Abhigya SS - Vulnerable - PART 7 UPDATED May1st Pg16 - Page 9

Oh P!

Okay - you nearly have me in tears over this - no really - this wasn't a sex scene, or a love-making scene - it was SO much more than that.

"Abhi's heart dropped. You did this to her. You convinced her she was ugly. You made her hate herself. Regret buried itself in his heart like a knife. No words could take back what he had said. But maybe actions could make her forget."


#wipesawayatear

You are making it damned difficult not to love Abhi you know.


This was perfection. This was you as a writer, tugging on every damn heart string I have - every thought Pragya had, was echoing in my mind, making me close my eyes and peek through just to read the next line, and I LOVED how you didn't make this older Pragya some sort of sex-kitten or vixen - I loved how you made her real.

I loved that I could feel the palpable fear that she was unworthy, I loved that Abhi could feel it too,and that he recognised his role in creating those hesitant thoughts and I loved even more that he sought to fix them, with that adorable trademark 'off' that is somehow achingly sweet here.

You know what I loved the most though. I loved that it was him. Rakish, roguish, Abhi, the rockstar, the sex symbol for God knows how many women, showing Pragya, sensible, put together, OCD wala Pragya what sex is -what life is - messy, embarrassing, soul shaking ecstasy.

Oh I adored this P, I really did. It somehow reminded me of what real relationships are about, awkward firsts and the one person you are comfortable sharing them with.

Much Love,
A Edited by advena - 9 years ago

*giddy with excitement*

I'm not sure if they should be doing this.. I mean they've been apart, estranged, for 10 months so to engage in a sexual activity is very risque. And then we have Pragya who seems rather.. forward, for want of a better word. But I guess it does make this story different than the other ones. Wonderful read, I hope you're enjoying writing this as much as us readers enjoy reading it! 

Edited by valschanya - 9 years ago

RANI!! 😲 Maradala!! 😆

Originally posted by: -mina-

Holy already!! Res!! 

FANTASTIC

Every syllable is perfection and I am so happy

Yay!!! Great great work mylove!! Thank you :)

Thank you Mina!! 🤗 As usual I have my own doubts all the time about what I write but so glad you liked it. First chapter in a while that you got to read in full. 

Originally posted by: IamMeethu

RANI! oh my.. this was really hot. I need to read from the beginning, but I have nasty habit of skipping to the ehem scenes☺️

Lovely! thank you for sharing this. Fab work. Please.. I request of you... more of THIS😈

Aashna! You bad girl! Go back and read in full now 😆😆 Thank you for reading though and I am so glad you liked it 😃 And what do you mean by "THIS" missy? Please elaborate 😆😆

Originally posted by: Preeah

Res...

Gonna hate me for posting so many res'es, but I'm determined to reply to all the chapters and saving the spot will be a good reminder! 😳

Res! 😉

Originally posted by: rbb1

Really good update beautifully written well done cannot wait to read more

Originally posted by: nilmi

Its too hot to handle...specially in the office...awesome work...

Thanks Nilmi! 😳 Hope your coworkers didn't see your screen! 

Originally posted by: simsim25

Wow!

That was so hot! I loved it so much!

Gonna read it again!

This is fabulous! <3

Thanks Simsim!! 😃😃 Glad you enjoyed 😃

Originally posted by: sudanindia2014

Rani it is amazing , so well written ..you managed to merge emotions and physical desires so well ..those two are making love not just sex..and thank you so much for using " chashmish " I love this nickname so much and I was always thinking that he will use it when they are finally in love but with the new name fuggy " I also start to love this name but not as much as chashmish " I do not think we will have that in the show so thank you for giving this moment to us " to me at least "  

Thank you so much Nuha! That's what I was going for - to show that it's more about the emotional than the physical for them. I'm glad you noticed the nickname Chashmish. The moment Abhi finally says Chashmish instead of Pragya is when one more barrier between them is knocked down. I don't think Chashmish is coming back in the show either, which is a shame because it has a nice counterpart "kishmish" which "fuggy" doesn't have.

Originally posted by: HARNIM

RAANI THIS WAS REALLY GOOD

thankyou for the update 

and yes i can't wait to read what happens next 

please update soon

Thanks Nimmi! Glad you liked it! 😃

Originally posted by: khushi_shankar

Wow! Really nice story! Do update soon :)

You write so well. The last two parts made me blush so much! I am still blushing while writing this update

Thank you Khushi! Hope you've stopped blushing 😆 Happy you liked it 😃

Originally posted by: MarGan

You've taken me for a ride with them😉...I've enjoyed a lot👏...Thank you for Update & the PM😊...

Next Update Soon,please😳...

Originally posted by: advena

Oh P!

Okay - you nearly have me in tears over this - no really - this wasn't a sex scene, or a love-making scene - it was SO much more than that.

"Abhi's heart dropped. You did this to her. You convinced her she was ugly. You made her hate herself. Regret buried itself in his heart like a knife. No words could take back what he had said. But maybe actions could make her forget."


#wipesawayatear

You are making it damned difficult not to love Abhi you know.


This was perfection. This was you as a writer, tugging on every damn heart string I have - every thought Pragya had, was echoing in my mind, making me close my eyes and peek through just to read the next line, and I LOVED how you didn't make this older Pragya some sort of sex-kitten or vixen - I loved how you made her real.

I loved that I could feel the palpable fear that she was unworthy, I loved that Abhi could feel it too,and that he recognised his role in creating those hesitant thoughts and I loved even more that he sought to fix them, with that adorable trademark 'off' that is somehow achingly sweet here.

You know what I loved the most though. I loved that it was him. Rakish, roguish, Abhi, the rockstar, the sex symbol for God knows how many women, showing Pragya, sensible, put together, OCD wala Pragya what sex is -what life is - messy, embarrassing, soul shaking ecstasy.

Oh I adored this P, I really did. It somehow reminded me of what real relationships are about, awkward firsts and the one person you are comfortable sharing them with.

Much Love,
A

Edited by putturani - 9 years ago

Awesome update. Please con't soon.

Originally posted by: valschanya

*giddy with excitement*

I'm not sure if they should be doing this.. I mean they've been apart, estranged, for 10 months so to engage in a sexual activity is very risque. And then we have Pragya who seems rather.. forward, for want of a better word. But I guess it does make this story different than the other ones. Wonderful read, I hope you're enjoying writing this as much as us readers enjoy reading it! 

You're right, practically speaking, they really shouldn't be doing this. But since when have our beloved Abhigya been practical? 😆 I conceived Pragya as someone who feels like she doesn't have much more to lose in this marriage, but as both of us know, she's a little naive. And I did really enjoy writing it. This was one story that just wouldn't get out of my head so I had to write it.

Originally posted by: Diahh

RANI!! 😲 Maradala!! 😆

UFF!! What shall I say!! Mindblowing is the only word that comes to my mind!! 😳

It was beautiful!! And so hot!! ☺️ 😆 I loved how you made Abhi realize Pragya's insecurities and how he understood him being responsible for it and trying to make up for it. 

I love this story Rani!! You are a fabulous writer!!

Lots of love to you!! Waiting for the next part..

So beautifully written 👏!!!  Really hot ... but tastefully done!!!! Loved it!!!!

Hi Rani! Have i replied here before? I don't remember. If not, i owe you a more comprehensive comment - sometime when i get around to re-reading it. For now, i will limit my comment to the last update.

I love how you have woven their emotions through their actions. Her aching vulnerability to him; his gnawing need to heal the one he has hurt the most. Each of their actions brings these facets out. And that my friend, is powerful writing.

I am not a big fan of smut for the sake of it. Not that i am a prude (or at least, i like to think i am not one 😆). But because sex, or its corollary - love making, is an extremely powerful narrative tool. But unfortunately majority fictions use it just for the heck of it. Just to have some sleaze in the story. However, when its used as a narrative device, it can rock your boat. And you have been doing so with this tale. 👏

And - i just have to say this. Your writing is very ... polished. The care you take, the love you pour into the craft just shines through. Very well done Rani. And please - do keep writing.