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Heyy guys..
yeah! it's me! Akki..
a few days back I posted something in Shivu's shayari's thread...
it was just a random thought on shayari and mohabbat...
and that damn girl appreciated it so much and motivated me for writing a few more so called nazm or shayari...thanks a bunch Shivu.. I will never forget you gal...*hugs*.
well, I myself is a huge fan of shayaris/ghazal/nazm..both Hindi and Urdu.. but never had the guts or talent to write any..
but, now since someone found my work worthy to be shared... I finally wrote a few more lines..
you guys, let me know ur views..whether i should continue writing.. (not necessarily to be posted here.. but in general),... if yes.. i'll post them here one by one..
here are two of my recent shayaris.. please read and comment..
even bashing is allowed.. i support criticism..
if u have suggestions and can tell me how i can improve.. please feel free to post ur views here..
i'll be more than happy with that...
1) kuchh yun ruswa-e-jahan kiya uske dil-e-bekhabar ne...
wo sunata hai apne ishq ke kisse.. meri mohabbat ke raazdaaro ke saamne
2) aaj subh khidki se bahar jhankte hue, phir yaad aayi tarasti hui wo nigah tumhari..
jab kasturi ke 2 adh khile phool mere baalon mein lagaye the tumne...
suno, wo shajar phir mehka hai is baras...
Raazdaar: people, who knows your secrets. Kasturi Kamal: Cherry Blossoms. Shajar: Tree. Ruswa-e-jahan: being dishonored in front of world..
please let me know.. how was it..?
please hit the like button and leave ur comments...
and don't worry this thread won't affect FF/SS updates.. LOL
love you all..
-Akki
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