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Hey there! Yes SOME cliches are fun but what I meant when I said that "I expect you tale to be very different coz of the unique title" is that when I read "Berries & Vodka" and the first chapter the thoughts that went through my mind are as follows:
Khushi is obviously a normal middle/lower class girl with a humdrum existence. I thought that maybe she and Arnav meet and that he shows her a totally different life, opens her up to new experiences, makes her realise that there is a whole other world beyond marrying and producing babies. And sometime during this interesting journey they fall in love. Hence the title Berries and Vodka (from what he makes her indulge in and taste).
In no way did I mean to pressure you. You being the author have the full rights to take this story forward as you deem fit and I am willing to read it as it's interesting. Was just giving my POV.
Coming to CH 3.
Yup this font is much better! Thanks for acting on my sugeestion!
Oh there is a secret well-wisher in the office for our dear Khushi. A part of me wants it to be Arnav but I know it ain't possible. Was lovely to read her experiences in the 2 months that she has been working. Glad to see that La has taken her under her wing. But Buaji is being a pain in the bum. Ufff, these silly girls with the shallow need to show off. Gooo Khushi, be super indifferent and super efficient and show them all what you are made of. Whoa Payal (WAIT, you haven't given her a name yet, Payal is Khushi's jiji na???) has arrived and the good thing is that Khushi will get some distraction at home as well. Seriously what is up with Preeto??? Loved Khushi's comeback at that! Felt so sad reading how low she feels that night. You described her thoughts and the whole gamut of emotions she undergoes from loneliness to sadness to despair and finally hopelessness very beautifully.
La notices something is wrong with our heroine. Good for her, God knows that Khushi definitely needs people who look out for her. Poor girl has way too many issues already. Reading about Khushi all dull and drab really pulls me down as well. Wooohooo to Akash for telling it like it is to La. ME likey! WHAT THE????? How does Akash know Payal????? Since when??? Boy there are so many mysteries here!!! The convo between Arnav and Anjali was sweet. But again it made me very curious as to who this woman in Arnav's life was that he is still so affected by it? Is it Sheetal??? Arnav's concern about Akash was very endearing... Can't wait to see/read what happens next.
Thanks for the PM.
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