@shavetamehta32

Dazzler

Posted: 8 years ago

#190

awesome mind blowing fantastic fabulous incredible super se bhi uper brilliantly written beautiful I liked the story very much plzzz update soon next part waiting for the next update. update soon next part