SiRa/LakshMila poem:Same Day and Same Time

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Posted: 8 years ago
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A/N:Hello everyone.First time tried a poem,actually updated a poem here for the first time.Well,here I present my simple yet symbolic poem.I have tried to keep the words easy and have also used various personifications.Basically it revolves around SiRa and LakshMila both.The context referred is the day three of them left for exile while Urmi stayed back.Alternatively,one or two lines may refer to one individual or one couple.If you want to ask the meaning,feel free.Do review!

Same day and Same time

It was the same day and same time,
Darkness hath fallen upon Ayodhya's vibrant shine.
The same day and same time,
When the world of love witnessed two of its souls' plight.
The same day and same time,
Things happened with a shrill of dozen cries.
The same day and same time,
Lovers were tested for the sake of everyone's lives.
The same day and same time,
Two doves flew together to the rise of horizon .
The same day and same time,
For one other dove,the sky was a symbol of prison.
The same day and same time,
Two doves flew to signify their love for eternity.
The same day and same time,
For an other dove,the rich grasslands were mere solitary.
The same day and same time,
One followed the other to match each and every step.
The same day and same time,
One left the other to avoid any further crest.
The same day and same time,
Which marked a change in course ofthe flow of rhine.
The same day and same time,
Four of them had to kneel down before Dharma's shrine.
The same day and same time,
The crescent moon had to drown himself in his own dark.
The same day and same time,
Contrary to the sun which among the clouds made its own mark.
The same day and same time,
Love didn't turn back from the danger of beast's growling roars.
The same day and same time,
Restless waves had to refrain herself from moving to the shores.
It was the same day and same time,
Darkness hath fallen upon Ayodhya's vibrant shine.
The same day and same time,
When the world of love witnessed two of its soul's plight.

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Posted: 8 years ago
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Hai. 
It s just wow.  Very simple yet very effective. πŸ˜Š  Loved it. 


One followed other to match each and every step 
One left other to avoid any further crest. 
Just it's touching.  
Nice do write more. πŸ˜Š
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Mili, you are amazing <3
You've portrayed the Divinity of Sita-Ram and Urmila-Lakshman perfectly πŸ˜†πŸ˜†
Hats off, girl :)
Keep writing :)
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Posted: 8 years ago
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nice poem LakshMila but want to know the meaning and reference of line... Lovers were tested for the sake of everyone's lives.and One left the other to avoid any further crest. and Love didn't turn back from the danger of beast's growling roars.The same day and same time,Restless waves had to refrain herself from moving to the shores.and When the world of love witnessed two of its soul's plight.
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: Rex_Ryan

nice poem LakshMila but want to know the meaning and reference of line... Lovers were tested for the sake of everyone's lives.and One left the other to avoid any further crest. and Love didn't turn back from the danger of beast's growling roars.The same day and same time,Restless waves had to refrain herself from moving to the shores.and When the world of love witnessed two of its soul's plight.




Thankyou for reviewing!
This 'lovers were tested' one refers LakshMila.Every act of that exile was a play of destiny.It was jus like a pariksha for Laksh and Mila who were sacrificing their togetherness to put up back all that had fallen in Ayodhya.Everyone's life was affected.
'One left...'
Since Ram was followed by his wife Siya(they signify the pair of doves who flew together),the same time Laksh asked Mila to stay back to see Ayodhya's sake in their absence.
'Love didnt...'referred to Siya's love for Ram.She wasnt afraid
 of the dangers of the forest that she could have possibly faced while accompanying her husband.Also,when Raavan the
 beast,abducted her,she didnt lose hope and showed full faith on Ram.Waves reference in the next line is to Urmila.Charvi's theory,I have read,Lakshman's the moon and Urmila means waves of passion.Of course she would have been restless on learning that she has to live a big time of her life w/o her most loved one.Yet,she made herself strong during crisis.What happens when a high wave comes to the shore?People get affected.Hadnt Mila got such control over herself,Ayodhya would have collapsed immediately.Lakshman would have been affected.So,willingly or unwillingly,those two souls have to sacrifice their love and had to live a 'plight' of loneliness.
I hope I am helpful.
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Thankyou @Bdaygirl @Twinmaddness @shruthiravi 

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Posted: 8 years ago
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Wow Mili this is awesomeπŸ‘πŸΌ
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Originally posted by: LakshMila




Thankyou for reviewing!
This 'lovers were tested' one refers LakshMila.Every act of that exile was a play of destiny.It was jus like a pariksha for Laksh and Mila who were sacrificing their togetherness to put up back all that had fallen in Ayodhya.Everyone's life was affected.
'One left...'
Since Ram was followed by his wife Siya(they signify the pair of doves who flew together),the same time Laksh asked Mila to stay back to see Ayodhya's sake in their absence.
'Love didnt...'referred to Siya's love for Ram.She wasnt afraid
of the dangers of the forest that she could have possibly faced while accompanying her husband.Also,when Raavan the
beast,abducted her,she didnt lose hope and showed full faith on Ram.Waves reference in the next line is to Urmila.Charvi's theory,I have read,Lakshman's the moon and Urmila means waves of passion.Of course she would have been restless on learning that she has to live a big time of her life w/o her most loved one.Yet,she made herself strong during crisis.What happens when a high wave comes to the shore?People get affected.Hadnt Mila got such control over herself,Ayodhya would have collapsed immediately.Lakshman would have beenaffected.So,willingly or unwillingly,those two souls have to sacrifice their love and had to live a 'plight' of loneliness.
I hope I am helpful.

thanks dear ... your explaination help in understanding this poem more deeply
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Mili πŸ€—
You should write Poems more Often .
This is just too Beautiful ❀️


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Posted: 8 years ago
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Mili 
Beautiful yar 
Loved the way u took up both the couples contrasted them
Tested them and played with words , amazingly expressed