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Posted: 3 years ago

Another incredible write up poorva!🤗 Loved every bit of it!❤️

Am in love with your descriptions of nuances! Especially, the way you describe bani's feelings! Gives so much depth to her!❤️

Loved mayuri's green wardrobe malfunction!😆 I really wanna see bani getting affected by mayuri now!😆 Mayuri jyaada chipakti nai hai yrr but veer ko!😛😆 

Bandi ka alag hi swag hai! She's just full of herself!

Bani was desperate for her alleged dushman attention huh! But this time, dil mei ladoo phootte phootte!😆

The last bit!She held him by his collar and claimed her own!☺️

Tum mere ho!☺️Veer-Bani are passion ki dukaan yrrr! It can never lessen in them!☺️

 I want to see this in reality too!!! Please keep writing dear! We can live our imaginations through you!❤️

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Posted: 3 years ago

i’m here i’m hereeee u made my night first of all. matlab i nicely slept after reading this. loved seeing veer ignore her. it wasn’t too much but still enough. then having bani hurt herself to get him to talk to her oh my love the sankipan. at least her sankiness matches veer’s. i don’t know why but the line where veer said i was gonna go home but u’ve come so i’ll wait for you — it’s so subtle but i loved it. it was really really good. phir veer getting jealous and the conversation after, that is by far my favorite conversation i’ve read so far. 


"Kyonki tumhara kamra mera kamra hai, tumhara naam mera naam hai aur tum mere pati ho. You get it." Bani grabbed his collar. She needed Veer back. Otherwise she knew she will lose her mind. 


"I really like the sound of that sweet heart." Veer whispered in the nape of her neck. 

THIS KILLED ME. LIKE FULL ON. MARGAYI MEIN. IT WAS EVERYTHING I LOVE YOU FOR WRITING THIS AND I’M GONNA FRAME THIS I SWEAR.

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Posted: 3 years ago

Awwww.... 

Thank you so much.. 

I m really glad you dedicated this os to me.. 


N about the os my god 😱😱😱

Such an amazing writer u r 

Loved it so much... 

Just what I wanted to read.. 


Ps. If you'll keep writing like this I guess I have to keep requesting for more... 

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Posted: 3 years ago

Originally posted by: J2lover

Another incredible write up poorva!🤗 Loved every bit of it!❤️

Sukhada 🤗

 How are you? 


Am in love with your descriptions of nuances! Especially, the way you describe bani's feelings! Gives so much depth to her!❤️

Thank you so much ❤️

Such appreciation makes my day! 


Loved mayuri's green wardrobe malfunction!😆 

I had written an old OS jahaan pe Heroine Mayuri type bandi se jealous hokar usse onion bulati hai because that bandi was wearing a purple dress. Maine socha chalo Mayuri ko cabbage bana dete hai for entertainment purposes 😆


I really wanna see bani getting affected by mayuri now!😆 Mayuri jyaada chipakti nai hai yrr but veer ko!😛😆 

I agree that now Mayuri cannot chipkofy with Veer more because she is a supposed Mrs. Ponky. Lekin agar hum Bani ke hi dialogue ko toh yaad kare toh Veer ki kitni deewaniyaan hai. Bani ne bhale hi kaha ho ke woh "Baaki deewani ladkiyon ki tarah nahi hai jo Veer ko dekhkar phisal jaaye", I say Bani jal jal ke dhuaan ho jaaegi if Veer pays attention to any one of them 🤣


Bandi ka alag hi swag hai! She's just full of herself!

So true. I have heard her say so many times that woh kitni hot hai... I be like Madamme Morni, jo log hot hote hai naa unhe baar baar woh cheez bolne ki zarurat nahi padti. 😆


Bani was desperate for her alleged dushman attention huh! But this time, dil mei ladoo phootte phootte!😆

Bani ko khud hi samajh mein nahi aa raha ke woh Veer ke liye kya kya feel karti hai. Time lagega thoda. Right now, I am happy ke atleast she has admitted to herself ke kuch toh hua hai, kuch ho gaya hai.... 


The last bit!She held him by his collar and claimed her own!☺️

That is my favorite bit of this piece. 


Tum mere ho!☺️Veer-Bani are passion ki dukaan yrrr! It can never lessen in them!☺️

Touch wood, aag lagne waali hai TV par. ☺️


 I want to see this in reality too!!! Please keep writing dear! We can live our imaginations through you!❤️

Milega milega, thoda wait karna padega par screen par bhi milega. 

Absolutely, Vani fiction ki koi ho tammana ya ho koi aarzoo... Kehna mujhe ek baar main hoon naaaaaaaaaaa 😆.

 Let me know if you want to read something specific. 

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Posted: 3 years ago

Originally posted by: nainaasharmaa

i’m here i’m hereeee

Nainaaaaaaaaaaaa 🤗


 u made my night first of all

Ji shukriya shukriya ❤️


matlab i nicely slept after reading this. 

That makes me so content. The job is done right! 


loved seeing veer ignore her. it wasn’t too much but still enough. 

Yes! Veer Bani se poori tarah naaraaz nahi thha bass thoda sa ukhda ukhda sa thha. He knows Bani ko bohot si galatfahamiyaan hai jo sulajh jaaengi once she starts thinking more and thinking better. He just wanted some time for himself and he wanted to give some time to Bani as well. To understand her feelings and emotions better. 


then having bani hurt herself to get him to talk to her oh my love the sankipan. at least her sankiness matches veer’s.

That was my exact intention. 

I realized Bani was capable of doing legit anything after she jumped from the floating mansion for her life. She did not have powers. Marr bhi sakti thhi. 

Aur aise thodi hum log in dono ko takkar ka kehte hai... Agar Veer sanki toh Bani bhi sanki! 🤣


 i don’t know why but the line where veer said i was gonna go home but u’ve come so i’ll wait for you — it’s so subtle but i loved it. 

I always feel that such little subtle gestures also count big time in making relationships better. And it suits Veer so well. 


it was really really good. phir veer getting jealous and the conversation after, that is by far my favorite conversation i’ve read so far. 


"Kyonki tumhara kamra mera kamra hai, tumhara naam mera naam hai aur tum mere pati ho. You get it." Bani grabbed his collar. She needed Veer back. Otherwise she knew she will lose her mind. 


"I really like the sound of that sweet heart." Veer whispered in the nape of her neck. 


This scene is my favorite scene as well. Also I wanted Bani to say a verion of "Yeh ghar Mera hai, yeh kamra Mera hai, yeh jagah meri hai aur tum ... .... .... 

... Tum meri patni ho... Bani". 


THIS KILLED ME. LIKE FULL ON. MARGAYI MEIN. IT WAS EVERYTHING I LOVE YOU FOR WRITING THIS AND I’M GONNA FRAME THIS I SWEAR.

I love you too Naina ❤️

Just imagine jab aise scenes TV par aaenge toh kitna mazaa aaega 

PS - please apna bhi ff update karo na 

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Posted: 3 years ago

Originally posted by: Aashi21895

Awwww.... 

Thank you so much.. 

I m really glad you dedicated this os to me.. 


N about the os my god 😱😱😱

Such an amazing writer u r 

Loved it so much... 

Just what I wanted to read.. 


Ps. If you'll keep writing like this I guess I have to keep requesting for more... 

Hi Ashi 🤗

Thank you so much

I am glad that you liked this composition

I am thinking about some Vani scenes during Navratri. Do you have any suggestions? 

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Posted: 3 years ago

Originally posted by: indigal07

Uffff kya OS hai yeh!!!! ☺️ Last line mein toh aag lag gayi aag!!! I was waiting for Veer to get so physically close to Bani. Poor guy waited 24 hours, what patience yaar!! 


I love how he drove Bani crazy by not talking to her and she can't even understand how she feels. I love those lines of hers towards the end where she gets so possessive. She has to do that on the show! I want to see Bani saying Veer's lines at some point and Veer reacting exactly the way he did in this OS. I feel like tumne humko future dikha diya as these show writers are taking so long 😆


Bani went to the lengths of hurting herself to get his attention, loved that! And Veer's concern for her  This girl!!!! When is she going to figure out how she feels??!!!! 😆


And Bani's lines about how Mayuri looked in the green omg that was HILARIOUS I laughed out loud literally 🤣


Lovedddddd this OS so much! 🤗 Thank you so much for the pm! Each time I get a pm from you, I know my day is getting better because I'll get to read more Vani scenes so brilliantly written! 😳

😳omo. Wish the makers see this and get some idea. 

I have said it before and again that I want veer to give bani silent treatment. It's like you some how heard my thoughts and made this beautiful OS. So much to dream

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Posted: 3 years ago


update kiyaaa 🥳 

chapter 8 i'm not sure if u've read but chapter 9 abhi abhi update kiya ☺️

aur shayad kuch OS bhi likhungi aaj rat, vani ki mood mein hai abhi hehe 

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Posted: 3 years ago

Oh Wowww I loved this so much 😊 😍.. I loved the changed behaviour of Vani.. Now Bani is desperate and Veer has become calm.. I was hoping while reading in the start that aise ignored hote hote Bani bohat jyada desperate ho jaaye and apni saari man ki baatein poore intensity k saath bahar nikale.. And this is exactly how u presented it. Show mein bhi aise dikhaye pls 😭😭😭😍😍😍😍😍

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Posted: 3 years ago

Originally posted by: Cinnamon_Kisses

Hello everyone 🤗

I am so glad that some sort of inspiration got into me and I managed to complete this OS. 

This one is dedicated to @Aashi21895 because she had requested an OS on a similar theme. I really hope you like it Aashi. 

Happy reading! 

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Bani was sitting on the couch with her head held in her hands. She was getting riled up thinking about what had exactly happened at the poolside. Her last clear memory was that she went to sleep but she was not able to remember anything after that. She recalls being in Veer's arms. He was scolding her because she was going to walk in the pool. But why would she want to walk in the pool? And more importantly why is she not able to recollect anything in particular? What on earth is going on? She tried to talk to Veer. Again. And he chose not to respond. Again. Bani was so annoyed. Why can't he just tell her what happened if he knows it. She darted her eyes at him, he was busy concentrating on his laptop. 


Veer had his obvious reasons. He knew the truth. He knew that whatever happened at the pool side was a part of Jay's third class plan. With that he also knew that Bani was never going to believe him if he told her the truth straightforwardly. After all she had blind trust in her ex fiance. Veer seriously needed a break from Bani's constant bickering. It would be better if she figured out some important things on her own. Another fact that was getting under his skin was that Bani was not talking to him about how she really felt. He knows that she does not love him that way he does but she cares for him. He has read so many different emotions in the depth of her eyes. She gets worried for him and she appreciates his attention. She holds onto him for support. She feels safe when he is around. Arguing with him is one of her hobbies. As much as Veer wants to make the marriage work, he is willing to step back for a while so that his sweet heart can take a step towards him. Even if it is a baby step. He wants to give her all the time and space that she needs. 


"Veer!" Mayuri walked in Veer and Bani's room excitedly. 


"Kisi ke bhi kamre mein knock karke jaate hai Mayuri, bachpan mein tameez nahi seekhi kya?" Bani said with a straight face, frustration boiling up inside her. 


"Dekho Bani, main bohot awesome feel kar rahi hoon abhi, mera mood spoil mat karo." Mayuri was all set to argue with Bani. 


"Kya hua Mayuri? Kya chahiye tumhe?" Veer cut in between. He would be completely fine with a little less drama right now. 


"Veer tumhe yaad nahi hai? Hum sabne pichhle hafte plan banaya thha? Disco jaane ka?"


"Arre haan, mere dimaag se nikal hi gayi thi yeh baat."


"Koi baat nahi, jaldi se ready ho jaao."


"Mayuri I really don't feel like it, tum sab jaao, mujhe aaraam karna hai." Veer wanted to rest. 


"Chalo na Veer, don't be a spoil sport. Ponky ko kitna bura lagega if you don't join us." 


"Theek hai aataa hoon." Veer said yes thinking about Ponky. 


"By the way, how do I look?" Mayuri asked fluttering her fake eyelashes.


"Hmmm.... How would I know? You look green." Veer said observing her from head to toe. She wore a green dress, green make up and green shoes. 


"Theek se tareef karona Veer, taiyar hone mein bohot time laga hai." Mayuri made a baby face. 


"Okay okay let me think... You look nice Mayuri."

 

"Thank you Veer." Mayuri bowed down and walked out of the room happily. 


Nice? Veer thought Mayuri was looking NICE? Like seriously? Bani was infuriated. Veer has not cared to talk to her properly for more than twenty four hours. There are a hundred different problems in her life with which he is not helping even when he can and suddenly he realizes that he is a gentleman and calls Mayuri Nice! Indeed, that is very nice.

 

Well if Mayuri would have asked her about how she looked. Bani would have rubbed the truth right in her face. She would have told Mayuri that her bright green eye shadow made her face look sick, her dark green shoes looked like someone had puked on her feet and her light green layered body con dress was hideous. She looked like a cabbage. A rotten cabbage. 


And Veer calls her nice! 


~~~


Veer got up to freshen up and get dressed. Bani made another attempt to strike a conversation with him but all in vain. Yes, he answered her questions but briefly. Nothing that could satisfy her. That is so not right Bani thought. This man does not care to speak properly to his wife but he will give 'NICE' compliments to other superficial show pieces.

 

Veer was shocked to see blood in Bani's hands when he walked out of the Bathroom. 


"Yeh chot kaise lag gayi Bani?" Veer almost panicked. He saw the broken glass of water when he rushed to open the cupboard to get the first aid box. 


"Woh galti se lag gaya Veer. Mera dhyaan nahi thha. Mere haath se glass phisal kar toot gaya. Main saaf karne gayi toh chubh gaya." Okay. That is not true. She lied to him. She broke the glass and hurt herself on purpose. Veer will have to pay attention to her. Now they can talk. 


"Tumse kisne keh diya kaanch saaf karne ko? Dekho kitni chot lagi hai. Zyada dard ho raha hai kya? Theek ho jaaega main abhi dawaai laga deta hoon." Veer was extremely worried. 


"Tumhara naam Bani Sharma nahi Toofani Sharma hona chahiye, jab dekho tab koi na koi gadbad karti rehti ho. Dhyaan rakhna chahiye naa." Veer cleaned her hand and bandaged it. Bani could feel her heart melt because of the way Veer cared for her wound.

 

"Tum mujhse theek se baat kyon nahi kar rahe Veer?" Bani asked impatiently. 


"Baat kar toh raha hoon Bani. I am around if you need me, if you want me." Veer said calmly. He got up to keep the first aid box back in the cupboard and call for help to clean the broken glass. 


Yes he was talking to her but Bani was so annoyed. He had not called her sweet heart or gharwali or Mrs. Veeranshu Singhania for more than twenty four hours now. She was just Bani. She had become just Bani. Something was definitely not right. 


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"Veer, tum akele yaha par kyon khade ho? Sab dance floor par tumhara wait kar rahe hai. Dekho sab dance kar rahe hai, tum bhi enjoy karo." Mayuri couldn't stop moving her hips to the loud music. She grabbed his hand and and tried to pull him to the floor with her. Veer did not move. 


"Mayuri tum jaake dance, mera sach me bilkul mann nahi hai." Veer felt exhausted. 


"How many pretty's do I need to put before a please Veer. Tum disco tak aaye ho aur tumhe dance nahi karna? Bhala yeh kya baat hui? Please Veer ek song par dance karlo hum sabke saath." 


"I am good Mayuri. Agar mera mann hua toh main definitely dance karne aaunga." 


"Okay Veer, as you wish." Mayuri danced away. 


The music was loud and the light blinding. Veer saw all his friends and brothers were lost in dancing and drinking and giggling at  jokes. Some of them were clicking pictures. 


 Suddenly he felt her touch on his shoulders. A familiar scent engulfed his senses. Lavender.

 

"Hey" Bani whispered in his ears. 


"Bani, tum yaha?" Veer was surprised. 


"I was invited." He knew she was. 


"Chalo na dance karte hai." Bani requested. 


"Actually main soch raha thha ghar waapas chala jaau lekin tum aa hi gayi ho toh I'll wait for you. You carry on, I'll be at the bar." Veer smiled. Bani was getting irritated. Why was he so aloof? 


"Please Veer don't be a spoil sport. Agar mere liye wait kar rahe ho toh mere saath dance be karlo." She tried again. 


"I think I will have to say no Bani." Veer decided. The entire 'Bani needs some space and time for herself' speech going on in his head. 


"Theek hai agar tumhe mere saath dance nahi karna toh koi baat nahi, I guess I will have to find someone jisse mere saath dance karne mein interest ho." Bani's eyes challenged him. 


"Find someone?" What was his wife upto? "Tumhe jo karna hai karo Bani". Any which ways he chose to smile and walk away to sit at the bar.

 

After sometime, she was enjoying herself on the dance floor. Veer lazily smiled and took that time to admire her appearance. She looked different and undeniably hot. She was wearing a glittering maroon off shoulder dress. The ruched outfit fit her right in all the right places. But his favorite part about that gorgeous dress had to be the thigh high slit. 


Veer  was mesmerized because of the way Bani danced.  When she flowed in such dance it was as if it were the only way her body truly knew how to speak. He knew that she is confident and opinionated, but  she was also able to express herself through her dance. She looked like an empress. On the dance floor her personality, her sensuality burst through into the most vibrant picture of a beautiful soul. 


One moment she was dancing with Ponky and the other moment a stranger was flirtatiously dancing around Bani. She gave him all the attention that he wanted. She followed his lead and even laughed at something he said. All the while exchanging mischievous glances with Veer. Bani thought that her plan to make Veer jealous did not work because he looked so composed. She expected that he would turn into a green eyed monster. Even when it was not evident, Veer felt so uncomfortable and envious and then realized that is exactly what she wanted. She was doing this on purpose. The stranger tried to slide his hand on Bani's waist and Veer had had enough. He strode towards them like a furious tornado and snatched away Bani's hand separating her from him. 


"Keep your filthy hands off my girl," he warned the guy and began to drag her out of the dance floor to some isolated corner.


~~~


"What do you think you are doing Bani?" Veer  pinned her against a wall. Veer was visibly annoyed. 


"Tumhara dimaag kharaab karne ki koshish, theek ussi tareeke se jis tareeke se tumne mera dimaag kharaab karke rakha hai." Bani spoke in one breathe. She was annoyed too. 


"Maine kya kiya Bani? Main toh tumse baat tak nahi kar raha."


"Exactly, ussi wajah se khudko chot laga li maine, taaki tum meri taraf zara sa dhyaan toh do." She showed him her hand. 


"Kya tumhe zara sa bhi andaza hai ke tum thodi paagal ho?" Veer was exasperated. Bani is crazy. She managed to hurt herself and for what? 


"Ji haan and you know what? Tumhaare chakkar mein poori ki poori paagal ho jaaungi."


"Kya kar rahi ho Bani aur kyon kar rahi ho yeh sab?" Veer tried to maintain his calm. 


"Kyonki tumhe agar dekhna hai toh meri taraf dekho, agar kuch karna  hai toh mere liye karo, agar kuch kehna hai toh mujhse kaho Veeranshu Singhania."


"Kyon?" Veer was intrigued. Her tone was so possessive. 


"Kyonki tumhara kamra mera kamra hai, tumhara naam mera naam hai aur tum mere pati ho. You get it." Bani grabbed his collar. She needed Veer back. Otherwise she knew she will lose her mind. 


"I really like the sound of that sweet heart." Veer whispered in the nape of her neck. 


Its awesome make another OS.