****!!!! Biskoot Begum!! π€£*edited*
This OS for me dwindles between the current irritated Parth and the future one, who'd be waiting to catch a glimpse of her subconsciously, wait for her to give him that smile she always has on her face, whenever she sees him, and kiss her when she doesn't act the way he expects and instead pulls away, going into her shell and avoiding him.
Biskootiya!!! π€ Aa, gale laag ja, mere! So very well written.
The basketball court scene portrayed his distraction, caused by his thoughts involuntarily straying to the girl he hates. She has sneaked her way into his brain like a virus, and that's what he has been diagnosed with right now.
His impatience to see if she's back, is so raw and complicated. Am saying, raw, not simple. Because his feelings are a web of mixed ones, that are the result of different situations he has witnessed, regarding her.
One point sticks out about his Impatience. And that is he wants to scold her for being out so late, and taunt her about her morale. He wants to stay angry at her and revive that hate which is slowly dissipating.
Parth isn't one to avoid. And yes, he is still human to consider, even for a second, to want to disappear like vapour. But he doesn't let it cloud his mind again and bother. Because his subconscious doesn't allow him to ponder more over it, and rather makes him fight it, face it.
He has started expecting Vidushi's presence whether he likes it or not. And you described it so beautifully here. *pulling you in for a hug again* π But his expectancy isn't at all conscious, in fact, he makes a conscious effort to not let this involuntary thing bother him.
Believe it or not, she has helped him. Even if it was by making him her boyfriend for a month, in exchange for taking is pills regularly and as prescribed, just so he could be healthy again.
There was nothing more I hated than losing control of myself.And today seemed to defy every hold I had on every cell of my being.
This line is exactly what he is. π But it's all subtle with him. Not like Randhir, who blatantly declares it to the world with his actions. Yet the latter has a subtle side too, but it is not overpowering like his showy side.
I had heard that one since the time I sat on the bench but I was sure this time someone or something had to intervene to make it last a little longer and sound slightly sharper.
How the hell do write such stuff, eh?? *staring wide eyed and reading the line again. And again. And again.* I can't stop reading it repeatedly. This makes him sound so observant. So perceptive. So in sync with nature. And in sync with his hearing sense. This is the magic of ancient martial arts. They do not preach violence but to be one with yourself.
Parth has a turmoil inside which he voluntarily doesn't want to let go of, while he still has a bit of him that is in sync with him, sometimes. Mind you, am saying sometimes. Because he is still not one with himself and that's my opinion, for if he was truly one with himself, he would've let go of the past and accepted it along with the present. And not have to put up a facade to hide his emotions regarding his past. *shaking my head in disbelief at myself* Am saying too much and without thinking. Sheesh!
The cat and rat line was hilarious! π€£ Vidushi knows how to hit back!! You go, girl! π€£
And Parth trying hard to keep the conversation going, without having to reveal his own confusion to being here at this time of night, and going with the most hilarious of approach to get her frightened, only to have her turn her smug look on and crash his hopes was epic! π€£ π€£
I loved how Parth expected her usual hot lines and unwanted compliments for him, while she proved him wrong by pulling back and walking away.
But the next para made my eyebrows shoot up in surprise. Yeah! He kissed her?! π€£ *falling on my bed laughing* When all else fails, he kisses her!! π€£ Heeheee... Can't stop giggling! π
Why wasn't she kissing me back? Where was her fierce hunger for me ?
Fierce hunger?! π€£ Oh shoot me now! So he knows how Vidushi kisses, eh! π I guess he wasn't so inebriated to ignore her ways of kissing him back, while he assaulted her lips and mouth with his own, "thinking of Arpita." Even if he had imagined kissing Arpita, I am very sure, Vidushi kissed him way differently from Arpita! π
and trailed it along her fingers before lifting her arm up and planting it over the wall and next to her head.
You don't know how much I love this particular action! π βΊοΈ Evergreen!
and she was now smiling at me.
Mixed feelings here. She liked it. Very much liked. But still didn't kiss him back. Because it was him kissing her and she didn't want it to be another mistake of his. So she stayed passive, rather enjoying his lips playing on her and his tongue tasting every inch of her mouth.
"Damn it",I cursed under my breath, feeling the pulse rise after looking at her mouth form a C.
This made me freaking break into a wide grin! π Lubb Dub. Lubb Dub. Eh! *waggling my eyebrows at Parth, who huffs and rolls his eyes and looks away shaking his head is disbelief*
And now her grin got my head spinning as I craved for it rather than cringe at it.
Aren't you getting a little chummy here, baby boy?? π Craving? Progress, bachcha!π See these two lines, I've quoted makes me think about the future, and not connect with his current irritated state on the show. Wish this happens on the show.
I begged to know what had taken over me in matter of few hours.
You missed her, doofus! π€ I ain't no psychiatrist to deduce that! π₯±
No, I was baffled by myself.
Why, the confusion has set in, at last, people! *walking like I own the place*π
I made no attempt to stop her this time probably because I didn't know what I could do in the next moment.
Revelation!! Get this baby boy some chocolates, why don'tcha, lads! And some whiskey too! Time to celebrate, eh!π€ͺ
I couldn't hide the feeling of satisfaction that washed over me.Neither could I stop the nagging questions bursting in my head.Those could wait for another day but tonight I knew I was going to replay this kiss a million times in my head.Running a hand through my hair I quietly set forth for my room.
I couldn't fight the satisfaction wash over me either, baby boy! ππ You outdid yourself, mahn!
Nagging questions? **** it! They're you enemy right now, coz a part of your brain is a b****, what do you know! π€£
Replay the kiss?!?!?! Am I hearing right, Baby boy?? *turning to Parth who was directing me with a withering look* What?! That's what your thoughts read, Mach-- No, Baby boy! *smirking at him*
Yeah, yeah, run, run! And go bald! π€£
Love you, Biskootiya! π€
I hope this suffices! Mwh..
Edited by PhoenixRadar - 9 years ago
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