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Posted: 10 years ago
#71
Part 3 ... fathers love their daughters

Appa on his way back home has decided to buy a doll house for ruhi ... on his way he meets Mr Bhalla
" Bhalla saab kaise ho ? Aap kal aaye nahi ?"
" nahi mr iyer kuch zaroori kaam aa gaya tha toh nahi aa sake ...waise aap yahan toy shop mein ...main toh simmi ki beti k liye doll lena aaya tha "
" hahaha main bhi doll house lene aaya tha ... kya hai na meri pothi ka gift aaj deliver honewala tha isliye "
Mr Bhalla thinks about ruhi and is visibly upset ...
" kya baat hai bhallaji aap itne dukhi hai "
" kya kahun ?... meri bhi ek pothi hai jo pichle ek saal se laapata hai aur mera beta raman bilkul toot gaya hai ...raman ki biwi shagun ke karan hua hai sab kuch ..ussne humare puttar ko dhokha diya aur ab tak uske piche apshagun bankar padi hai ...mera beta toh saasein bhi mushkmr il se le raha hai "
" main samjh sakta hun bhalla saab ...raman apni beti ko kitna miss karta hoga ... ek pita apni beti k liye kitna tadapta hai main samjh sakta hun ...meri ishu ki bhi zindagi ujad gayi thi ... uski engagement toot jaane k baad woh bilkul kisi zinda laash ki tarah thi pati humari pothi ne bilkul ek angel ki tarah aakar uski zindagi mein khushiyan bhar di...main murugan se pray karunga ki aapke raman ko bhi ek angel mil jaye jo ussye uski beti se milwa de "
They speak for some more time and head home

In srinagar
raman is remembering his days with ruhi ... shagun left them when ruhi was just eight months old ...but raman had looked after his daughter like a mother ... he would bathe her ..sing songs to her ... play with her ... cuddle her lovingly ...she was hus sweet heart ...
he could never forget how she first said papa...
how she would stop crying the moment she saw raman ...
how she would wink at him when he smiled at her ...
how she always kept her left leg over her papa ...
raman was cryibg his heart out when suddenly he received a message from mihir ...
bhai how's thus place for our new office sending you the pictures ...
raman was sifting through the pics that mihir was sending him on whatsapp ...it included the interior and exterior area and in one of the pics of the road outside the office he saw a woman who held the hand of a kid ...a girl ...and it struck him that this was ruhi ...

In delhi
Mr iyer and mr Bhalla reach their floor ...
ishita was outside making a rangoli
"Ishita meet mr Bhalla ...my old friend "
"Hello uncleji"
"Hello puttar ...jab last time tumse mila tha tab tun sirf ek saal ki thi .."
Just then ruhi shouts from inside "ishima khana do "
"Ja puttar apni beti ke paas "
Mr Bhalla bids good bye to mr iyer and ishita ..while he cannot forget the voice that called out ishima
he thinks "meri ruhi puttar ki aawaaz bhi aisi hi thi "


Ps:not proof read ...im not that great at writing but I tried my best ..I hope it matches ur expectations. .vikas thanks alot ...
Ur criticism is most welcome



happy new year


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Posted: 10 years ago
#72
thanks for quick update.
Edited by SAKIV-RAM - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
#73
appa and mr bhalla conversation was good.
Raman got to know Ruhi is in delhi.So next part would be interesting.
Since picture is there it wont be much difficult to know about Ishita.
Thanks for quick update again
Edited by SAKIV-RAM - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
#74
Thanks for update. It is good the story progress well hope Raman will come to Delhi and looking for Ruhi. Till now the Bhallas family still not see Ruhi yet. Hope next person will update soon.😊
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Posted: 10 years ago
#75

Originally posted by: Amaranthus

Part 3 ... fathers love their daughters

Appa on his way back home has decided to buy a doll house for ruhi ... on his way he meets Mr Bhalla
" Bhalla saab kaise ho ? Aap kal aaye nahi ?"
" nahi mr iyer kuch zaroori kaam aa gaya tha toh nahi aa sake ...waise aap yahan toy shop mein ...main toh simmi ki beti k liye doll lena aaya tha "
" hahaha main bhi doll house lene aaya tha ... kya hai na meri pothi ka gift aaj deliver honewala tha isliye "
Mr Bhalla thinks about ruhi and is visibly upset ...
" kya baat hai bhallaji aap itne dukhi hai "
" kya kahun ?... meri bhi ek pothi hai jo pichle ek saal se laapata hai aur mera beta raman bilkul toot gaya hai ...raman ki biwi shagun ke karan hua hai sab kuch ..ussne humare puttar ko dhokha diya aur ab tak uske piche apshagun bankar padi hai ...mera beta toh saasein bhi mushkmr il se le raha hai "
" main samjh sakta hun bhalla saab ...raman apni beti ko kitna miss karta hoga ... ek pita apni beti k liye kitna tadapta hai main samjh sakta hun ...meri ishu ki bhi zindagi ujad gayi thi ... uski engagement toot jaane k baad woh bilkul kisi zinda laash ki tarah thi pati humari pothi ne bilkul ek angel ki tarah aakar uski zindagi mein khushiyan bhar di...main murugan se pray karunga ki aapke raman ko bhi ek angel mil jaye jo ussye uski beti se milwa de "
They speak for some more time and head home

In srinagar
raman is remembering his days with ruhi ... shagun left them when ruhi was just eight months old ...but raman had looked after his daughter like a mother ... he would bathe her ..sing songs to her ... play with her ... cuddle her lovingly ...she was hus sweet heart ...
he could never forget how she first said papa...
how she would stop crying the moment she saw raman ...
how she would wink at him when he smiled at her ...
how she always kept her left leg over her papa ...
raman was cryibg his heart out when suddenly he received a message from mihir ...
bhai how's thus place for our new office sending you the pictures ...
raman was sifting through the pics that mihir was sending him on whatsapp ...it included the interior and exterior area and in one of the pics of the road outside the office he saw a woman who held the hand of a kid ...a girl ...and it struck him that this was ruhi ...

In delhi
Mr iyer and mr Bhalla reach their floor ...
ishita was outside making a rangoli
"Ishita meet mr Bhalla ...my old friend "
"Hello uncleji"
"Hello puttar ...jab last time tumse mila tha tab tun sirf ek saal ki thi .."
Just then ruhi shouts from inside "ishima khana do "
"Ja puttar apni beti ke paas "
Mr Bhalla bids good bye to mr iyer and ishita ..while he cannot forget the voice that called out ishima
he thinks "meri ruhi puttar ki aawaaz bhi aisi hi thi "


Ps:not proof read ...im not that great at writing but I tried my best ..I hope it matches ur expectations. .vikas thanks alot ...
Ur criticism is most welcome



happy new year





marvellous updte...
loved it..
loved raman's memories...
fr me it is fully satisfied nd photo twst...
cant wait fr nxt...
sch a quick updte xcellnt yar...
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Posted: 10 years ago
#76

Originally posted by: usaonly

Thanks for update. It is good the story progress well hope Raman will come to Delhi and looking for Ruhi. Till now the Bhallas family still not see Ruhi yet. Hope next person will update soon.😊

.
Thanks
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Posted: 10 years ago
#77

Originally posted by: shavi2311





marvellous updte...
loved it..
loved raman's memories...
fr me it is fully satisfied nd photo twst...
cant wait fr nxt...
sch a quick updte xcellnt yar...


thanks im glad I met ur expectations 😊
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Posted: 10 years ago
#78

Originally posted by: SAKIV-RAM

appa and mr bhalla conversation was good.

Raman got to know Ruhi is in delhi.So next part would be interesting.
Since picture is there it wont be much difficult to know about Ishita.
Thanks for quick update again


thank you 😊
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Posted: 10 years ago
#79
Great update my friend. Raman now knows Ruhi is in Delhi that's very interesting
the story is going well

thanks for the fast post now the pressure is on me
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Posted: 10 years ago
#80

Originally posted by: AllezJustine

Great update my friend. Raman now knows Ruhi is in Delhi that's very interesting

the story is going well

thanks for the fast post now the pressure is on me

yup update fast

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