Originally posted by: spontaneousmini
Reread your updates while waiting egarly for the next.. was wondering abt-----
Chapter 11- whats the story about the angry bruise? why was he mad at her and aggressive??.. is there a reason behind this action or does it go unexplained? if she was awesome why was he mad? and why is Kalpi so sad? what happened dat night for her to make this decision to go to him one last time before she leaves him.
Read Chap 13- completed update- just wow.. this is getting better.
No marriage card played yet?
OMG... there still more storm to come??
Lol the story behind the angry bruise is that he was aggressively passionate. Just wanted to basically highlight that as much as he is in control and stops, he is struggling.
With him being angry, he is not angry in particular, just a general anger as he recognizes that he is starting to care, by missing her, worrying for her, hence his last sentence that she is sneaking into his heart.
Their making out has changed, first she was a follower, then she became more active by doing wht he did, hence making her more aware, but it was still on his dictate. Tht night she voiced wht to do, playing a sort of leading role. Taking ownership of the emotions, passion that night. Making it more difficult to hide behind him. Hence her reflection makes her realise tht she has fallen for him.
She is sad because she knows him, knows how fickle he is when it comes to women and sex. She decides to end it, fearing how her heart will handle another week of intimacy between them. She suddenly wakes up realizing that she is not only going to lose the challenge but also her heart, but her fear being him finding out and not caring.
Should I add some sentences to the chapter. I am guessing I was not very clear in what I wanted portrayed. It is just that I have been updating when my mind is on overdrive.
Edited by angelpureness - 9 years ago
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