Mil Jaate Hai Jo Bane, Ek Duje Ke Vaaste- Alternate ending - Completed - Page 3

Faith28

@Faith28

Senior Member

Posted: 7 years ago

Was so waiting for an alternate ending...this was so nicely written... Loved the bathroom sequence...bed par kar doongi was 🤣 Its a good start... Both have a long way to go...and they'll get there eventually😊 Pls update soon...and yes do pm me too😊

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pinky.padda

@pinky.padda

IF-Rockerz

Posted: 7 years ago

#22

awesome update

absolutely loved it

continue soon

superb

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Wiccamaya

@Wiccamaya

Goldie

Posted: 7 years ago

#23

Jo, this is amazing ... alternate ending... and so sweet ... different. waiting for more ... ... bless you these are lifelines after show . keep writing.😊👏

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Flibbertigibbet

@Flibbertigibbet

Goldie

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Posted: 7 years ago

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Okay so. I had to read this more than once to calm the f**k down. BECAUSE OH LORDY LORD!!

* running around screaming aaa with a stupid grin, giddy eyed, bumping into walls and jazz hands*

This was so good, i almost jumped with excitement but i already have my sister judging me hardcore for smiling too much into my screen at this time of the night XD

THIS WAS SOME NEXT LEVEL AMAZEBALLSSS!!!!!

I love it so much i dont have words sorry.

Flibb surrenders! *haath upar*

The emotions, the words, everything.

The flibbertigibbet has been renderred speechless!

Thanks for that. That amazing vision. And that towel wala shravan vision. *dreamy eyed* i'm having too much fun with this XD

Honestly, Stunning piece zoyu! Cant wait to read more!

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Mitali Gupta

@SleepyPsycho

IF-Dazzler

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Posted: 7 years ago

#25

Res

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Unress

Sorry,Sorry for being this late but never the less here I am.

Oreo,dil jeet liya wapas,you did magic!

You laid out all emotions be it sad,pain,physical proximity,care,concern and the fun elements with utter perfection.

I loved it so much that I lack words to say how much I loved it.

I loved how Sumo did not care about treating Shravan while he sans any shirt and how she didn't give a damn about him yelling Ber yo keep distance.Too much fun

The best would be when she is like 'Heart attack'? And he is like what? And then she says ke 'Dil ka Daura aya hai tumhe' LMAOO!

This was epic.

First went high on emotion then high on concern and then loved how both melted for each other.

Over all it was mind blowing.

Update Soon haan?

Edited by SleepyPsycho - 7 years ago

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