New ss-Tere ishq pe mar jawaan-part 4 ,page no.39

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Posted: 8 years ago
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Hey friends ,I'm come up with another story bare with me..it is TS..hope you people like it.i'm looking forward for an amazing response for an even more amazing readers...all the likes and comments,criticism are welcome...

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PROLOGUE...




**THUD**








she not believe her eyes ,what happening infront of her,she run to her father ,where he collapsed with one bullet shot.she had to run to hospital.she want to save her father life.Her life depends on his life.He was already in strecher and ishu slowly ran her blooded hand on his head and face,wishing for her appa life.Her prayers may could bring him back.Her tears were already flowing,her half of dress covered with blood and he constantly calling one name...AMAN...














we are in hospital appa,nothing will happen to you,please appa don't close your eyes look at me,i'm alone in this world appa ,don't leave your daughter,she pleaded her father.she thought may be her pleading bring back to her life.Appa look at me,i won't let anything happen to you.she convincing herself more than him.He is helpless,he want to convey a message to her before he left the world, before he left her daughter...He want his daughter in safe hands.












Her heart was feeling heavier than ever when she saw him being taken to the ICU.Hospital facility take him to the ICU room.she slowly touched the ICU glass window with her fingers..she wiped off her tears.she want to shake her appa to bring back to the world,she want to fight with her appa,tell her secret crushes,share her ice cream with him,tease him for his over protective..






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She felt alone..yes her world start with her father good morning kiss and end with his complaints ,his good night wishes .she felt alone all of a sudden...













Again she looking in to glass window of the ICU,he lay there motionless.The feeling of pain returned as she whispered...wishing he could hear her...








Appa...please come back to your ishu..your daughter need you appa...

she cursed GOD ...again you playing with me..it's not ajoke,are you listening me...why god why ...why you choose me to play your favourite cruel game with me...it's not fair...please save my appa..her heart is breaking in to thousand pieces...


promise me you will marry AMAAN..?

But appa ,subbu?


















My last wish ishu...please make this easy for me to leave you...







He was fighting to breath,his breath struck ,he was no longer to breath. His breath had stopped...


Appa..ishu slumped on the floor...


Ishu...RKB killed your father.. ,he is the one who executed his plan to kill your father..he is the one who responsible for every drop of your tear...he is the one who is responsible for your father death...subbu informed her..


I said destroyed every thing related to RKB...destroy every news, buy the media...

BUT?

But what? it's my order...At any cost ,i dont want her to reach RKB.







I won't leave you RKB...the game is on..



TO BE CONTINUED...


Hope you people like it...




INDEX


PART-1

PART-2
 
PART-3
 
PART-4
 


 




















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Posted: 8 years ago
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jaanu 

interesting start 
sounds like revenge but when IshRa hai 
PYAAR TOH HONA HI HAI,
really looking forward for it dear...

subbu😑,

waiting for ur updates dear...





Edited by Akshatha19 - 8 years ago
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Nice prologue dear 
But please write the name of the person who is talking that will be easy to understand
Will suggest the title soon not getting an apt one.
Edited by cutieruhi - 8 years ago
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Wow super start i think the title should bee 
I love u like i hate u πŸ˜‰
Continue soon 
Thanks for pm πŸ˜³
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waah janani di. suspense thriller types
prologue toh total faadu hai
will wait for next part
update soon
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Wah Janani! Suspense thriller haan.
My title suggestion would be "I hate u" or "I will kill u"πŸ˜†
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double post
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Hey J interesting start,continue soon..
My suggestion(title):
I hate you like ,I love you πŸ˜†
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Hey janani

Iam really sorry for being late it is because was lazy to comment from now promise will be on timeπŸ˜ƒπŸ˜ƒ

Now coming to the story😊

It was very good start with essence of suspense πŸ˜‰πŸ˜‰

Iam very much interested to know the upcoming story..πŸ˜‰πŸ˜‰

The biggest twist is RKB killed Appa  iam shocked 😲😲

reveal the truth soon for that please continue soon..

btw Subbu and Aman πŸ˜‘😑😑

the feeling of Ishu about Appa was beautifully written.πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘

continue soon dear.. will be waiting..

congrats for ur new story..πŸ₯³


Edited by .Jayashree. - 8 years ago
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Jaan will read and comment soon πŸ€—

Unres


This si something beyond my expectation😲.. I am sure it has an underlay.. RKB really killed appa or Ishu is misguided.. 
I loved the way you expressed ishu's state of mind.. This is something different i am reading.. and i am looking forward for it.. 

Regarding title i would suggest

"Dhundli Tasveerey"

Coz nothing is clear as of now.. πŸ˜›

Update soon Jaan πŸ€—
Edited by sakshi.ekansh - 8 years ago