REFLECTION. (MDT series FF) part 2 added

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Posted: 9 years ago
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This is my new FF .I will be continuing others too but this one I felt desperate to write.

Here is brief of story .

 Here Raman would be helping a woman.Who is known to be a prostitute.Story is why Raman is helping her and how he is going to help her.He will leave his job,position and family to help her.Everyone in house will misunderstand him and go against him.


If you are expecting any positive Ishra scene in this one as you can expect in other stories of mine I am sorry your expectations are ruined.There wont be even a single positive scene between them in whole story.

It is just prolongation of missunderstanding to peak.

I can think only logical way and being emotional is not my way and neither for my stories.So read it only if you feel you can understand things which are not just emotional.


Thanking You 

    Worst writer of the forum.

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Posted: 9 years ago
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part 1

Scene starts with Ishita coming back from clinic in her car.She is still not in talking terms with Raman and she is hating him for suspecting her having affair with Mani.

It is around 11'O clock and  she had attended an emergency case just now and heading back home.

It was raining heavily and suddenly her car gets to trouble and is not moving.It is in repair niw.

Lucky to her it just stopped near a city bus stop.

She goes to shelter and first thing she saw is few women standing other side.They were not waiting for bus.Their wait is different.But she could see a woman who is not among them she is standing differently with a gap.She was desperate and tensed she need something.May be  a coustomer for that day.

Then Ishita hears a bus conductor telling loudly "Mayur Vihar "Ishita's attention goes to the bus and it is the last bus for day so she board it to go home.

In home situation is same as usual.Even though Raman knew Ishita and Mani helped him to get that post he don't have clear idea over why they did it.He is not ready to believe their intention is to help him and Ishita is not clearing himself.

Even if Raman want to think positively he could not forget the words Ishita said "I love you .Mujhhey mera pati aur beti ko chodkar tumhaarey pass aa janey chahiyen thaa."

He wold be ready to forgive her if it is just him.But she took even Ruhi's name there.How could she even think about leaving Ruhi  he is not speaking toher either.Even though they stay in same room they are completely different individuals.Who don't care about others presence.

Raman had accepted that Ishita loves Mani and he is not blaming her for that and he no more care about her.His only matter of concern is Ruhi if he feels Ruhi is neglected he will not be tolerating it.

He sees Ishita coming home and he neither asked any question or she felt she has to tell him something.

There is just a face of disguist in their both eyes on each other .Which they feel is correct for other.

Then Raman starts watching TV and kept it in full sound.Not letting Ishita to sleep.For his she does'nt exist in that room.Her love confession for Mani changed his love to hatred for her .

Then next day it was same for Raman they will not acknowledge others presence ion their room.They are not even pretending that everything is normal between them it is just a cold shoulder.

Then it is around night Raman was sitting in the same bus stop where Ishita was there last night.He was stopped by cops for drunk driving and so he is not driving back .

He just sat their blankly remembering Ishita's words which are killing him inside.

He is barely sitting there it does'nt make much difference for him either he is in home or not.Everyone would have slept by now and obviously he thinks no one would be waiting for him at home.

Raman was sitting there.Then women who were stanbding there look at him and assume he wants a lady for night but Raman showed no interest.

Then  he comes back to sensec hearing some sound or arguments arounfdhim which caught his attention.

Women there were pushing the lady who was standing separate and she was begging them not to do.

She was desperate and need something.She was sent out of there and one more hour passed and time is night 1'O clock and Raman looks at his mobile but there were no signs of any missed call or message .

He smiles and keeps it back in his pocket.He sees around and there is no one there and everyone went.He could see that lady standing in distance and  was drowning in rain.Raman feels pity for her and goes near her.She does'nt look like othe rladies he saw there before.She looks little educated and from a good family.She was fair but she don't know how to sell herself and was subdued by others.

Raman goes to her and offers her his coat to protect herself from rain.

She immediately starts pleading him to take her .She was desperate she need some thing and Raman goes away from there scared and sits back in bus stop.

Lady follows him she want to sell herself that day.She comes near him and was standing there.She was trying her best to impress Raman with her beauty but Raman could see disgrace in her face disgrace on herself.

Raman finally speaks "Pehlee baar hain naa?Tum uss ladkiyoin mey sey nahen hon?"

Lady was shocked as Raman finaly spoke to her "Sir please sir .Amin un ladkiyon sey aadhey paison mey bhee aaongi.Bass mujhey mauka deejiyen."

Raman understood its desperation for money."Raman takes his wallet and gives her money ."

She interpreted him to be taking her for job but Raman has no such inttentions Lady "Kahan jaana hain saab?"

Raman was shocked as she took him wrong .

Raman "Main aisa aadmee nahen hun.Main bass paisey diyan tumhaara madad aa sakey .Tum dikhney mey acchey khandaan kee lag rahen hon."

Lady was in tears hearing this she needed money and she got it but she din't expected such thing hear.

She was crying out loud.

Rama n"Kyo ro rahen hon?Tumhaarey liyen bhee koi nahen hain kyaa yahan?"

Lady "Sab log they sir.Lekin abh sirf ek bacha hain.Mera beta hospital mey hain.Beemar hain aur merey pass ussey ilaach karwaaney key liyen bhee paisey nahen hain sir.Mera beta ka zindagee ka sawaal hain sir.Bahuth koshish kee sir sabsey madad mangee kissye ne madad nahen kee."

Lady "Kuch bhee kaam karney tayyar thee lekin koi kaam nahen de rahan hain.Aaj main k.."

Raman understood her intentions she was trying to keep her son healthy."Raman felt pity for her and gives her more money."

Lady leaves from there as she got money.Raman just looks at her with no emotion in his face.

He is in same situation now.He is bearing deciet of his wife just for her daughter.

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Posted: 9 years ago
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diff frm ur regular stores...update is intrstng...
pm me fr nxt..
cant see raman lik tht...
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Posted: 9 years ago
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nice
good start
kabse wait kar rahi thi aapke update
thanks
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Posted: 9 years ago
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y u called worst writer in this forum u r not.
according to me u r the best writer in this forum.
mein humesha aap ke os ss ka wait kar thi.
hu i love u r every os ss .
u r the simply best.
so plz don't say it again. i know it does hurt u write something and want people like it but if don't response like u want it hurt.
sorry hurting u .
thanks fr giving nice awsome stories
u r bestEdited by ishra123 - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Vikas...glad to read something different on the forum...raman is a wonderful man...wow
Update soon
or ye signature kya likha hai..its not buddy...plsss


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Posted: 9 years ago
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part 2


Scene starts  with where it ended in last part.Raman was sitting in busstop.He is thinking about Ishita's words where she said she has to leave Her husband and daughter and come to him.

He gets angry and hits with his fist to the bench he is sitting and it starts bleeding but he is not in mode to recogonize his physical pain he is going through.

Then he remembers the lady who got ready to sell herself for her son.

Then he sat there whole night looking at falling rain and empty roads.

Then next morning scene starts with Raman going back home in taxi.As he entered his room he could see Ishita sleeping peacefully and  he could do nothing but smile with disguist.

Then Mrs Bhalla enters their room as Raman was taking his clothes for bath.

Mrs Bhalla "Tum raath bhar khana  thaa .Mujhye nahen patha tum ghar nahen aaya."

Ishita woke up by voice of Mrs Bhalla .She saw Raman with towel in his hand.

Raman "Dossth key ghar gayan thaa."

Mrs Bhalla "Tumhaara coat kahan gaya."

Raman remembering that he gave it to that lady to avoid complication simply say.

Raman "Shaayad wahen bhool gayan hoga.Aap yahan?"

Mrs Bhalla "Kuch nahen .Tum subaha aatheybhuen dekhar poochney aayen."

She leaves from there.Ishita sees Raman standing before her and Raman  has feeling of disguist in his face over her.He was not there whole night and she din't even bother to call him or know about his where abouts he know he is equally wrong as he din't inform in home.He expected worser than this from Ishita .

Raman "Neend ache aayen hogaa main nahen thaa na yahan yaa raath bhar busy thee phone meykissey sey baath karthey."

Ishita din't answer him

 Raman gets ready and goes back to office he is tired as he spent a sleepless night .

He looks weak but he is not interested in drama and he leaves from there.

He goes to office and Ishita goes to her clinic.

Then scenes starts at night as Ishita was going home she sees lady waiting in bus stop and she have Raman's coat over her.She was waiting there to tell thank's to Raman.

Ishita is sure it is Raman's coat and she coulod recogonize even in sleep.

She walks away from there and watches her from distance and then she see Raman's car coming and Raman stops there to speka to lady.

Raman walks to her and she is having different face now.She is not tensed any more and feelings were of in dept .

Raman "Abh kaisa  hain tumhaara beta?"

Lady "Theek hain sir.Aapney madad nahe kiyya hotha tho shaayad main kabhee ilaach bhee nahen kar patheee."

Lady "Sir main aapka aisaan kabhe nahen bhoolungi."

Raman "Koi baath  nahen .Jaantha hun tum apney betey key liyen yeh karney tayyar ho gayen hon.Lekin tumney socha nahen kee tumhaara beta kyaa sochega jab ussey patha chalega kee usske maa aisa kaam karthee thee."

Lady "Jaanthee hun sir lekin naukare kahan milegee hum logon ko.Kaahan bhee jaathey hain log ka nazar aisa hee hotha hain sir.Akeley ladkee mey unlogon ko who diktha hain lekin lissey ko ek maa ya Beti nahen dikhthee saab."

Raman "Theek hain main tumhey naukari doonga.Tumhaara naam kyaa hain."

Lady "Saraswathi sir."

Raman "Yeh card tumhaarey pass rakho aur jab tumhaara beta theek ho jaayega mujhye phone kardena tumhey naukari mey laga doonga." Giving her his visiting card.

Raman then gices her little money.

S "Kyaa kam hain sir."

Raman "Mera city key bahaar ek ghar hain.Main wahan kabhee jaatha nahen hun .isliyen dekhney key liyen koi nahen hain.Tumhey wahan harr rooj cleaning karnee hain uss ghar mey loi problem ho tho mujhe bathaaana hain."

She then gives his coat backt o him and Raman leaves from there.Ishita was seeign all this from distance.

She assumed Raman spent last night with her and he was doing illegitimate things.She has tears in her eyes and she rushes to home.

Raman was already in room and he is sleeping  or trying to sleep.

Ishita comes there and "Aapka coat lekey aaye aap."

Raman "Dosthe key pass thaa lekey aaya kahen chodkey nayan aaya hun."

Ishita "Kounsa doosth hain aapka.Jho aap raath bhar usskey pass they."

Raman "Issey tumhaara kyaa mathlab.Tum yeh sawaal kyon poochrahen hon.Mainey tumhey kabhee poocha kyaa tum raath ko kissey phone karthee hon din mey kisskey saath kitney waqt bithaathe hon.Tho tum bhee merey baarey mey poochna bandh karon."

Raman "Main kissey key bhee saath thaa jho mujhey samjah skthey hain.Tum tho uss laayak nayen rahen tho tumhye bathaaney ke bhee jaroori nahen hain."

Ishita was hurt by this words and Raman closes his eyes to sleep.

Edited by SAKIV-RAM - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
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a very different story... looking forward to read more
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awesome thought sakiv loving it...truly practical logical story...keep it up👏👏
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woww nice tono taraf aag barabar lagi hai ab ishita samje ga ki aap jis sr pyar karto ho uski kise aur shat dekhkar kaisa lagta hai wo bhi to zoot bolti thi zab wo mani ke saat bahar rehti thi ha reason alag tha. raman bhi to sahi hai. he just trying to help someone thanks