NIBIR DRABBLE- FIRST LOVE - Page 3 | Nisha Aur Uske Cousins

mkjr

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Posted: 7 years ago

#21

It was too good plzz write a second part of it will live it

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arviabhigya

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Posted: 7 years ago

#22

I wonder how you do this Mansi !!!!

Each time I sit down to put forth my views on your story and I m at a loss of words😳😳😳

I think you are partly to blame for my laziness in writing comments for u guys😆Writing each comment for you is a task cz it is very difficult to express what your stories make me feel

Now coming to the drabble 😊

Firstly love how you have experimented with your style of writing here😳😳😳

I know for a fact that you are more comfortable in writing long stories or long shots so I must say that you have a tremendous job in conveying your thoughts in such few words here👏👏👏

Beautiful drabble Mansi👏👏👏

Such a heart rendering story😳

Love every bit and aspect of it❤️😳

Love the way you introduced us to the two souls clinging to each other in painThe setting was beautifully described👏👏

Each emotion and nuance was put forth in a such a poetic manner that all you wanted to do was to give a bone crushing hug to our Nibir😳🤗

On one hand you couldnt help but feel Nishu's pain whose resolve to go away from her first love was breaking seeing Kabir in pain❤️ while on the other hand, your heart went out to Kabir who was clinging to Nishu, pleading her to not leave him while he still couldnt fathom why he was in so much pain😳❤️

Loved the last part especially the last few lines❤️

All in all, a perfect drabble which although does make your heart wrench in pain initially, but by the end leaves you smiling❤️

Edited by arviabhigya - 7 years ago

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tasnuva jannat

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Posted: 7 years ago

#23

Superb... 👏
Loved it 😊

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ashveena

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Posted: 7 years ago

#24

It was so beautiful ❤️
Adhoori kahaani 🤔
Loved it so much ❤️
Would love to read more
Thanks for pm 😳

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mansi

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Posted: 7 years ago

#25

Originally posted by: ...Shibu...
Beautiful

thank u betu 😃

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mansi

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Posted: 7 years ago

#26

Originally posted by: alisha17
Superb update

thanks alisha 😆

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mansi

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Posted: 7 years ago

#27

Originally posted by: neha_zamia500
I would be happy if u write lil more.. but that doesn't mean I'm not. I love it. It's was so emotional and I was listening to judai.. so it was more...

thanku zamia 😳

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mansi

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Posted: 7 years ago

#28

Originally posted by: janvi1018
Awesome one Mansi...
Beautifully written...
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thanks janvi 😃

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mansi

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Posted: 7 years ago

#29

Originally posted by: itzanya32
Wow!!!!!
It was awsm...
It was a mixture of all emotions...
Plzzz update one more part of it...
Just loved it...
Do write more...

Thanks for di pm..

thanks anya 😃

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mansi

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Posted: 7 years ago

#30

Originally posted by: itznimi003
Awesome drabble mansi 👍🏼
First time tune itna chhotu sa likha h na...🤣🤣
It was more then beautiful❤️
The background was described so beautifully❤️
The no. Of emotions being in each other's embrace...her love for him...his love which he was not able to recognise...their heart break der pain..unki judaai...the way he put his head on her lap forehead kissall were described verry well...
Can we get another part of it???
I really love your word selection... 👏
Do write more...

thank u nimzi... lets see about the next part 😆

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