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Posted: 15 years ago
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The boy crept slowly up the stairs, knife in hand.
His heart beat like thunder. He knew if he got caught there would be no escape.
But he was going to do this.
He had dreams, and his dreams were going to come true.
Whether he had to fight for it or ... kill.

All his life he had nothing but dissapointments. He was robbed of his childhood,
his father was an abusive junkie, his mother had left him in the midst of everything.
He had been bullied all throughout his high school years.
Everyone had jeered at him, spat at him, called him names. They would take his lunch money, beat him. And the only thing he could do, was cry himself to sleep.
His father didn't care about him.
He was just a selfish old hag!

But not anymore!
Today, he would be a man. He would fend for himself, live only for the sole purpose of himself and he would listen to noone!
Creak!

The boy froze. Bearly breathing. He made no sudden movements and listened for the sound of footsteps. What would happen if he were to be arrested for this ... crime?
No. He had to do this.
He listened again for footsteps or screams. After a moment, when nothing happened, he let out a breath. He started moving again, though this time he was careful not to step on any creaky floorboards that would blow his cover.

Infront of him he saw two doors.
He knew by all the blueprints he'd drawn that one of the doors lead to the bathroom.
But which one?
He had to be quick! Time was running out, dawn was nearly approaching.
He decided to enter the right door. The one that had the flowery designs on it.
He hated flowers.

He approached the flowery door .... but as he was about to turn the knob ...
The door opened ...
Someone was coming out!

He had to hide!
He quickly but quietly entered through the left door.
Aaah. As expected. The bathroom.
The boy shu the door and waited, holding his breath!
Why was this so hard!?

Suddenly the door of the bathroom opened.
He stood there in fear .. staring at the figure who stared back at him.

"Aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaagggggggggggggggggghhhhhhhh!"
The girl screamed. It was an agonising scream that rang in the boys ears.
He had to act quick.
He jumped out the window... no crashed would be the right word.
With glass splinters flying everywhere.

He landed in a garden, bruised black and blue.
He was bleeding rapidly. But he had to get out ... fast!

The police were coming!



Comment :) ๐Ÿ˜†
Hope you liked it! ๐Ÿคฃ
A weird story huh? lol

-Amira-



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Posted: 15 years ago
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Is my story that bad?
Dont i atleast get a chance for my writing skills to blossom?

๐Ÿ˜ญ๐Ÿ˜ญ๐Ÿ˜ญ
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Posted: 15 years ago
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Ooh it was great! I loved how the suspense was built until the very end... Wish he had killed someone though ๐Ÿ˜†
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Posted: 15 years ago
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Originally posted by: -Nikasha-

Ooh it was great! I loved how the suspense was built until the very end... Wish he had killed someone though ๐Ÿ˜†

๐Ÿคฃ I kinda rushed the ending. ๐Ÿ˜›

Thnx for commenting ๐Ÿ˜ƒ
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Posted: 15 years ago
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You should right more. I like it! What happened next?! Did he kill someone?! The high school part was really sad!
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Posted: 15 years ago
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Originally posted by: sweetscent13

You should right more. I like it! What happened next?! Did he kill someone?! The high school part was really sad!

๐Ÿ˜ƒ Thanks!
Unfortunately no. He doesn't kill anyone! ๐Ÿคฃ
It was just a short draft that i started writing in my chemistry lesson.
๐Ÿ˜†

I'm currently writing a long story though,
About a young teenage girl who's life changes when she finds out her parents weren't killed in an accident. They were murdered. She is the last guardian of a powerful dagger that can destroy all. It turns back time. And there are those who will do anything to get their hands on it. Amidst all the secret and lies, She sets out on a quest to the Amazon.

The Amazon.
Thats where all the answers lie.

Do you think that sounds good? ๐Ÿ˜‰
-Amira-
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Posted: 15 years ago
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Originally posted by: Maz_4_life

๐Ÿ˜ƒ Thanks!
Unfortunately no. He doesn't kill anyone! ๐Ÿคฃ
It was just a short draft that i started writing in my chemistry lesson.
๐Ÿ˜†

I'm currently writing a long story though,
About a young teenage girl who's life changes when she finds out her parents weren't killed in an accident. They were murdered. She is the last guardian of a powerful dagger that can destroy all. It turns back time. And there are those who will do anything to get their hands on it. Amidst all the secret and lies, She sets out on a quest to the Amazon.

The Amazon.
Thats where all the answers lie.

Do you think that sounds good? ๐Ÿ˜‰
-Amira-

Sounds fantastic! Thanks for summarizing it for me๐Ÿ˜† I will definitely read it and can't wait!!!
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Posted: 15 years ago
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Originally posted by: sweetscent13

Sounds fantastic! Thanks for summarizing it for me๐Ÿ˜† I will definitely read it and can't wait!!!

Aaaw thankyou
It's probably gonna take me long !!
You'll have to read it in your 60's ๐Ÿคฃ

^^ Yhh. I know. I'm weird. Thats my idea of a 'joke' ๐Ÿ˜‰

Then again. I'm going on a holiday for 7 weeks. So i'll be quite ahead by then.
So you can read it. ๐Ÿ˜†
I take long in writing justa page lol

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Posted: 15 years ago
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Aaaw thankyou
It's probably gonna take me long !!
You'll have to read it in your 60's ๐Ÿคฃ

^^ Yhh. I know. I'm weird. Thats my idea of a 'joke' ๐Ÿ˜‰

Then again. I'm going on a holiday for 7 weeks. So i'll be quite ahead by then.
So you can read it. ๐Ÿ˜†
I take long in writing justa page lol

Aw man! I will have to wait for that long!!!๐Ÿ˜† Don't worry, I know you will write it before I am that old!๐Ÿ˜†
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Posted: 15 years ago
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Aaaw thankyou
It's probably gonna take me long !!
You'll have to read it in your 60's ๐Ÿคฃ

^^ Yhh. I know. I'm weird. Thats my idea of a 'joke' ๐Ÿ˜‰

Then again. I'm going on a holiday for 7 weeks. So i'll be quite ahead by then.
So you can read it. ๐Ÿ˜†
I take long in writing justa page lol

Aw man! I will have to wait for that long!!!๐Ÿ˜† Don't worry, I know you will write it before I am that old!๐Ÿ˜†
๐Ÿ˜†๐Ÿ˜†๐Ÿ˜†
Don't worry bwt that. lol ๐Ÿ˜‰
You won't be that old. ๐Ÿ˜›
Maybe i shud start now? Do you think?
But if i have a load of comments from people hu like the story and wanna read more...
They're gonna have to wait for 49 days after that!! ๐Ÿ˜•

See. THATS the problem!! ๐Ÿคฃ
Its a lose lose situation isn;t it? ๐Ÿ˜Š

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