OS: Kaya Palat! final part updated pg 4

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This is an OS penned in a hurry, based on the morning after (the confession! what did you people think?) When Ananya reaches the office with a definite change of outfit...eager to impress her boss turned boyfriend...And Kabir has an agenda of his own for the day!
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"Sajana hain mujhe...sajana ke liye..." Ananya crooned at the top of her voice, trying to colour-coordinate her jewellery with her dress. A tough job, given the fact that she had never given her attire that much importance so far. Indeed, clothes were the bare essentials, and the preferred ones were those that could be located after the laundry with the maximum ease.

"Didi...are you in pain or something? Shall I get you some pudin-hara?" Armaan banged down his book that he had been unsuccessfully trying to read since the past hour or so, "If no, then please stop that yodelling!"

"Why? Am I that bad?" She had finally found a matching shade of lipstick.

"Not just bad, didi. You are random! No connection between one note and the next!"

Armaan braced himself for a verbal rebuke from his sister, but surprisingly she chose to ignore the taunt.

"Really?" She pouted and unpouted trying to normalize the spread of her lipstick, and then delved in her jewellery box in search of a matching dangler.

"Is this good? Does it go with my dress?" She poised the piece to her ear and asked her brother, who rolled his eyes.

"You are impossible! And don't tell me that..." Armaan's eyes finally took in his sister's attire, "You are going to wear a Punjabi dress to office? Ma...!"

Anita came out of the kitchen wiping her hands on a kitchen apron and stood still.

Her daughter in Indian attire? What a surprise! Was something special today? She searched her memory database but couldn't get a single hit. Armaan nudged her.

"Ma...is something wrong with Didi today? Did she get hit on her head or something?"

"I don't know, Son" She replied, tentatively, "Maybe some function in her office, or some traditional day...quite possible, you know!"

"Whatever...but take care that you don't trip and fall somewhere, OK? And don't forget your specs..." Armaan went back to his book with this warning and Anita lapsed in deep thought.

Something was wrong with her daughter. For someone who never cared for what she wore, or her appearance, her daughter had spent a clear hour in grooming herself. And that Punjab dress...

Anita's lips curled in a smile as she remembered the persuasion that went with its purchase.

"Ma..not that please! Totally downmarket!"

"But beta, you need to have these outfits also in your wardrobe...what if you get an alliance from an orthodox family...?

"OK Ma. Go and pay for it. But let me tell you one thing. I am NOT going to wear it anytime!"

And today was unusual. Ananya had worn it on her own and then spent most of her morning in front of the mirror, trying out different combinations of bracelets, hair clips and ear danglers. And not to say anything about the makeup: she had tried about 6 different shades of lipsticks before settling for a cherry red one. And this was unusual for someone who thought that makeup was a waste of time.

Yes, something was wrong with her daughter. Or was it going right after a long time?

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Across the city, Kabir was trying to select an outfit for Ananya.

He had walked in a famous mall of the city, early in the morning and had been accosted by a pretty sales assistant in no time.

"Good morning! How may I help you, Mr Kabir Sharma?"

"Good Morning. I want to buy an outfit...Please help me out!"

"Sure Sir. What sort would you prefer to buy? Western or Indian?"

Kabir looked lost. This was an uncharted area, he had never dared to infringe in, even with Shreya. Darn it. He looked around and his gaze encountered a mannequin.

"Something like that..."

"But that is unstitched material, Sir..."

"Ohhh.." Kabir's face fell. The material was perfect. The salesgirl smiled indulgently.

"No problem, Sir. If you could get us the girl's dimensions, we can get it tailored for you..."

"Sure. I will get the dimensions for you. Which all do you need?

The salesgirl beckoned to her assistant who quickly explained the need.

"Fine, I will get these by today evening. In the meanwhile, can you please reserve the material for me?"

"Sure, Sir. But surely get the dimensions by today evening, otherwise we wont be able to hold on to the material beyond that!"

Kabir nodded his consent and stepped out.

The salesgirl was beaming from ear to ear as she signalled the helper to remove the material and keep it aside. This was the first customer and such a prominent one, it certainly heralded good business for the day.

Kabir in the meanwhile was lost in thought. He had agreed to a task in his enthusiasm, something he had no clue how to go about. For that matter no stringer of his could help him now.

How to get Ananya's dimensions without her knowledge?

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Posted: 8 years ago
Very interesting sagi ...please update the next part soon
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Posted: 8 years ago
Very nice and concept well befitted 👏👏
Ananya's first day after the confession, Wow !!! Would wait to read more how Kabir will get the measurement after all. 😉
Lovely and captivating ⭐️
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Posted: 8 years ago
waiting for kabir to try different things
update soon
this is interesting
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Posted: 8 years ago
When would u be writing its next part Sagi?? 😉 Unstitched material [ROFL] i wl die from laughing, i wish i could see this happening in Reporters! *_*
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Posted: 8 years ago
wowww superb ..👏 do continue soon...
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Posted: 8 years ago

Originally posted by: Sagi.

This is an OS penned in a hurry, based on the morning after (the confession! what did you people think?) When Ananya reaches the office with a definite change of outfit...eager to impress her boss turned boyfriend...And Kabir has an agenda of his own for the day!

-----

"Sajana hain mujhe...sajana ke liye..." Ananya crooned at
the top of her voice, trying to colour-coordinate her jewellery with her dress.
A tough job, given the fact that she had never given her attire that much
importance so far. Indeed, clothes were the bare essentials, and the preferred
ones were those that could be located after the laundry with the maximum ease.


"Didi...are you in pain or something? Shall I get you some
pudin-hara?" Armaan banged down his book that he had been unsuccessfully trying
to read since the past hour or so, "If no, then please stop that yodelling!"


"Why? Am I that bad?" She had finally found a matching shade
of lipstick.


"Not just bad, didi. You are random! No connection between
one note and the next!"


Armaan braced himself for a verbal rebuke from his sister,
but surprisingly she chose to ignore the taunt.


"Really?" She pouted and unpouted trying to normalize the
spread of her lipstick, and then delved in her jewellery box in search of a
matching dangler.


"Is this good? Does it go with my dress?" She poised the
piece to her ear and asked her brother, who rolled his eyes.


"You are impossible! And don't tell me that..." Armaan's
eyes finally took in his sister's attire, "You are going to wear a Salwar suit
to office? Ma...!"


Anita came out of the kitchen wiping her hands on a kitchen
apron and stood still.


Her daughter in Indian attire? What a surprise! Was something
special today? She searched her memory database but couldn't get a single hit. Armaan
nudged her.


"Ma...is something wrong with Didi today? Did she get hit on
her head or something?"


"I don't know, Son" She replied, tentatively, "Maybe some
function in her office, or some traditional day...quite possible, you know!"


"Whatever...but take care that you don't trip and fall
somewhere, OK? And don't forget your specs..." Armaan went back to his book with
this warning and Anita lapsed in deep thought.


Something was wrong with her daughter. For someone who never
cared for what she wore, or her appearance, her daughter had spent a clear hour
in grooming herself. And what she chose to wear now...


Anita's lips curled in a smile as she remembered the
persuasion that went with its purchase.


"Ma..not that please! You know my dress code for office. I prefer smart casuals!"


"But beta, you need to have these outfits also in your
wardrobe...what if you need them to attend some function at work?.?


"OK Ma. Go ahead. But let me tell you one thing. I
may NOT wear that any soon!"


And today was unusual. Ananya had worn it on her own and
then spent most of her morning in front of the mirror, trying out different
combinations of bracelets, hair clips and ear danglers. And not to say anything
about the makeup: she had tried about 6 different shades of lipsticks before
settling for a cherry red one. And this was unusual for someone who thought
that makeup was a waste of time.


Yes, something was wrong with her daughter. Or was it going
right after a long time?


-----


Across the city, Kabir was trying to select an outfit for
Ananya.


He had walked in a famous mall of the city, early in the
morning and had been accosted by a pretty sales assistant in no time.


"Good morning! How may I help you, Mr Kabir Sharma?"


"Good Morning. I want to buy an outfit...Please help me out!"


"Sure Sir. What sort would you prefer to buy? Western or
Indian?"


Kabir looked lost. This was an uncharted area, he had never
dared to infringe in, even with Shreya. Darn it. He looked around and his gaze
encountered a mannequin.


"Something like that..."


"But that is unstitched material, Sir..."


"Ohhh.." Kabir's face fell. The material was perfect. The
salesgirl smiled indulgently.


"No problem, Sir. If you could get us the girl's dimensions,
we can get it tailored for you..."


"Sure. I will get the dimensions for you. Which all do you
need?


The salesgirl beckoned to her assistant who quickly
explained the need.


"Fine, I will get these by today evening. In the meanwhile,
can you please reserve the material for me?"


"Sure, Sir. But surely get the dimensions by today evening,
otherwise we wont be able to hold on to the material beyond that!"


Kabir nodded his consent and stepped out.


The salesgirl was beaming from ear to ear as she signalled
the helper to remove the material and keep it aside. This was the first
customer and such a prominent one, it certainly heralded good business for the
day.


Kabir in the meanwhile was lost in thought. He had agreed to
a task in his enthusiasm, something he had no clue how to go about. For that
matter no stringer of his could help him now.


How to get Ananya's dimensions without her knowledge?



@Sagi : My first OS and thou I liked the concept, too immature for me. But perhaps, suits your age!! 😃
I hav to make an observation thou. The character of Ananya who dislikes a "Punjabi dress" and considers it "downmarket and orthodox" is not likeable at all. That's my POV. Even if u are a NRI, u need to respect the style and attire of Indian women. Calling a Salwar suit, a Punjabi dress is definitely downmarket. I wonder what u would name a Saree of six yards or nine yards? Sabyasachi would definitely be offended just like the women folk of India.

Any outfit that is a traditional one and has been in India for decades needs to be respected and given its due. Maybe you are not familiar with the Lucknow and chikankari Salwar suits that costs a bomb only because of its intricate work.

Your story concept is nice but pl redefine your outlook towards India! 😲
You may not be in the influential category when it comes to writing, but sometimes, attitude is reflected in one's writing.


-Rekha
p.s : I hav made few changes in your OS - to put my point across. I hav no plans of doing this again to anyone in this forum as freedom is one's right. I hav always liked your witty and genuine sense of humor so this post came as a surprise. Enjoi writing...Edited by Danseuse - 8 years ago
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Posted: 8 years ago
Dat was awesome...
Love mein ache acho ki Kaya palat jati hai...
But yaha toh literally dono, Ka-ya palat gaye 😆 😆 ...
Boy on out shopping & girl bzy decking up 😆 hope seeing pretty lady Mr.Sharma doesn't forget to take the measurements...
On second thoughts I really wonder how he gonna do that 😕 😆 ...will he simply ask in most khadoosest voice...or will have to put in some extra effort 😉 😉 😉
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Posted: 8 years ago

Originally posted by: sss97

Very interesting sagi ...please update the next part soon


The current track is so interesting...I plan to update asap
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Posted: 8 years ago

Originally posted by: sss97

Very interesting sagi ...please update the next part soon