AvNeil OS (SongFic) : "Jar Of Hearts.!!"

Beautiful! Loved it. Please write a sequel!

Thank-you for writing it 😃 I never thought you will post so soon in between all the stories you are writing . Thank you 🤗




Edited by AgnesFan - 6 years ago

you have such beautiful way with words made me too emotional 👏

This is brilliant!  so much love and loss between our couple.  I never thought that jar of love could be used for them. But this is amazing.  I hope, avni has it in her to forgive neil. And maybe in future, you could write another christina perry song fic for them- a thousand years. ( well, this would have been pretty apt before the goa track. When they confessed their love). Now,  we can hope for it in future! 

This song couldn't have been  put in a more beautiful way I didn't find anything exaggerated the emotions and feelings you have shown from avni's pov is what I really want to see in the story too though it's not possible  and to be honest any person in her shoes will actually react and have these emotions in real  Edited by Afsana103 - 6 years ago

This time I'm choosing to keep mum, because I

Ri, wat is this?👏 How u manage to pull out those emotions. U r awesome ri. Its made me so emotional. Last para is awesome. For me, that paragraph is best in whole shot.  U write their pain perfectly. Did I have to say how beautiful is it? Ri, u justified avni's pov beautifully. You have done awesome job with that song.👏 Wat an amazing song. Y neil didnt return to khanna house?  U know wat after this shot I became greedy. I want neil's pov from u. Pls write neil's pov also. Waiting ri.plsss😳 happy new year🤗Edited by avneil2 - 6 years ago

This is brilliant...! beautifully written...!

the potray of emotions was presented in a very beautiful way..it was her thoughts and emotions..but from one side..she didn't see that the person who made her life colourful when she was burning and finishing..when she had no hope..that person is also bound to some laws..anyway that same will go for neil that he could get avni bailed...atleast her trust wont get broken...her hope...hey my bak bak is so much...well for neil u can take the inspiration of the song i'm gonna stand by you...it is perfect for this situation...
Edited by Sami72 - 6 years ago