Wished y where part of the show, his truth and her support. đđŒ
Loved the sweet kissing from her.
Wished y where part of the show, his truth and her support. đđŒ
Loved the sweet kissing from her.
Comments on 4. JAANE TU MERA KYA HAI:
I like the idea that Pallavi finds Raghav's secret room and he opens up to her. However, the way this story flowed, it didn't affect me as it should have. You left out Raghav's narration of how his NÄnna (in Telugu, it's not AppÄ) and Arjun were killed. That should have been the emotional heart of the story. I want to know in detail what Raghav cried about and how Pallavi reacted! Without it, I found the story too long anyway, and I'll suggest how it could flow better.
You could have cut almost anything else: (1) whether the Deshmukhs are at home and Manasi's wedding is on schedule makes no difference to the events of your story; (2) the Kirti-Pallavi and Kirti-Raghav dialogues could be much shorter; (3) Naidu telling Pallavi about the childhood home detracts from Pallavi walking into the room and realizing what it is; (4) the phone call with Farhad reveals Raghav's character, but it's not essential to the story, as you didn't make it clear that Raghav's concern for AmmÄ« parallels his yearning for AmmÄ.
So, your story could have started with Pallavi calling Raghav to pick up his order because Kirti is in front of her. Kirti could question Raghav's motive for the order and tell him not to torment Pallavi, and after Raghav leaves, Pallavi could go to the mansion, find the door ajar, walk in and hear glass breaking in the secret room ...
Your version of Kirti speaks dismissively of Raghav: he'll always be wrong, he deserves rudeness, he's no one to her. Kirti on the show was more conflicted; she didn't say any of what Jaya said about Raghav; Kirti simply wanted to respect her AmmÄ and not depend on Raghav for money, bodyguard, arranged marriage etc. It's dramatic for Kirti to express her own pain and why she holds Raghav responsible (and I wrote a scene in which I tried to achieve that); but Kirti shouldn't come across as unjustified or mean.
Raghav in your story asks Pallavi if she thinks it was his fault, whereas on the show Raghav expected Pallavi to hate him after hearing that Raghav's father and brother died because Raghav knew about a crime, and Raghav chose to side with the criminal instead of the victims. When Raghav found out that Krishna Rao was going to run away with the villagers' money, Raghav agreed to keep quiet because Krishna Rao paid him extra. Thus, Raghav became an accessory. Raghav knew that the villagers had trusted him because of his father's honest reputation, but Raghav was so desperate to pay for his father's medical treatment and his mother's dance academy, he thought it would be better to live in disgrace, spending the villagers' stolen money in front of them. Raghav was young and didn't think ahead to what can happen when cheated people get angry. Since you don't narrate the events in your story and Pallavi suggests that Jaya needs to listen to Raghav's point of view, the reader may get the impression that Raghav was innocent.
Raghav's line "Jaba saba áčhÄ«ka honÄ hogÄ nÄ taba ho jÄyegÄ" seems too optimistic for someone who is living with guilt. Anyway, I liked the tender moments and the flirting at the end.
I am loving their interactions in your OSs! It's the way they should've gotten to know one another in the show. Maybe next you can have Pallavi discuss her past to Raghav if you do a continuation..?
Hi, I like the flow n content of your story no.4 as it is. I don't think there is any need to cut or add anything to it đ
You can carry on the story and make it into an ff. That would be nice đ
As far as I can remember n understood, Raghav was not an accomplice of Krishna Rao in his crime. Raghav was duped by him as well. He didn't know that Krishna Rao was going to run away with the money.
5. KUCH TOH HAI TERE MERE DARMIYAN
I always wanted some guy to propose marriage to Pallavi during Mansi's wedding functions so that we could get Raghav's reaction. But that never happened. So here's my little attempt to showcase that. Hope you like it.
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It was Mansiâs engagement. Everyone was busy in the preparation of the ceremony.
Pallavi was getting ready in her room. She had chosen a simple light pink saree. Aai came in & told her to wear something heavy as this saree was too plain. After failed attempts to change Aaiâs mind, she had to agree to wear something different. She wore a golden colour lehenga blouse with golden dupatta. She let her hair open. Aai also made her wear some jewellery [look is same as the show].
Here, Raghav Rao had come at the Deshmukhs following Akash, the guy he saw with Keerti. He was very curious to know about him & his connection with his sister. He entered & saw the whole house decorated so beautifully. He saw Akash standing in the corner.
Raghav was about to approach him when his eyes landed on Pallavi who was descending the stairs. She was looking extremely gorgeous. Her outfit complemented her perfectly. But she was someone who could look beautiful even in the hideous clothes. He just couldnât take his eyes off from her. He stood there rooted at his spot until someone cleared their throat. It was Farhad.
âMuh toh band karo Annaâ Farhad said smirking. Raghav felt slightly embarrased.
âTu zyada mat bol Farhadâ
âMain kya bola An-â
âEkdum chupâ
He glanced at Pallavi for once & started going towards Akash but he wasnât there. He told Farhad to look for him.
âKaha chala gaya yeh tubelight?â
Sulochana Kaku & Amruta saw Raghav, âRaghav Rao? Humare ghar mein? Upar waale ka chamatkar hai. Meri ek beti ki engagement hai aur dusri ke liye ladka haazir. Par yeh yaha kyu aaya hai?â
âMom, chodo na humein usse kya. Humein bas yeh dekhna hai ki yeh har function mein aaye taaki main isse acche se friendship kar saku aur yeh mujhse pat jaayeâ Amruta said.
âUski chinta tum mat karo. Main usko invite karti huâ Kaku said & went towards him.
âRaghav. Aap yaha?â
âTumko kuch problem hai?â He said glaring at her.
âNahi nahi bilkul nahi. Meri beti ki engagement hai aaj. Toh main chahti hu ki aap pura function attend karke jaaye aur aage ke saare functions ke liye bhi aap aayiye zaroorâ
He just nodded at her. Kaka called her so she went to him.
âKaisa pagal log hai iss Saree Ka Dukaan ka family meinâ He muttered to himself.
Keerti was passing from there when she saw Raghav, âYeh yaha kya raha hai?â
She came towards him, âTum yaha kya kar rahe ho?â
âKeerti, woh ladka kaun hai?â
âKaunsa ladka?â
âJo tere saath thaâ
âTumhe usse kya matlab?â
âKeerti, mereko seedha seedha batao woh ladka kaun tha?â
âNahi bataungi, jo chahe kar loâ She said fuming, âAur please Raghav mujhse dur raho aur meri life mein interfere karna band karo. Ardhamainda?â She went from there in anger.
Meanwhile, Pallaviâs eyes landed on Raghav when she was going to the kitchen, âRaghav?â She whispered.
She went to him, âTum-â
âHello Saree Ka Dukaanâ He interrupted her.
âTum yaha bhi aagaye mujhe pareshaan karneâ
âOh, Saree Ka Dukaan, tum itna important nahi hai mere liye ki main har time tumko pareshaan karne ka socheâ
âAccha? Toh mere ghar mein tumhaara kya kaam hai? Invited toh tum ho nahiâ
âOh hello, main uninvited nahi hai samjha? Tumhara woh Bindi Waala Aunty mereko invite kiya haiâ
âKya? Sulochana Kakuâ She muttered to herself.
âWoh jo bhi ho, tum jao yaha se abhiâ She didnât want Raghav to make any scene at the function.
âMain nahi jayega. Pura function ko rukega main. Aur saara functions bhi attend karega main, tumko jo karna hai tum karloâ He said giving her a look.
âRaghav, tum-â She was interrupted by Aai who came to call her. She didnât notice Raghav.
âPalluâ Pallavi looked at her, âTu zara mere saath chal, kisise milana hai tujheâ Saying this, she dragged Pallavi with her. Pallavi turned & glared at Raghav.
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Aai took Pallavi to introduce her to a family, âPallu, inse mil. Yeh Shekhar ji hai, tere Baba ke dost aur yeh unki patni hai Malini jiâ
âNamasteâ Pallavi folded both her hands to greet them & they also reciprocated.
âPallu, inhone apne bete Dheeraj ke liye tumhaara haath manga haiâ Aai said excitedly.
âKya?â Pallavi was shocked.
âHa. Hamare bete ke liye tum humein boht pasand ho. Hum tumhaare widhwa hone ke baare mein sab jaante hai aur humein koi problem nahi haiâ Malini told her.
Pallavi didnât know what to say. She was not ready to marry again. Itâs not like she loved Mandaar infact she never got the time to fall in love with him. She being in Kolhapur & him in Hyderabad, they never got to meet each other often. They were kind of in a long distance relationship. After his death, she had decided that marriage is something which is not for her. And that sheâll never marry again. But today, Aai dropped a bomb on her.
âDheeraj kuch der mein aa jaayegaâ Malini said & Sharda smiled at her.
âExcuse meâ Pallavi said & dragged Aai to the side.
âAai yeh sab kya hai? Aur aapne mujhe pehle bataya kyu nahi? Yeh rishta-â
âDekh Pallu, yeh log boht acche hai. Tujhe tere sach ke saath apna rahe hai. Toh tujhe kya problem hai?â
âAai, par mujhe dobara shaadi nahi karni. Maine pehle bhi bola tha aapkoâ
âBas boht ho gaya, Pallu. Acche rishte baar baar nahi milte. Isliye aaj tu Dheeraj se mil aur iss rishte ke liye haa karde. Samajhla?â Aai said firmly.
âAai, par-â Pallu tried making her understand but Aai left.
All this was witnessed by Raghav. Sharda introducing Pallavi to some guests, them talking something, Pallaviâs shocked reaction, Pallavi dragging Sharda aside, trying to explain something & Sharda leaving midway.
âYeh Saree Ka Dukaan itna tension mein kayko hai?â He muttered to himself.
âAnna, yeh raha woh ladkaâ Farhad brought a scared Aakash to Raghav.
They went to a side where no one was there.
âAyy Tubelight, tu mera behen Keerti ke saath kya kar raha hai?â Raghav asked him holding his collar.
âDekhiye, main usse aaj hi mila hu. Mujhe pata nahi woh aapki behen hai. Main usse theek se jaanta tak nahi huâ Aakash said being scared.
âToh tu yaha kya kar raha hai? Uska peecha kar raha hai?â
âNahi, main peecha nahi kar raha. Aaj ke functions ke liye saari lighting maine ki hai. Meri behen aur Pallavi Didi school friends hai, toh isliye mujhe Pallavi Didi ne function keliye invite kiya. Aur kuch nahiâ
âTu sach bol raha hai?â Raghav asked him to which he nodded.
âLekin Keerti se dur hai. Mujhe tu uske aas pass bhi nahi dikhna chahiye. Samjha?â
âJiâ Raghav signalled him to go.
âAnna, aapne usko aise hi dara diya. Abhi woh aapke samne kabhi nahi aayegaâ Farhad said to Raghav.
âNa aaye toh hi accha haiâ
âHa. Jis kaam ke liye aaye the woh toh ho gaya. Abhi chale yaha se Anna?â
âItna jaldi kya hai Farhad. Abhi function mein aaye hai toh pura dekhke chalte haiâ Saying this, Raghav started looking around for his Saree Ka Dukaan when his eyes landed on a lost Pallavi standing alone in the corner & thought, âIsko kya hua?â Farhad saw him looking at Pallavi.
âAnna, aapko function dekhna hai ya kisi aur ko?â He asked smirking.
âYeh Saree Ka Dukaan aisa kyu-â Raghav stopped midway realizing what he was saying. Farhad smirked at that.
âTu zara chup rahega?â Raghav said giving an angry look to Farhad.
âMaine kya kaha Anna?â He said being innocent.
âTu jaa Keerti pe nazar rakh, jaaâ Raghav pushed Farhad & started walking towards Pallavi.
Pallavi was lost in her own world. The news Aai gave her shocked her. She was no more interested in the ongoing ceremony. Thatâs why she went & stood in one corner to avoid talking to anyone.
âTum yaha mujhse chupke baitha hai Saree Ka Dukaan?â
She glanced at him & looked away.
âKya ho gaya? Aaj bak bak train chup kaisa hai?â Raghav said sarcastically.
âRaghav, tum agar mujhe pareshaan karne yaha aaye ho toh please jao yaha se. Mujhe koi baat nahi karniâ Pallavi said not looking at him.
âAisa kaisa baat nahi karna tumko mujhse. Jab mereko baat nahi karna hota, tab bhi tum mujhko kitna kuch suna ke jaata hai. Toh aaj tumko baat nahi karna phir toh main tumse double baat karega. Main-â
âRaghavâ She looked at him, âPleaseâ Thatâs when Raghav saw tears in her eyes & he realized something huge has happened. He came closer.
âKya hua Saree Ka Dukaan? Tum ro kayko raha hai?â He asked being genuinely concerned about her.
âKuch nahiâ She said wiping her tears.
âBina baath rone waala logo mein se tum nahi hai. Zaroor kuch toh hua haiâ
âRagha-â Pallavi saw Aai looking around everywhere & she realized Aai must be looking for her. Pallavi wiped her tears properly & looked at the mirror on the wall to make herself presentable. He took a deep breath & went towards Aai leaving Raghav standing alone over there, âPata lagana padega isko kya hua haiâ
Pallavi went towards Sharda, âAccha kiya Pallu, tu aagayi. Chal mere saathâ Sharda held her hand & took her to meet someone.
âInse mil. Yeh Dheeraj hai, Shekhar ji aur Malini ji ke beteâ Pallavi realized that this is the guy her Aai wants her to get married to.
âHi Pallaviâ Dheeraj greeted her.
âHelloâ
âTum dono baatein karo hum chalte haiâ Sharda said & they left leaving the two alone.
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Raghav saw Pallavi with a guy. The guy was continuously talking to her but she wasnât reacting. Raghav can clearly see on her face that she was not interested, âYeh ladka kaun hai?â
Suddenly, Dheeraj got a call, so he excused himself & went outside to attend it. Seeing this as a great opportunity, Pallavi decided to escape to her room. When she turned to go, Raghav saw that one of her blouse buttons was unhooked, âYeh Saree Ka Dukaan bhi naâ He went upstairs towards her room.
Pallavi came running to her room & closed the doors not locked though. She came to her dresser & leaned against it. She had tears in her eyes. She was thinking something when someone opened the door.
âRaghav? Tum yaha? Aur yeh kya kar rahe ho?â She said angrily looking at him. He locked the door & stood infront of her.
âTum-â She started talking but he interrupted.
âTum phirse ro raha hai?â He asked noticing her moist eyes.
âNahi, main nahi to rahiâ She wiped her tears.
âAccha, toh yeh kya hai? Nal laga hai kya aankhon mein?â
âRaghav, tum yaha kya kar rahe ho? Yeh mera room hai. Agar tumhe yaha kisi ne dekh liya na toh boht bada tamasha ho jaayega. Tum jao yaha se pleaseâ She said changing the topic.
âMereko yaha aate koi nahi dekha. Aur tum topic mat badlo. Tum mereko batao tum ro kyu raha hai?â Raghav remembered her talking to that guy downstairs, âWoh ladka jisse tum baat kar raha tha, woh kuch bola kya tumko?â
âTum zara shaant rahoge please. Kitne sawaal puchte ho tum?â Pallavi said a bit loud, âMujhse kisine kuch nahi kaha. Kuch yaad aaya wohi soch ke rona aaya. Bas itna hi. Samjhe? Aur waise bhi meri life hai, main dekh lungi jo bhi hoga. Tumhe interfere karne ki zaroorat nahi haiâ
âTumko toh theek se jhoot bolna bhi nahi aata, Saree Ka Dukaanâ He smirked at her. She was shocked that he caught her lies.
âAgar tum batana nahi chahta, toh main tumko force nahi karegaâ Pallavi was relieved that he wonât pester her to say the truth.
âAb tum jao yaha seâ She just wanted him to leave her room before anyone sees him.
âEk kaam hai, uske baad jaayega mainâ
âKya?â She said getting confused. He started coming towards her & she went backwards.
âRa...Raghav...Tum kya kar...rahe...ho?â Pallavi stammered. He leaned forward & she closed her eyes tightly making him chuckle inwardly. He wrapped his arms around her waist & she clutched her lehenga tightly. His face was in the crook of her neck. His beard was tickling her. He gently hooked her blouse & caressed her back. The feel of his rough & cold fingers on her back sent shivers down her spine. She had goosebumps all over her body & he could feel them. He was happy to know that he had the same effect on her which she had on him. This was the first ever time she was in such close proximity with a guy. And not some regular guy. It was Raghav Rao, the Don of Hyderabad. They were in such a position that it would have looked like they are hugging each other if seen by a third person.
Raghav moved back slowly & her eyes were still closed. His one hand was still on her bare waist. There were still some tear marks on her face. He gently wiped the tears only for her to open her eyes. She looked straight into his eyes & they had an eye lock. She was still dazed by his touch.
âMereko aisa mat dekh Saree Ka Dukaan. Kahin tumko merese pyaar na ho jaayeâ He joked & she came out of her reverie. She pushed him & stood straight.
âPyaar? Aur tumse? Kabhi nahi Raghav Rao?â
He smirked at her, âDekh lenge Saree Ka Dukaanâ He winked & came out of the room. He saw himself in the mirror on the wall & smiled.
When he was descending the stairs, he heard Vijay asking Sharda.
âPallavi ne haa bola iss rishte ke liye?â
âNahi abhi bhi woh mana kar rahi haiâ Sharda answered.
âDheeraj itna accha ladka hai. Aur baar baar aise acche ladke nahi milte. Tum Pallavi ko samjha do ki woh iss rishte ke liye haa boleâ
âVijayji, aapko nahi lagta humein Pallavi ko Dheeraj ki sacchai batani chahiyeâ
âKoi zaroorat nahi hai usko batane ki. Pehle hi woh iss rishte ke liye mana kar rahi hai, sach pata chalega phir toh woh aur mana karegi. Isliye ab use kuch mat batao. Baad mein dekh lenge. Abhi chalo Mansi ki sagai ka waqt ho raha haiâ Vijay & Sharda left from there.
âSaree Ka Dukaan jisse baat kar raha tha uss ladke ka rishta aaya hai usko. Aur kya chupa raha hai yeh log usse. Aisa kaunsa sacchai hai jo usko nahi bata sakta. Kaisa log hai yeh. Aur aisa logo ke liye yeh Saree Ka Dukaan merese jhagda karta haiâ Raghav shook his head, âSacchai ka pata lagana padega air Saree Ka Dukaan ko batana padega, lekin woh mera baat nahi maanegaâ
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Some moments later, the engagement ceremony started. Raghav saw Pallavi descending the stairs. She was smiling but he knew it was fake. She was pretending to be happy for the sake of others. She came & stood at the side. Meanwhile, Dheeraj also stood beside her which made her uncomfortable & Raghav angry.
âFarhad?â He called Farhad.
âJi Annaâ
âSaree Ka Dukaan ka baju mein joh ladka hai na, uska baare mein mujhe saara information chahiyeâ
âKyu Anna? Aapko uske baare mein kyu jaanna hai?â
âTereko jitna bola hai utna karâ Raghav looked at Farhad.
âJiâ Farhad left.
Raghav was continuously looking at Pallavi. He also noticed her glancing at him.
After some time, the ring ceremony was over & the guests were headed towards the food counter. But Raghav saw that Dheeraj was not leaving Pallaviâs side even for once, âYeh ladka Saree Ka Dukaan se kuch zyada hi chipak raha hai. Isko dekhna padegaâ Muttering this to himself, he went towards them.
âPallavi ji aap-â Dheeraj who was trying to initiate a conversation with Pallavi was interrupted by Raghav.
âHelloâ Pallavi looked at Raghav & prayed that he does not make any scene.
âAap kon?â Dheeraj asked Raghav.
Raghav put his hand on Dheerajâs shoulder, âMain Raghav Raoâ
âRaghav Rao? Aap Jayati Jewels ke owner hai na?â Raghav nodded.
âAapke baare mein boht suna hai maine. Lekin aap yaha kaise? Pallavi ji aap inhe jaanti hai?â He asked Pallavi.
âJi woh-â
âYeh Saree Ka Dukaan mera haiâ Raghav said looking intently at Pallavi. She was shocked at his answer.
âMatlab?â Dheeraj interruption broke their trance.
âMatlab...Iska joh Saree Ka Dukaan hai uska owner hai mainâ Raghav said.
âOh, aapne bataya nahi Pallavi jiâ
âIsmein batane waali kya baat haiâ Pallavi said straight to him but realized that she was rude, âI mean...yeh itna important nahi laga mujheâ She tried to dismiss the topic.
âPallaviâ Mansi called her.
âMujhe Mansi bula rahi hai, main aati huâ
âJiâ Dheeraj nodded. She turned to leave but not before warning Raghav not to do any drama.
âToh tu karne waala hai isse shaadi?â Raghav asked Dheeraj.
âAapko kaise pata?â
âMain Raghav Rao hai, sab khabar rakhta haiâ Raghav said tightening his hold on Dheerajâs shoulder.
âAbhi...tak baat pakki nahi hui hai par ho jaayegiâ
âTumko itna bharosa hai ki woh haa kar dega shaadi ke liye?â
âUnki family ko main pasand hu, toh woh Pallavi ji ko mana hi lengeâ Suddenly Dheeraj got a call. Raghav withrawed his hand & he went outside to attend the call.
Raghavâs phone pinged. It was a message from Farhad. He had found out every little detail about this Dheeraj. The information about him shocked Raghav. Dheeraj was a widower & had a 5 year old daughter. He was also a drunkard & was involved in illegal business. He was pissed at the Deshmukhs for hiding such a huge thing from Pallavi.
âYeh Saree Ka Dukaan ko saara baat batana padega. Warna yeh pagal ladki apna family ka pressure mein aake haa bol dega iss rishte ke liyeâ Raghav muttered.
Raghav was looking for Pallavi but he couldnât find her anywhere. He came to her room only to find her sitting on the bed. He came inside & locked the door making Pallavi turn. She was shocked to see him again in her room.
âRaghav? Tum phirse yaha aa gaye? Tumhe na sach mein koi dekh lega abhiâ She asked standing up.
âTum function enjoy nahi kar raha kya? Baar baar upar room mein aa jaata hai?â
âAur tum mera picha karte yaha aa jaate ho. Tumhe koi aur kaam nahi hai kya?â
âKaam toh boht hai mere pass Saree Ka Dukaan par abhi mujhe tumko kuch bataneka haiâ He said with a straight face & Pallavi realized that the matter was serious.
âKya?â
âDekho tum pehle mera pura baat sunna uske baad kuch react karnaâ
âBaat kya hai Raghav?â
âTereko jo rishta aaya hai na kisi Dheeraj ka, woh aadmi ekdum fraud haiâ
âKya bakwaas kar rahe ho? Tum-â Pallavi couldnât continue as Raghav closed her mouth with his palm, âMaine abhi kaha tumko ki mereko pehla pura baat batane do par nahi madam ko pehle hi bolna hai. Abhi chup rahoâ He removed his hand.
âWoh illegal business karta hai, boht alcoholic haiâ Raghav showed her some documents in his phone, âAur sabse bada baat woh ek widower hai aur uska ek 5 saal ka beti bhi haiâ He showed her Dheerajâs late wife & daughtersâ pictures.
âYeh sab kya hai Raghav? Agar tum yeh sab jaan bhujke kar rahe ho na toh-â
âYeh sab sach hai Saree Ka Dukaan. Yeh saara information Farhad nikala hai abhiâ
âIllegal business aur alcoholic chod do par woh ek widower hai aur unki ek beti hai yeh sach woh humse nahi chupayenge.â
âTum sach keh raha hai. Usne sach nahi chupayaâ
âMatlab?â She asked confused.
âWoh sab kuch tumhaara family ko bataya hai. Usne tumse yeh baat chupaya haiâ He told her.
âRaghav, kuch bhi bakwas mat karo. Tum-â
âSaree Ka Dukaan, mere pass bhi fokat ka time nahi hai ki main aisa topic pe bakwas karein aur dusro ka family matters mein interfere karein. Main tera Aai aur uss Sanki baap ko aisa baat karte huye suna ki koi sacchai woh tumko nahi bataya hai. Toh Farhad ko main uss ladke ka information nikalne ko bola. Main-â
âMere Aai-Baba mujhse itni badi baat nahi chupayengeâ She whispered & sat on the bed.
âChupaya hai Saree Ka Dukaanâ
âPar woh aisa kyu karenge?â Her eyes were full of tears.
âTaaki tum iss rishte ke liye haa kardeâ He kneeled down infront of her.
âMaine Aai Baba se kaha tha ki mujhe shaadi nahi karni toh woh kyu meri baat maan nahi rahe. Aur upar se yeh rishta-â
âTum puchega tumhaara Aai Baba se ki unhone yeh kyu chupaya?â
âRaghav, main unhe-â She tried saying in between her sobs.
âTum nahi puchega, mereko pata haiâ He knew she would never question her parents however wrong they may be, âTum bas mereko ek baat batao. Tumko yeh rishta manzoor hai? Tumko yeh sab jaanne ka baad bhi karna hai uss Dheeraj Veeraj se shaadi?â He asked softly to which she quickly shook her head in a no.
âTheek hai, tum ek kaam karo tum neeche jao aur tumhaara Aai ko bol do ki tum iss rishte ke liye ready haiâ
âKya? Tum pagal ho gaye ho kya? Tu-â She stood up immediately. He also stood up.
âTum na pehle toh mujhe pura baat batane do, baad mein bolna shuru ho jaoâ He said in frustration.
He continued, âTum haa boldo iss rishte ke liye. Unko lagega ki tum ready hai. Toh jab yeh rishta tootega tab koi tumko blame nahi karegaâ
âTum aisa kya karne waale ho Raghav?â She asked in a low tone.
âUska chinta tum mat karo. Usko main handle karta haiâ Saying this, he started to leave when Pallavi held his hand, âRaghav, please mujhe batao tum kya karne waale ho?â
âMain usko Raghav Rao style mein handle karega abâ Raghav said proudly.
âUsko maar mat dena tumâ She said to him. Realizing that he might feel offended she apologized, âSorry, mera woh matlab nahi thaâ
Raghav came towards her. He held her by waist & pulled her closer. She didnât protest & infact kept her hands on his chest. She was never a kind of a girl who would just let a man come closer to her but with Raghav, her body & mind would behave differently. At the moment she was with him alone in her room with locked door but still she didnât feel unsafe. His hold on her didnât feel uncomfortable & somehow, always felt protective. And unknowingly, she had started liking being in his embrace.
He cupped her face & wiped her tears. Tucking a hair strand behind her ear, he gently kissed her forehead which made her close her eyes.
âTum tension mat lo, main dekh lega uss ladke koâ Saying this, he left the room.
Raghav's action made her speechless.
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Fifteen minutes later, Pallavi came down. She looked around but Raghav was nowhere, âYeh Raghav kya karne waala hai? Koi tamaasha na karein basâ
She spotted Aai so she decided to do what Raghav had told her to do.
âAaiâ
âHaa Pallu. Bolâ
âMain iss rishte ke liye ready huâ Pallavi told Aai.
âSach Pallu? Tumne boht accha faisla kiya hai. Tere Baba boht khush hongeâ Aai was happy with Pallaviâs decision, âMain tere Baba aur Dheeraj ki family ko batati huâ Pallavi nodded at her.
She messaged Raghav, âMaine Aai ko haa bol diya, tum kahan ho?â
âThoda patience rakh Saree Ka Dukaanâ Came his reply.
âJaldi aajao Raghavâ She murmured to herself.
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After some time, Pallavi saw her Aai Baba talking something with Dheeraj & his parents. She couldnât hear what they were talking but by looking at their faces, she knew that some serious discussion was going on. Sharda & Vijay tried to make them understand something but they didnât listen to them & left the function. Their eyes landed on Pallavi, she lightly smiled at them. Sharda came towards her, held her hand & took her towards the corner.
âKya hua Aai? Aap pareshaan lag rahi hai?â Pallavi asked.
âPallu, woh...Dheeraj ne rishte ke liye mana kar diyaâ
She realized Raghav must have done or said something to the guy. She was so happy that she wanted to scream but she pretended to be sad, âPar kyu?â
âWoh keh rahe hai ki unko abhi shaadi nahi karni. Humein maaf kar de beta, humne tumhe iss rishte ke liye raazi kar diya par ab yeh Dheeraj ne hi mana kar diyaâ Sharda said.
âKoi baat nahi Aai. Jo hota hai acche ke liye hota haiâ Sharda felt sorry for her & left. Pallavi was disappointed that Aai still didnât tell her the truth about Dheerajâs marriage & daughter, âAap mujhe sacchai kab batane waali thi Aai? Shayad kabhi nahiâ She wiped a line tear that was about to come out of her eye. She sighed & started looking for Raghav, âYeh wapas aaya hi nahiâ
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The ceremony was over & everyone had retired to sleep in their respective rooms.
Pallavi changed & did her night routine. But one thing or rather one person was constantly on her mind, Raghav! Where was he? Why didnât he come back to the function? No message, no phone call, nothing. She wanted to thank him so, she picked her phone to call him but as it was too late, she decided to call him tomorrow.
Pallavi went towards the window to close it when the sight infront of her shocked her. Raghav Rao was sitting on the bonnet of his car. She immediately called him. He picked the call in the first ring.
âTum bahar kya kar rahe ho?â Pallavi asked him. He started looking for her when he saw her at the window.
âWoh...mereko tumse kuch baat...karna thaâ Raghav stammered.
âKahoâ
âTum abhi...neeche aa sakta hai?â She didnât say anything & he understood that she canât come outside right now at this moment.
âKoi nahi, main kal baat kar legaâ Raghav said sadly & was about to cut the call.
âRukoâ She almost shouted as if trying to stop him from the window. He looked at her hopefully, âMain aati huâ She immediately cut the call. As it was cold outside, she wrapped a shawl around herself & came downstairs. She checked everywhere properly to see if anyone was still around but luckily, everyone was too tired to even get up before morning. She slowly tiptoed outside, closed the door & started walking towards Raghav.
Looking at Pallavi, he felt happy. She came towards him, âTum pagal ho kya itni raat ko yaha thand mein car par baithe ho? Beemaar ho jaaogeâ She said angrily. He can see her concern for him but she would never admit it. He just smiled at her.
âAb smile kyu kar rahe ho?â
âKuch nahiâ Looking down, he smiled inwardly.
âTumne mujhe baahar kyu bulaya itni raat ko?â She asked.
âBas dekhna tha tumâŠtheek hai ki nahi"
âTheek hoon main, tumhaari wajah se" He looked at her & she smiled, âMujhe kabhi laga nahi tha ki main tumse yeh kahungi par Thank You meri help karne ke liyeâ He smiled at her.
âRaghav, tumne kya kiya uske saath?â Pallavi asked him.
âWoh tumhe janne ka zaroorat nahi haiâ She knew there was no point of pestering him as he wonât tell so she decided to drop the idea.
âEk baat puchu?â He nodded.
âTumne yeh sab mere liye kyu kiya, Raghav? Main toh tumhaari dushman hu na phir kyu?â
He came closer to her & her heart started beating faster, âTum usse shaadi karta toh tumko Hyderabad mein rehne ka accha khaasa chance mil jaata. Phir mera challenge ka kya hota?â He said raising his eyebrows.
Pallavi was disappointed, âTum...â She pushed him, âTumne sirf ek challenge jitne ke liye yeh sab kiya? Aur mujhe laga ki-â
âKya laga?â He asked half smiling.
âKuch nahiâ
âWaise...aur ek reason thaâ He asked huskily.
âKya?â She said flaring her nostrils & looking elsewhere.
He looked at her & said, âMain bola tha na woh Dheeraj ko ki Saree Ka Dukaan mera hai. Toh basâ She couldnât say anything after this. One statement by him made her heart flutter. Smirking at her, he sat in his car & left.
âHar baar jab mujhe lagta hai ki main tumhe jaan chuki hu, tum apni ek alag side dikha dete hoâ
Main tumhe kab samjhungi Raghav?
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Iâve been binging old MHRW episodes rn & in one episode when the mahila morcha group comes outside DSE, Raghav tells the lady âSaree Ka Dukaan mera haiâ although he was literally referring to the shop but I just cant help but think it otherwise, so the reference in the last chapter & this one also. Iâm just obsessed with that line.
I hope you like the chapter.
Do vote, comment & share. Also, tell me if you want to read any scene from the show in a different way, Iâll try to write.
Originally posted by: ZariSharma
As far as I can remember n understood, Raghav was not an accomplice of Krishna Rao in his crime. Raghav was duped by him as well. He didn't know that Krishna Rao was going to run away with the money.
What you remember is not correct. In the June 12 episode, Raghav told Pallavi his story. Raghav was duped at first; Raghav was not an accomplice when he collected the money, thinking that the villagers would get double, gave it to Krishna Rao, and received a commission. Raghav became an accessory when he found out that it was a fraud, that Krishna Rao was going to run away with the money, when Raghav confronted him, and Krishna Rao paid him extra money to keep silent. Pallavi said, you should have thrown the money in his face! Then Raghav told her the story of his NÄnna having to lick tea like a dog, and said that after watching his father so desperate, a deal to let Krishna Rao get away seemed like the easiest and fastest way to earn money. About three months after they contributed money to the fund, the mob gathered at Raghav's house. Raghav went looking for Krishna Rao but couldn't find him anywhere on the train. Raghav decided to give the villagers the full amount of his commission. (Wouldn't he have spent it already? The original commission was a lot, enough to pay for Ajit's medical treatment for respiratory problems, and for Jaya's new dance academy.) But by the time Raghav got back home, it was all over.
There have been other versions of Raghav's past on the show. For example, a flashback in which Raghav was lying on his stomach, getting beaten with a stick, and Raghav saying that "that girl" was the reason for the terrible day, so he hates women - their lives, speeches, and fake love. Fan fiction authors can make Raghav innocent if they want to, but it's helpful to tell the reader what Raghav tells Pallavi.
I tweaked it a little bit.
Also, I didn't want to write the whole thing
This is wonderful. Loved it. Bahut hi accha.
he saved her from her fake family đđ
she was so đby their betrayal.
loving your Raghav â€ïž
Very nice đ
One on jealous RR ... funny story would be nice
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