Chance | Udariyaan OS - Page 2

This was beautiful! I mean I could not even pause for a second, from start to finish it was a delight read. Please write more stories and more often!! It is the sole remedy to the headache I get from the current track :)

Originally posted by: mistofshadows

Yah..Yah....Na Na Na Naaananaa!!!

I am literally singing you know 😬😬😬

I am sooooo happy that you wrote this. Like the best thing before going off to sleep.

Fateh is a spineless idiot here. He managed to mess everything up even when he knew somewhere that Tejo was important for him. The pathetic thing is that when he was intimate with Jasso, it was not even love. And he expected her to hide their physical relationship from everyone 😒

Tejo was in a pitiful place. Trust me, I really get it why she would need therapy. Her husband, sister and her family did a number on her. The moment she dropped her surnames, it was like she had finally become free. I am glad at Least Rupi supported her and thank God that family didn't try to stop her from leaving.

Shikar is a beautiful addition. He is the peak in Tejo's life...the best peak. He brought a new life to her fading existence and renewed her Vitaliy. He blew life to Tejo and she bloomed back. This is what a soulmate is supposed to be ❤️

And their proposal 😂

That guy is hilarious though. He reminds me of Rudra from Ishqbaaz. I love the cleaning supply bit 😂😂😂

Fateh's pov was a brilliant edition. You are a good writer....you understand and emphatize with your readers...you understood how we would feel without that perspective. So thank you for adding it.

I loved how well fleshed it was. I felt for Tejo when she broke....a poor naive soul. And her realisation of Jasmine's vindictiveness was a treat.

Also a request. Can you do a follow-up where Shikhar Tejo visit Moga? I have this itch to see their happiness being flaunted in front of all and best of all NimPreet dealing with Jasmine 😈

Also how exactly JasFa deal with each other......

Just a request 😬😬😬

- Niki

PS: Keep writing more ❤️❤️❤️

@bold: I'm so glad you enjoyed the story and Shikhar's character. I was hesitating before adding his character since I thought people would enjoy Fatejo more but turns out I was wrong 😃 I didn't know he resembled Rudra lol. When I made him I just wanted him to seem similar yet opposite to Fateh's character, the comedy was just to dissolve some of the angst (Yes I need more practice to be a full-fledged angst writer 😆)

@italics: Geez Niki, thanks for the praise ☺️ I'm happy that you think it was well-fleshed because I constantly though it was still lacking in some parts, like when I was writing Fateh's character I felt so... weird lol. I wanted to show him as a confused, lost soul but ended up getting confused myself. 😂 I think I would've written it better had I made this into a fic or TS rather than just an OS.

@underlined: Well, it'll surely be a treat that scenario 😆 I'll see if I can write more on this piece and if I do feel inspired, then I'll convert this into a TS or fic. Thanks for taking the time to review this , means alot ❤️

Originally posted by: sheet_leher

Loved this ❤️❤️

I'm so glad Tejo moved away from all the toxicity and found some happiness for herself. No matter how much I love #FaTejo, noone deserves to have their feelings played with. And, after what Fateh did, he deserved everything.

Tejo was his comfort zone...and he thought he could toy with Jasmine and play the same games and leave her. Smh. Unnecessary complications

Loved Tejo and Shikhar ❤️. Proud of her success... If only ITV was this progressive...sigh

Thank you so much for reading the story and your feedback, I'm happy you enjoyed it and Shikhar as well😳

If itv was progressive, we really wouldn't be needing such fics to calm ourselves 😆

Originally posted by: Bluekohl

🥂🥂🥂🥂💃🏽💃🏽💃🏽💃🏽💃🏽 oooh lalala lala.

Omg! You're just the most amazing writer because when you write characters, they're not doing something outlandish. I can see them doing it for real.

Things I absolutely loved.

1. No nonsense tejo

2. Tejo actually in love with someone who cherishes her

3. Fateh angst. This is what you deserve you 🤬🤬🤬🤬🤬

And the shikhar tejo flirting scenes were😘

@bold: Thank you so much for reading the story and these cute compliments! ☺️

No. 1 and 2, that's something I want to see on the show as well, Tejo deserves the world 😆

As for no. 3, that's something I was apprehensive about. I thought most people wouldn't like me portraying Fateh like that but I'm glad it still worked out. 😃

Thank you for liking Shikaar! His pride has been inflated 😆

Originally posted by: Shraddha6789

Awesome, atta girl way to go. I really genueinly enjoyed it. I too like Niki want shikar and Tejo to come to moga and watch Jasmin, Nimmo and gurpreet burn with fury. Gosh that would be a sight to witness. Recorded and stored in a museum . My my I can't explain u the inert joy, the adernaline rush I had reading how fateh loses Tejo. I was like down u go filthy little cockroach. Unworthy for even a insect repellent to kill u. May u rot till ur bones decay. And ur flesh burns in the scorching heat. May ur soul wither and wonder unsatiated with having lost a love before it was cherished. Hahaha I just love it gosh I hateeeeeee multipled into zillion fateh to the core. Just the thought of him in pain gives me immense pleasure.

Haha man you really hate Fateh don't you? 😆

Well I'm happy that you liked the story and Fateh's misery, this was a torture fest for Fateh Huh 😃

Originally posted by: Niroo

Amazing! But I really hope they don’t stoop so low in the show. I would think that when he sees Jasmin he thinks of all the things that she had said at the alter, but no this boy is obsessed.

Thank you for writing such a story. Please continue to write more stories.

Niroo

Thanks for reading Niroo!

Yes we all are desperately hoping that the inevitable hurt he'll cause Tejo doesn't end up being from cheating or something like that. Let's hope for the best!😁😁

Wish my hatred towards him can be explained in words. Just the thought of him makes me want to puke. But it's also that he is the ML and no matter what she is going to endup with that cow poop faced, one horned donkey brained useless uncouth. Wish I could whisk her off and set her up with a man worthy of her love not that fateh, it's an irony that his names fateh Cauz he's nothing but a failure. An emotional wreck.

Originally posted by: hapc

Fateh🤢🤢

He slept with Chameli! If this happens on the show, permanent goodbye. He got married to Jasmine and then has the audacity to go back to Tejo🤡 Glad that Tejo moved on with someone amazing and he got stuck with Chameli for a wife. I’m also happy that NimPreet and Amrik have to deal with Chameli and vice versa.

Tejo and Shikhar Hope that Tejo gets someone as amazing as him unlike Mr. I can’t move on but I’ll try to use you to move on and hurt my ex.

IKR? I ended up making his character as pathetic as I could, so that even if he does end up pulling some sh*t on the show we'll think at least he's not bad as the Fateh in this fic 😆 (I hope you're reading this makers!)

Yup, can't say Fateh is not in the wrong right now but if he becomes even worse then we'll be finding some other men for Tejo!! 😃

Thanks for reading and the feedback ❤️

Originally posted by: Show86

What a beautiful piece of work. You are a fantastic writer !!! Absolutely love the storyline here.

Pls do continue. Would love to know more about Tejo Shikhar.

Thank you for reading and the compliments ❤️

I'll see if I'll be writing more about TejShi ship, it'll depend on how much Fateh pisses me off 😆

Originally posted by: Rexana19

What a beautiful fantastic story!! Fatejo gai tei lene.

I want more of Shikhar & Tejo....

Please write more...

Thanks for reading buddy!

Lol Fatejo gai tel lene 😆

I'm glad you enjoyed Shikhar and Tejo, I'll see if I'll be writing more of them😉