Crime Control Squad- Case #2 - PAUSE- - Page 2

Wow, dear, simply wonderful start👏

Originally posted by: Godly_Affection

Wow, dear, simply wonderful start👏

Loved it

Gagan's story is interesting! You've penned it fantastically well!

All the things were going on in front of my eyes! Just seemed so real!👏

So that's the case, seems damn intriguing

The characters are interesting

Going to love reading this!

Let's see what team Vedant does!😉

Do continue soon

Thanks for PM😊

Wait, W*F? Ravi, the seemingly normal, simple truck driver was the target all along? WHAT?

Originally posted by: lovely_lady

Wait, W*F? Ravi, the seemingly normal, simple truck driver was the target all along? WHAT?

On a similar note, I gotta say Shwetha, you have a knack for creating suspense and luring the reader. I liked the way you started off, beginning with a dream ending in a death. And I really liked the way you ended, with the realization that Shlok was never really in danger. Although wait a minute, maybe that in itself is a red herring? Gagan thought Rafi was the target because he got hit, but what if Shlok really was the target and Gagan managed to save him and Rafi got hit in the ensuing chaos?

That said, I did have some difficulties with this piece. Firstly, it was kinda confusing to read at times. You switched between tenses, characters, etc a bit and there was quite a bit of detail readers had to pick up on their own. For example, when you started talking about Shlok, it wasn't immediately evident that he was the boss Sam and Gagan kept talking about. But I mean, maybe that's just me being picky (which I am and sorry about that LOL). Or maybe that was your intention in the first place, to have things be purposefully vague?

Anyways, good start to the story. Quite interesting and I'm looking forward to reading!

Chapter 2

Closing the hardcover bound book, Truth, Love and Little Malice' by Khushwant Singh, and placing it on the side table, Vedant rubbed his eyes and pulled his face. Sleep had opened its door and was warmly welcoming him in. Patting the pillows and positioning them in place, he stretched his legs and body, feeling his muscles creaking and loosening. He lay down on his bed and experienced a long pleasurable yawn, a bless of peace and silence absorbing him. Switching off the bedside lamp on his right side, he turned on his favourite left side to put his hard day at rest. Undisturbed sleep- was that ever written on a policeman's life? Never.

Vedant turned to his right again to pick up his noisy vibrating mobile from the bedside table. Dropping it in the process, he switched on the lamp, picked up the phone and read the Commissioner's name on the display-Jayant Rathore.

Hope you haven't called to check my hello tune, Jay,' commented Vedant as he took the call.

Get to Yeshwantraj Multispeciality Hospital immediately, Ved. A patient has been shot,' informed Jayant. He could be above Vedant in the ladder of power and position, but they both shared a good friendship which went back for years. They both started their career together and were in the same training batch. Their bonding couldn't be termed as close. They irritated each other a lot with their views and decisions which were always poles apart. But they understood each other very well. There was mutual trust. They knew where the other came from. Jayant always knew the reasons behind Vedant's professional decisions while Vedant understood the political pressure which Jayant shielded the team from. Ultimately, justice was what they worked for and they formed a good senior team. From the time Vedant had taken over the Special Branch (Crime Control) in the city, the closing rate of the cases had increased substantially. This was mainly due to the positive working relationship between Vedant and Jayant.

Now?' asked Vedant in surprise. I am sure the area police are taking care of the initial procedures.'

It involves the Karmarkars, Ved. Shlok Karmarkar was in the room when the patient got shot. The patient is the driver who was involved in the death of Shlok's driver.'

You mean Shlok shot the driver?' asked Vedant still trying to comprehend the situation.

Don't know. It's a big mess there. I want you down there immediately,' said Jayant as an order.

Fine! But I am not going to wake up my team at this hour. I'll go alone,' informed Vedant. Jay, does this mean this case is routed to Special Branch directly?'

Yes. I want you to head this case. The case of Shlok's driver's death will also be directed to you. It's an accident, nevertheless I want you to look into it. Anything revolving around the Karmarkars, I want you to take over. And Ved- caution please. You know the Karmarkars and the position they hold in the society. I don't want media to head this case and make a masala movie out of it. Keep a tight hold and make sure the media gets only what is needed. More than that, just not the common people but film writers would be interested in writing a script and making a movie "inspired by real incidents". So...not more, not less. Just the crisp details to keep the media happy. All the case files and notes will reach you in the morning.'

Vedant got ready in seconds with his collared black T-shirt and his worn out blue jeans. The bliss of being in Special Branch- no uniforms. He pulled his only jacket from behind the door where it usually hung, but placed it back realising the hot weather outside. The city had been experiencing one of the hottest times in its history. The jeans itself was a terrible option for this summer.

The living room was deserted. He walked slowly towards the spare bedroom which was right opposite to his. He observed the thin light emanating from the little gap between the floor and the thick wooden door. She was awake, he thought. He knocked the door, twice- softly with unneeded care and opened the door with caution and concern. He saw Indira, reading some papers- answer sheets, with extreme focus. She was sitting on the bed with her back rested. A small table stood over her laid legs which housed all the papers and stationery.

Indira Trivedi turned her head to look at her known intruder. She was a woman nearing her 50s. Fair, hair till her shoulder sporting grey at many places, there was an air of respect and confidence around her. She worked as a Professor at the National Institute of Sciences teaching Atomic Physics.

Just wanted to say- I am going out. It would take at least 2 to 3 hours.' Vedant's voice couldn't be termed nervous. But it wasn't confident or casual either. There was hesitancy at the highest possible level.

Ok,' she nodded with a small smile. She was used to Vedant leaving home at untimely hours. New case?'

Yes. Murder,' said Vedant with no visible expression.

I have an early day tomorrow. National Conference. So don't know if I would be meeting you in the morning. I will prepare some breakfast and put it in the fridge. Heat and have it when you return.'

Sure. Thanks,' said Vedant with a plastic smile and closed the door slowly. He opened it immediately. Sleep soon. It's already very late.'

Indira nodded as she closed her pen and bundled her papers. She could feel the intense care and concern Vedant showered on her though he always tried to mask it. She couldn't understand why Vedant still behaved like a stranger with her. They had been husband and wife for several years before he had decided to divorce her for his own foolish reasons. He considered himself responsible for something he had no control over. She was heavily pregnant and there was no electricity in the house. In the dark, she tripped and fell down the stairs. Vedant, who was in a meeting, took a while to reach home to find her unconscious in a pool of blood. They lost their baby because of the fall and he blamed himself for not being with her when she needed him the most. He began to believe that his profession was a threat to her, and decided to distance himself from her. He felt he was not fit to be a husband and decided to put an end to the relationship. She tried to explain to him that he wasn't to be blamed, but in vain. The divorce happened and she left the country to pursue her doctorate in Singapore.

Vedant took 7 years to understand what an idiot he had been. She never hated him. She knew he would realise his mistake one day. He considered distancing himself from her was the solution or perhaps his punishment. She knew it wouldn't have been easier for him to be away from her. Now that he had realised his mistake and had stretched his hand for reconciliation, she had got what she had always wanted- to live with him till the end of his life. They were still divorced. They still had some invisible barrier between them. There was awkwardness. There was hesitation. They behaved very formal with each other. They were on either side of the same bridge, but walking towards each other slowly and steadily. Indira was sure they would meet each other soon in the place where they were years before.

Moving the small table with her papers and pens on to the empty side of her bed, Indira switched off the lights to flow into her dreamless sleep.

*****

interesting start dear

Awesome update👏
Indira-Vedant's past relations and present situation was well explained😳
thnks fr d pm😛

Originally posted by: Godly_Affection

interesting start dear

loved it

Jay-Ved, I just love their love-hate relation! Beautifully portrayed!

Watched Star plus show Arjun? The bosses shared the same kind of relation, Jay-Ved always remind me of them!

coming back,

Ved having another sleepless night! The job has to be blamed! haha! Jay gave the case to CCSB,cool! I really like Jay-Ved's convos, they're amusing and witty!

Indira is back, cool! I'd love to see the love story of Ved-Indi! Though they have a long way to go, but it's not that long, I hope as the case ends, we'll have Ved-Ira happy married ever after!*fingers crossed!*

So Ved is off to the crime scene, hmm..

now lets wait and watch, I'm ready with popcorn n drinks to enjoy the ride!

eagerly waiting for the next part

do continue soon

thanks for pm

Originally posted by: ...Shibu...

Awesome update👏
Indira-Vedant's past relations and present situation was well explained😳
thnks fr d pm😛

thanx for the update .😊 hmmm... very short update ...haha just kidding😆 I am sure you have more to update soon. I had a big smile on my facewhen Ved made his entry. 😃... I knew the man who is reading the book is Ved ... I noticed you gave a small intro to Ved-Jay relationship it was like a recap..because in the previous episode CASE # 1 their friendship was explained...but its good for the new readers to have a small intro about Ved-jay friendship and Ved-indira relationship status. Talking about Indira ...I remember that she was introduced a mature, understanding and patient woman who loved vedant dearly. She was also doing some research that time, now I know she is professor. i was scared that maybe Indira would refuse coming back to Vedant but she came back to him it shows that she really loves him...now that she is back I m sure they will be together like before...vedant just needs to forgive himself. Poor him cant even get a good sleep. Looking forward to the next chapter. All the best 😊