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cuteariya

@cuteariya

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+ 5

Posted: 8 years ago

#61

mind blowing update
loll pia dadi 😆
poor pia lost her parent 😭
god that jay jerk 😡
abhiya first meeting was lovely ❤️
that jerk jay still didn't leave chance to impress pia 😡
he sent marriage proposal at pia home 😡
abhay so want to kill him
OMG shocking revelation abhay is vampire 😲
still pia couldn't hate him
hell that jerk jay make MMS of pia disgusting pig 😡
yippee abhay gave her idea & its work 👏
but that jerk try to kill pia 😡
poor pia almost die but thank god abhay came on time
hope he cane save pia
pia was scared to die before letting abhay know abt her feeling to him
what abt this eclipse night? 😕
why abhay was waiting for pia & what he want to do with her? 😕
plz update soon

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R Mifzala R

@rmifzala

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Posted: 8 years ago

#62

hey read ur superb story in a go...just loved it...pls...pm me...really waiting for ur story!!!!!

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Anita

@AnnetteSpring

IF-Dazzler

Posted: 8 years ago

#63

Originally posted by: Purple.shade
Loved the fungi line , lol, and oh yeah , the line where Abhay seems to plot a murder 😆 he always did seem to plot a murder in the show , 🤣
Correct Isha ! 😆

Jey is the big bad wolf , no doubt . Well, ok I guess.. And as usual I hate him :p

Let's see if u r right 😛

The ending did arise my doubts, but nah, I know Abhay loves Pia, and maybe he just wanted to inform her something about the birth thingy which concerned her not him so much, maybe she is a supernatural too 😉

That's quite possible. 😉

& thanks for reading 😊

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Anita

@AnnetteSpring

IF-Dazzler

Posted: 8 years ago

#64

Originally posted by: Supervampire
fab update

Thank U for reading 😃

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aliya

@.Intoxicated.

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+ 2

Posted: 8 years ago

#65

brilliant updt

hahaha pia is adorable, called abhay parisitic idoit😆

lol fungi line

Jeh is🤬 ye kabhi sudhar nae skta... cheap he is

End is suspensefuisul, so abhay doesnt love pia but have have his own motives.. but pia has fallen for him..

eager to know what happens next

plz plz update soon

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Anita

@AnnetteSpring

IF-Dazzler

Posted: 8 years ago

#66

Originally posted by: Dark-Beauty
Outstanding update
o god jeh is a jerk be it supernatural or human
how can he play with a girl dignity?
Unfortunately there are people like Jeh in real life as well.😔

Piya serve him right
hahaha fungi Abhay? Seriously? I think age got him hehehe

Yes you're right , dear 😆

o god piya is going to die? Ab kiya hoga?
Abhay dnt love piya? What is he about piya birth?

Wait a lil , u wud find out.😊

Thanks for the pm
plz continue soon

Thank U for reading and sharing ur view. 😊

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Anita

@AnnetteSpring

IF-Dazzler

Posted: 8 years ago

#67

Originally posted by: bestpasstime
Superb
it is wonderful👏
awww😳 abhiya are fabulous
and thanks for pm😊
u r a superb writer⭐️
waiting for piya's mystery

Thank U for ur lovely comments , dear 😃

U will know of Piya's mystery soon .

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Anita

@AnnetteSpring

IF-Dazzler

Posted: 8 years ago

#68

Originally posted by: Paint.It.BlacK.
This is for the first time I read your story! And oh my! You write extremely well...it's too good!

Really Indu ?
Thanks a lot if U think so. 😃

Is this your first work ?

In a way , yes , coz it is my first work on my fav couple AbhIya.
Other than this , I have written only three one shots , before. Two of which are on DebLan (DWTG) .
So its my first attempt to write something more than a one shot. 😳

I loved the pace with which you have taken the story forward. The manner in which you have showcased Abhay Piya and their relation...the way they met and became friends...was all very different and fresh! I loved it! 😃

I hope I did not make it messy , coz this is not an FF , so things do need to be accelerated. Whenever u find anything inappropriate , do tell me honestly , okay. 😊

Abhay and his truth shocked Piya. I like the way you have described that part. 👏

That part was not at all easy for me. Its a relief to know that you liked it. 😃

And the best thing about your update is --Piya and her sense of humour! I really like it a lot !! 👍🏼

The humour is a cover for my in-experience in writing. 😳 And since U say that U liked it , I am happy that my cover-up is successful. 😃

Abhay's persona is just as intimidating! The climax was suspenseful...and I am really looking forward to see what is in store for Piya n what exactly the truth of her birth and how all that is related to Abhay!

Jeh seems to be a mean guy here.

True. He does not take no for an answer. 😳

P.s. Forgot to mention, I loved both of their dialogues! Good job! 👏

Please continue soon. The story has a new touch n I like it. 😊
Carry on... 👍🏼
thank you for pm dear. :)

Thank U so much for reading and commenting , dear Indu. 😃

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Anita

@AnnetteSpring

IF-Dazzler

Posted: 8 years ago

#69

Originally posted by: bellaaa
Great update ...
Kill that jeh .. urrggghh

OMG ! U sure have killer thoughts ,dear 😆
He will surely be punished. 😳

So what is piya ?? There must be some connection between abhay & piya cousin? ?
Cont soon

Hmmm... The connection is... U will knw soon. 😉

Thank U for reading and sharing ur view.😊

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Anita

@AnnetteSpring

IF-Dazzler

Posted: 8 years ago

#70

Originally posted by: nimisha0001
fungi 🤣 🤣 I love this abhay n pia so cute nd last part was awsm wid suspense. 👍🏼 next asap plz plz send me pm

Thank U for reading dear. 😊

Do be there for the next part.😳

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