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Alright guys, now one some rambling before the story. I have my exams coming up in 4 days, I dont know ANYTHING. And Im glued 2 my computer, writing absolute crap which Im going 2 post here for u guys 2 endure...I cant believe myself! plz somebody hit me nd tell me 2 study!
THE END
He opened the door to his luxurious flat and switched on the lights. His dark hair was windswept from the fast drive and he carried a large square envelope in his hands, which bore the logo of a hospital. He placed the keys and the envelope on the table and sat down on the comfortable armchair in the living room decorated by his ex- wife. He always felt that the furnishings were a bit too lavish for his taste but all the same never felt a need to change them. He stared at the bare ceiling, his mind and heart both blank. He remained sitting there for a long time, contemplating before pulling out his cell phone and dialing her number. It rang twice before she picked it up.

"Are you alright?" her voice was sweet even when heard through the phone.

"Yes, I think so." He replied, smiling to himself.

"Where are you, at your flat?" she asked. He heard heels click swiftly and a faint beep as the elevator button was pressed.

"Yes." he replied. She disconnected the call and he waited for her to come. It took around half an hour to reach his place from hers but knowing her, it might even take less than 20 minutes. The memories of their past came flooding back to him as he stared at the ceiling, thinking. They worked in the same office, he the boss and she his immediate junior. They had spent endless nights together with no body for company except coffee mugs, laptops and files. They shared the common problem of insomnia and were termed as uncaring workaholics by their respective families. He did not know when they progressed from being acquaintances to being friends or how their conversations edged away from bar charts and annual reports to politics, films, jokes and philosophy. He opened up to her, indirectly but the understanding in her eyes clearly said that she was not to be fooled. He had never imagined that he would find an equal in a girl younger to him by about 10 years. He found unordered coffee and sandwiches on his desk when he was undergoing through divorce proceedings. She had turned up with movie tickets for the latest thriller on the day his wife remarried. He could not resist himself, flowing smoothly, allowing her to take the lead.

One night he was working late in the office and she was sitting across from him, helping him. His eyes fell on the clock that displayed 12 a.m. in boldly and then at her. Closing his file, he had asked her casually, "Sometimes the way you behave, I feel that you love me."

She looked directly into his eyes and replied, "Is it that obvious?"

He had intended it as a half joke and his face paled. She ignored his reaction and packed up his things for him. Holding out his bag, she said, "Don't think too much upon it, I don't want anything from you. Everything is great the way it is. Have a goodnight. I will text when I reach home."

She had walked out leaving him dazed. After that day, they never mentioned the night or the confession but a strange mutual liking intensified between them. And he knew that she was maybe the only person in the whole world who cared. And this was the sole reason why he called her up tonight. He heard the door open and looked at it. She stood in the doorway looking scared for the first time. She stepped in and the door swung shut behind her. He continued to survey her slender form as she walked to him and knelt beside him, placing a hand on his knee. Her large eyes were terrified.

"What happened?" he asked her grinning.

"You know that, not me."

"Well'"he couldn't continue as he knew it would break her apart.

She sensed it and looked around for proof and found it- the envelope containing his medical reports. She picked it up and opened it, going through the contents, while he gazed at her lovely face, taking in the minor changes in her expressions, how her brows came together and her lips quivered. He wasn't feeling sad or scared. Just concerned for her. Placing the papers back on the table she took a deep breath and said, "You can't leave like that."

"That's why I thought I should tell you." He placed his hand on her warm cheek. It was for the first time he had touched her like that. She shivered and embraced him. He embraced her back.

"I won't let you die." She whispered in his ear.

"I wish to" he said stroking her hair. "I had my share of happiness tonight. I don't think I deserve to live to enjoy anymore."

End Sur
Edited by Sur_Singhania - 15 years ago
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Posted: 15 years ago
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*smack* *smack* *smack*......akkal thikane pe ayi ya aur lagau??? 4 din baad exam hai....and madam apko kuch nahi pata.....well....ye quite common hai....lekin inn sabke bawjud nayi story likhna?? This was really insane Sur!!! But I wont say its abnormal....coz main bhi aisa kar chuki hu....😆😆....lekin iska anjaam kuch zyada achha nahi tha....samjhi???🤢🤢 Isiliye madam....agar baad me pachtana nahi hai to abhi jake padhayi shuru karo....turant!!!

Phew!! Abhi main iss 'The End' pe ati hu....I am now in short of words....seriously Sur!! I cud feel the emotions passing by too well.....and I cud feel the agony n helplessness as well......I so wished to wipe away the truth.....I so wished to knw that it was all fake.....but then nothing was!!! It was all true n it had to end!!!

Gosh Sur....even this tym I was engrossed....but at the same tym....I had this strange serene feeling.....donno wat was that or even why was that.....but it was just there....and it felt so lovely!!!

I liked a dialogue....batao kaunsa??? Hehe....quite obvious....I loved him saying...."The way u behave I sumtyms feel that u love me"....and then her saying "Is it that obvious?".....it was soooo cute!!! And even in the tension....even in the scary feeling of losing....I cud feel the sweetness of their relationship.....it was just awesum!!!

And abt Forgiven.....well when I was replying to that....I was half not in my senses....seriously....lolz....and there by her forgiveness I had partially meant the fact that she didnt do anything against his betrayal.....I cud not actually put down wat I wanted to say....but u definitely did it for me....I was trying to say that....she chose the easiest or perhaps the most convenient way....as u said.😊

Anyways.....now u stop ur gr8 karigari for sumtym....keep it on hold....rock the xams....and then cum bak wid these brilliant writings!!! Till then....I so dont want to read anything from u (its really hard to say yaar🤢)......

Now bye....take care....and do well in the xams....

Luv,
Sumi.😛
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Posted: 15 years ago
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Originally posted by: Sur_Singhania

.... And Im glued 2 my computer, writing absolute crap which Im going 2 post here for u guys 2 endure...

Where's the crap, Sur? When I read what you wrote, I was so looking forward to reading crap, and all I found was a brilliant, extremely moving and evocative piece of writing!!
How disappointing! 😆
Aww, I'm so sad it's the end. You must write more (after your exams)!! But I must say, it's a beautiful ending. I loved it!! Great, great work! Well done!! 👏 👏 👏
All the best for your exams! I'm sure you'll rock ⭐️
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Hiii sur....
how r u?
I amso sorry dear ....maine is baar bahut late hun apni comment dene main
For the part :forgiven
its an awesome story 👏 👏 👏 👏n u have written her emotions so beautifully
i really hate n i will never forgive such men who cheats their wifes...but she forgived that man for his temptations...n that man he never tried to understand his wife...n he is content of having more than one woman in his life...
I liked it when she said that he took it as an improved realtion ship n she took it an nonexistent one
good work sur 👏 👏 👏
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Another fabulous story from u sur 👏 👏 👏 👏....loved this one also
Their bond their understnading ..how their relationship progressed from acquaintence to being friends ....n the way she took care of him when he was going through the bad phase in his life...every thing u descibed so beautifully
i really liked it when she said that dont think too much about it..every thing is great the way it is..n i dont want any thing from u
he knows that he is going to die .. he is not scared about that but he is concerned for her..n her saying i wont let u die ..u have written that last scene so nicely 👏 👏 👏 👏
great work sur n u r thinking its a crap .....how can u say that these wonderful stories r crap...u know how much i love to read these os...n sach kahun to i am waiting to read some more....so dont stop writting ..but not now..after your exams finished
byee
take care n do well in the exams
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Posted: 15 years ago
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Originally posted by: sumaiya wahid

*smack* *smack* *smack*......akkal thikane pe ayi ya aur lagau??? hehe us time a gai thi...lekin ab maths ka paper that...aur mera sir dard ho raha tha-thats why mene time waste kia 4 din baad exam hai....and madam apko kuch nahi pata.....well....ye quite common hai....lekin inn sabke bawjud nayi story likhna?? This was really insane Sur!!! i know yaar...par mera dimag kharab hai! u know that! But I wont say its abnormal....coz main bhi aisa kar chuki hu....😆😆.... whoa! lekin iska anjaam kuch zyada achha nahi tha....samjhi???🤢🤢 anjam bahut bura hua- 20 no. ka blank chod ayi🤢 Isiliye madam....agar baad me pachtana nahi hai to abhi jake padhayi shuru karo....turant!!! ok mam!

Phew!! Abhi main iss 'The End' pe ati hu....I am now in short of words....seriously Sur!! I cud feel the emotions passing by too well.....and I cud feel the agony n helplessness as well......I so wished to wipe away the truth.....I so wished to knw that it was all fake.....but then nothing was!!! It was all true n it had to end!!! yeah...a bit depressing isnt it? u wud come up the same kind of stuff if u have ur xams😆

Gosh Sur....even this tym I was engrossed....but at the same tym....I had this strange serene feeling.....donno wat was that or even why was that.....but it was just there....and it felt so lovely!!! im glad u liked it dear!

I liked a dialogue....batao kaunsa??? Hehe....quite obvious....I loved him saying...."The way u behave I sumtyms feel that u love me"....and then her saying "Is it that obvious?".....it was soooo cute!!! And even in the tension....even in the scary feeling of losing....I cud feel the sweetness of their relationship.....it was just awesum!!! wen u have someone so special, i dont think anything can scare u!

And abt Forgiven.....well when I was replying to that....I was half not in my senses....seriously....lolz....and there by her forgiveness I had partially meant the fact that she didnt do anything against his betrayal.....I cud not actually put down wat I wanted to say....but u definitely did it for me....I was trying to say that....she chose the easiest or perhaps the most convenient way....as u said.😊 i know that yaar...u see, once a person loses a place in ur heart, u dont care abt it

Anyways.....now u stop ur gr8 karigari for sumtym....keep it on hold....rock the xams....and then cum bak wid these brilliant writings!!! Till then....I so dont want to read anything from u (its really hard to say yaar🤢)...... hehe dekho maths k paper k 1 din pehle ye post kia! but i didnt write anuthing after that for atleast a week!

Now bye....take care....and do well in the xams.... thanku!

Luv,
Sumi.😛

Edited by Sur_Singhania - 15 years ago
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Originally posted by: _.serendipity._

Where's the crap, Sur?you missed it? too bad!!! When I read what you wrote, I was so looking forward to reading crap, and all I found was a brilliant, extremely moving and evocative piece of writing!!
How disappointing! 😆 really...hey thanks a lot for the compliment dear!im sooo happy u liked it!
Aww, I'm so sad it's the end. You must write more (after your exams)!! But I must say, it's a beautiful ending. I loved it!! Great, great work! Well done!! 👏 👏 👏 hehe cudnt resist again...was losing my head
All the best for your exams! I'm sure you'll rock ⭐️ thanks alot dear!

reserved
Edited by Sur_Singhania - 15 years ago
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Originally posted by: princessyogitha

Hiii sur.... hi Yogitha!!!

how r u? xams k baad bi zinda hu, its feat 2 achieve!
I amso sorry dear ....maine is baar bahut late hun apni comment dene main no problem dear, jab time mile tab comment karo!
For the part :forgiven
its an awesome story 👏 👏 👏 👏n u have written her emotions so beautifully im glad u liked it
i really hate n i will never forgive such men who cheats their wifes...but she forgived that man for his temptations...n that man he never tried to understand his wife...n he is content of having more than one woman in his life... even i do...men think women are 2 b used nd thrown away! nd this one is an idiot.
I liked it when she said that he took it as an improved realtion ship n she took it an nonexistent one lolz, thanks
good work sur 👏 👏 👏 thanku for commenting!!!

Edited by Sur_Singhania - 15 years ago
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Originally posted by: princessyogitha

Another fabulous story from u sur 👏 👏 👏 👏....loved this one also thanku dear..personally even i like this one

Their bond their understnading ..how their relationship progressed from acquaintence to being friends ....n the way she took care of him when he was going through the bad phase in his life...every thing u descibed so beautifully we dont even realise wen people become important in our life....
i really liked it when she said that dont think too much about it..every thing is great the way it is..n i dont want any thing from u well, true love has no expectations u see
he knows that he is going to die .. he is not scared about that but he is concerned for her..n her saying i wont let u die ..u have written that last scene so nicely 👏 👏 👏 👏he understands wat it means 2 her...and thnx for the compliment again!
great work sur n u r thinking its a crap .....how can u say that these wonderful stories r crap...u know how much i love to read these os...n sach kahun to i am waiting to read some more....so dont stop writting ..but not now..after your exams finished well, the condition in which i wrote it was pretty bad. thanx alot for liking it!
byee
take care n do well in the exams thanx!!!

resrved
Edited by Sur_Singhania - 15 years ago
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Footprints

I walk on the beach, my feet leaving imprints in the wet sand. Waves lash against my soles, washing the sand from beneath them and then replacing it. I always enjoyed walking here feeling the waves hit me. Sometimes I am feeling too daring I wade in knee length water, testing my guts. The waves were strangely calm today, moving to and fro lazily instead of lashing with vigor. This was another reason why I love this place. The waves constantly matched my mood. When I am sad and troubled, they reflect my anxiety by being furious and threatening, as though my inner turmoil had materialized and dancing in front of me. When I am happy, they dance to my heartbeats, celebrating alongside. I can talk to the ocean forever, receiving silent replies and acknowledgement. This could be called as first symptoms of madness, talking to water, but I resist. The changing shades of the sea- deep blue, green and the strange mixture of red, violet and orange, I could never define, beckon me towards itself.

But the main reason why I fell in love with this particular stretch of coast is you. From all the famous sea shores I have seen in my career of navy, this small, ordinary one is the most special. The magical moments when you held my hand as we walked along the shore seem even more real when I come here. I agree that having you in my life, even though for a few months in my life was a pure stroke of luck. I never thought I would have ever progressed on from watching you discreetly sitting in the high school canteen. You sat at your favorite seat, just next to window, and I used to occupy the one near the door, exactly diagonal. You were quite popular, I later realized but never fell into the category of Casanovas, no matter how many girls tried to woo you. I can't remember exactly how we became friends but I think it had something to do with a field trip. We had never exchanged spoken commitments but your gestures slowly graduated from being brotherly and friendly to romantic. I went along with everything you offered, without suspecting even once how all those things were my favorites. When we used to walk across this beach, I would keep staring at our interlocked hands, as you recited poems based on the ocean. Your right hand had a small vertical mark I was rather fond of. Your voice deep and rhythmic combined seamlessly with the sound of waves and could beat any kind of music. I used to make it a point to walk a few feet away from the waves then, because I did not like to see the waves wash off our footprints. You found this rather amusing and when you asked me why, my answer was, "Because if I ever lose you, I will come here and follow these footsteps and they will lead me to you." You gladly distanced from the waves.

Many years have passed since that little conversation. We had parted ways after a year or so when high school ended. It did not hurt much because I think we both knew that we would meet again one day. I have been into many relationships since then, all of them intended to last forever. I don't know where you are but a strange nostalgia overpowers me whenever I visit this city. I never bothered to go to my old home, or school. This small stretch of secluded beach held magnetic attractions for me. I try to find your footsteps, but fail. Maybe I wasn't careful enough and the waves did wash them off' I raise my eyes from the sand and look up- to see you standing a few feet away from me, smiling. Spectacles look good on you. My lips form a fascinated smile as you move towards me and hold out your hand. I notice the same mark on your hand. I extend my hand to touch yours and my sudden suspicion of seeing hallucinations fade away. You pull me to your side and we start walking. You look puzzled as I wade into the water fearlessly. I answer you shifting closer, "I am not going to lose you now'" your smile widens.

Edited by Sur_Singhania - 15 years ago

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